To help reducing the backlog on old nominations, I will be reviewing this article. GeraldWL 14:39, 18 December 2020 (UTC)reply
Thanks
Gerald; this article has been out there for a while, and I'm excited to get going. I'll make sure to respond to each point.
SerAntoniDeMiloni (
talk) 12:38, 19 December 2020 (UTC)reply
Lead
Suggest combining 2 and 3. GeraldWL 15:42, 18 December 2020 (UTC)reply
Sentence one is supported by two citations. Mind relocating or removing one repetition, if appropriate? GeraldWL 15:42, 18 December 2020 (UTC)reply
Similar cases with sentence 3, as well as "Political asylum" p.2, and all of the other two subs. Double citations also throughout the article. GeraldWL 15:42, 18 December 2020 (UTC)reply
I've gone through the article and removed various double citations. I've left a few, including those following the talk of cheque swindling under the "Political asylum" section. Each of the citations there are for separate articles that relate to separate dates, helping display the point "in multiple newspapers". The remaining double citations are at the end of longer sentences with multiple points to be backed up, or are placed with a not digitised citation. I'd be good to hear your thoughts on this.
SerAntoniDeMiloni (
talk) 18:34, 19 December 2020 (UTC)reply
Suggest removing subsection "Education" and have it combine with p.1. GeraldWL 15:42, 18 December 2020 (UTC)reply
I've renamed the section "Early life and education" – this might suit a bit better.
SerAntoniDeMiloni (
talk) 18:34, 19 December 2020 (UTC)reply
SerAntoniDeMiloni, I would remove the "and education," as only one paragraph covers his education record. "Early life" basically covers his education already, so. GeraldWL 18:37, 19 December 2020 (UTC)reply
PS: I am awake just for now. Note that my timezone is
UTC+7, so at most your man won't be responding in the "
afternoon." GeraldWL 18:38, 19 December 2020 (UTC)reply
Done No worries. I've gone ahead and made that change.
First day in Andorra
Italicized quote did not end with a period. GeraldWL 16:38, 20 December 2020 (UTC)reply
"Skossyreff came into contact with several legitimate royal groups in the South of France"-- I think we should decapitalize "South", unless it's the name of a kingdom or stuff like that. GeraldWL 16:38, 20 December 2020 (UTC)reply
This article repeatedly switches terms "Boris" and "Skossyreff." Please make it consistent by using just one term, "Boris" or "Skossyreff." GeraldWL 16:38, 20 December 2020 (UTC)reply
Done I've corrected these. The only exception is when I speak about his "rule"; there I refer to him as Boris, as he called himself Boris during this period.
SerAntoniDeMiloni (
talk) 10:43, 22 December 2020 (UTC)reply
"Reign"
Why is the section called so? I don't see any term of reign in it. GeraldWL 16:38, 20 December 2020 (UTC)reply
Might it be worth renaming to Proposed "Reign"?
SerAntoniDeMiloni (
talk) 10:46, 22 December 2020 (UTC)reply
SerAntoniDeMiloni, still, confusing. The term "reign" is not used until the next section. GeraldWL 11:11, 22 December 2020 (UTC)reply
"Historian Arnau González explained that"-- the words following this is italicized. De-italicize it, please? GeraldWL 16:38, 20 December 2020 (UTC)reply
Suggest renaming section to "Imprisonment and later life". GeraldWL 16:38, 20 December 2020 (UTC)reply
Done That definitely works more nicely. Thanks for the suggestion.
SerAntoniDeMiloni (
talk) 10:48, 22 December 2020 (UTC)reply
Overal
SerAntoniDeMiloni, mind addressing the issues above so that this GAN can be quickly closed and be Passed? GeraldWL 10:24, 22 December 2020 (UTC)reply
Gerald apologies for the slightly delayed responses – I've spent the last couple of days travelling :) Will get to addressing them now. Thanks,
SerAntoniDeMiloni (
talk) 10:33, 22 December 2020 (UTC)reply
To help reducing the backlog on old nominations, I will be reviewing this article. GeraldWL 14:39, 18 December 2020 (UTC)reply
Thanks
Gerald; this article has been out there for a while, and I'm excited to get going. I'll make sure to respond to each point.
