Already fixed the dab link, changed the sources of breakingnews.michaeljackson.com, MJWN changed to another... About TMZ, all the other sites like Entertainment Weekly says "as reported by TMZ.com", I don't think it's necessary, since they only re-post what TMZ said.
Sauloviegas (
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02:10, 1 March 2011 (UTC)reply
The
lead mentions nothing about the song's reception
Other tracks recorded during that time including "Monster" and "Keep Your Head Up" will be also included on the album Michael. - commas after "including" and "Keep Your Head Up", and isn't Michael already released?
It's also been noted because of this, many fans (the same ones who believe the song as well as "Keep Your Head Up" and "Monster") will pass on the album and future projects until this is rectified. - rewrite for better reading. Do not use contractions and brackets
References need cleanup: makes sure that print sources are in italics (eg Billboard), and web sources are not (eg MTV). Add publishers, eg to Billboard refs add
Prometheus Global Media
I'll put the review on hold now; the major thing that concerns me is prose quality, especially in the Critical reception section. The other big thing is that the lead. There is still quite a bit of work to do.
Adabow (
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06:50, 2 March 2011 (UTC)reply
Unfortunately, due to the lack of response and the long hold period, I am failing this article. Give it a decent copy-edit and address all of the specific points I raised, then bring it back to GAN.
Adabow (
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10:44, 19 March 2011 (UTC)reply
Already fixed the dab link, changed the sources of breakingnews.michaeljackson.com, MJWN changed to another... About TMZ, all the other sites like Entertainment Weekly says "as reported by TMZ.com", I don't think it's necessary, since they only re-post what TMZ said.
Sauloviegas (
talk)
02:10, 1 March 2011 (UTC)reply
The
lead mentions nothing about the song's reception
Other tracks recorded during that time including "Monster" and "Keep Your Head Up" will be also included on the album Michael. - commas after "including" and "Keep Your Head Up", and isn't Michael already released?
It's also been noted because of this, many fans (the same ones who believe the song as well as "Keep Your Head Up" and "Monster") will pass on the album and future projects until this is rectified. - rewrite for better reading. Do not use contractions and brackets
References need cleanup: makes sure that print sources are in italics (eg Billboard), and web sources are not (eg MTV). Add publishers, eg to Billboard refs add
Prometheus Global Media
I'll put the review on hold now; the major thing that concerns me is prose quality, especially in the Critical reception section. The other big thing is that the lead. There is still quite a bit of work to do.
Adabow (
talk ·
contribs)
06:50, 2 March 2011 (UTC)reply
Unfortunately, due to the lack of response and the long hold period, I am failing this article. Give it a decent copy-edit and address all of the specific points I raised, then bring it back to GAN.
Adabow (
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10:44, 19 March 2011 (UTC)reply