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Reviewer: Valereee ( talk · contribs) 21:30, 8 August 2015 (UTC)
Hi! I'm starting this review. This will be my first GA review, so I've asked an experienced reviewer to give me some oversight/guidance.
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Hi, Jonas! There are a couple of close paraphrases from sources. In the section Causation/Evolution, the paragraph is pretty close to the referenced source at BPDfamily.com. Ditto in the Causation/Neurobiology section -- close paraphrasing from the source at ns.umich.edu. (If you run a copyvio package like https://tools.wmflabs.org/copyvios/, you'll also find a site called blackhorseequestrian that has obviously copied the entire article at some point into a spam page, so you can ignore that one.) I am willing to keep reviewing, but we won't be able to pass it without fixing these two paragraphs. How would you like to proceed? valereee ( talk) 13:52, 10 August 2015 (UTC)
sciencedaily reports on
and also on "An unexpected way to recover from a breakup"
-- Cherubino ( talk) 04:29, 11 August 2015 (UTC)
Jonas, great! Okay, so on to the review criteria. First is well-written. I see a few issues, but those are probably easier for me to just go through and deal with instead myself rather than detailing them here so you can go make the edits, so I'm going to go ahead and do that now. valereee ( talk) 09:56, 12 August 2015 (UTC)
This article centers on the clinical aspects of a broken heart ranging from the most common ( uncomplicated grieving) to the very rare (broken heart syndrome/Takotsubo cardiomyopathy).
Missing from this range are the intermediate points of depression and emotional trauma. The most significant clinical consideration of a broken heart is acute depression. The most common reason individuals seek therapy is a broken heart.
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14:21, 12 August 2015 (UTC)
Bereavement means a period of mourning after a death [ Merriam Webster].
Grieving is the broader and more conventional term covering broken relationship, family deaths, loss of pets. We generally don't bereave our high school sweetheart.
Additionally, researchers have suggested that the term bereavement be used to refer to the fact of the loss; the term grief should then be used to describe the emotional, cognitive, functional and behavioral responses to the death. What is described under the heading of bereavement are aspects of the latter.
see:
|last1=Zisooki|first1=Sidney|last2=Shear|first2=Katherine
|title=Grief and bereavement: what psychiatrists need to know
|journal=World Psychiatry|date=2009 Jun|volume=8|issue=2|page=67–74
The subhead should be changed to Uncomplicated grief or Grief (uncomplicated) .
I'd also suggest making it part of the psychology section. Wiki-psyc ( talk) 16:35, 12 August 2015 (UTC)
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Reviewer: Valereee ( talk · contribs) 21:30, 8 August 2015 (UTC)
Hi! I'm starting this review. This will be my first GA review, so I've asked an experienced reviewer to give me some oversight/guidance.
valereee (
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21:30, 8 August 2015 (UTC)
Hi, Jonas! There are a couple of close paraphrases from sources. In the section Causation/Evolution, the paragraph is pretty close to the referenced source at BPDfamily.com. Ditto in the Causation/Neurobiology section -- close paraphrasing from the source at ns.umich.edu. (If you run a copyvio package like https://tools.wmflabs.org/copyvios/, you'll also find a site called blackhorseequestrian that has obviously copied the entire article at some point into a spam page, so you can ignore that one.) I am willing to keep reviewing, but we won't be able to pass it without fixing these two paragraphs. How would you like to proceed? valereee ( talk) 13:52, 10 August 2015 (UTC)
sciencedaily reports on
and also on "An unexpected way to recover from a breakup"
-- Cherubino ( talk) 04:29, 11 August 2015 (UTC)
Jonas, great! Okay, so on to the review criteria. First is well-written. I see a few issues, but those are probably easier for me to just go through and deal with instead myself rather than detailing them here so you can go make the edits, so I'm going to go ahead and do that now. valereee ( talk) 09:56, 12 August 2015 (UTC)
This article centers on the clinical aspects of a broken heart ranging from the most common ( uncomplicated grieving) to the very rare (broken heart syndrome/Takotsubo cardiomyopathy).
Missing from this range are the intermediate points of depression and emotional trauma. The most significant clinical consideration of a broken heart is acute depression. The most common reason individuals seek therapy is a broken heart.
Wiki-psyc (
talk)
14:21, 12 August 2015 (UTC)
Bereavement means a period of mourning after a death [ Merriam Webster].
Grieving is the broader and more conventional term covering broken relationship, family deaths, loss of pets. We generally don't bereave our high school sweetheart.
Additionally, researchers have suggested that the term bereavement be used to refer to the fact of the loss; the term grief should then be used to describe the emotional, cognitive, functional and behavioral responses to the death. What is described under the heading of bereavement are aspects of the latter.
see:
|last1=Zisooki|first1=Sidney|last2=Shear|first2=Katherine
|title=Grief and bereavement: what psychiatrists need to know
|journal=World Psychiatry|date=2009 Jun|volume=8|issue=2|page=67–74
The subhead should be changed to Uncomplicated grief or Grief (uncomplicated) .
I'd also suggest making it part of the psychology section. Wiki-psyc ( talk) 16:35, 12 August 2015 (UTC)