SerAntoniDeMiloni (
talk) 12:38, 19 December 2020 (UTC)reply
Lead
Suggest combining 2 and 3. GeraldWL 15:42, 18 December 2020 (UTC)reply
Sentence one is supported by two citations. Mind relocating or removing one repetition, if appropriate? GeraldWL 15:42, 18 December 2020 (UTC)reply
Similar cases with sentence 3, as well as "Political asylum" p.2, and all of the other two subs. Double citations also throughout the article. GeraldWL 15:42, 18 December 2020 (UTC)reply
I've gone through the article and removed various double citations. I've left a few, including those following the talk of cheque swindling under the "Political asylum" section. Each of the citations there are for separate articles that relate to separate dates, helping display the point "in multiple newspapers". The remaining double citations are at the end of longer sentences with multiple points to be backed up, or are placed with a not digitised citation. I'd be good to hear your thoughts on this.
SerAntoniDeMiloni (
talk) 18:34, 19 December 2020 (UTC)reply
Suggest removing subsection "Education" and have it combine with p.1. GeraldWL 15:42, 18 December 2020 (UTC)reply
I've renamed the section "Early life and education" – this might suit a bit better.
SerAntoniDeMiloni (
talk) 18:34, 19 December 2020 (UTC)reply
SerAntoniDeMiloni, I would remove the "and education," as only one paragraph covers his education record. "Early life" basically covers his education already, so. GeraldWL 18:37, 19 December 2020 (UTC)reply
PS: I am awake just for now. Note that my timezone is
UTC+7, so at most your man won't be responding in the "
afternoon." GeraldWL 18:38, 19 December 2020 (UTC)reply
Done No worries. I've gone ahead and made that change.
First day in Andorra
Italicized quote did not end with a period. GeraldWL 16:38, 20 December 2020 (UTC)reply
"Skossyreff came into contact with several legitimate royal groups in the South of France"-- I think we should decapitalize "South", unless it's the name of a kingdom or stuff like that. GeraldWL 16:38, 20 December 2020 (UTC)reply
This article repeatedly switches terms "Boris" and "Skossyreff." Please make it consistent by using just one term, "Boris" or "Skossyreff." GeraldWL 16:38, 20 December 2020 (UTC)reply
Done I've corrected these. The only exception is when I speak about his "rule"; there I refer to him as Boris, as he called himself Boris during this period.
SerAntoniDeMiloni (
talk) 10:43, 22 December 2020 (UTC)reply
"Reign"
Why is the section called so? I don't see any term of reign in it. GeraldWL 16:38, 20 December 2020 (UTC)reply
Might it be worth renaming to Proposed "Reign"?
SerAntoniDeMiloni (
talk) 10:46, 22 December 2020 (UTC)reply
SerAntoniDeMiloni, still, confusing. The term "reign" is not used until the next section. GeraldWL 11:11, 22 December 2020 (UTC)reply
"Historian Arnau González explained that"-- the words following this is italicized. De-italicize it, please? GeraldWL 16:38, 20 December 2020 (UTC)reply
Suggest renaming section to "Imprisonment and later life". GeraldWL 16:38, 20 December 2020 (UTC)reply
Done That definitely works more nicely. Thanks for the suggestion.
SerAntoniDeMiloni (
talk) 10:48, 22 December 2020 (UTC)reply
Overal
SerAntoniDeMiloni, mind addressing the issues above so that this GAN can be quickly closed and be Passed? GeraldWL 10:24, 22 December 2020 (UTC)reply
Gerald apologies for the slightly delayed responses – I've spent the last couple of days travelling :) Will get to addressing them now. Thanks,
SerAntoniDeMiloni (
talk) 10:33, 22 December 2020 (UTC)reply