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5x expanded by Mhhossein ( talk). Nominated by Mhhossein ( talk) at 12:17, 22 July 2022 (UTC).
Ideally, a QPQ should be submitted within a week of a nomination. After one week, and a reminder to the nominator, a nomination may be closed as "incomplete."Narutolovehinata5 ( talk · contributions) 10:58, 1 August 2022 (UTC)
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Overall: A few issues need to be addressed:
more than 120 dead", which is not what's written there. It would probably be better to write this as "65(inline one) to 120(inline two) dead" or something. The "150" currently in the hook is definitely wrong – this many were wounded, according to US News (btw this is not cited in the infobox).
The airstrike hit the residential area in dedicated to the plant workers." I can help with that if needed, although some things are quite obvious.
Nothing major and all these things can be fixed. @ Mhhossein best ping me when you are done. -- LordPeterII ( talk) 10:23, 20 August 2022 (UTC)
A Saudi-led coalition airstrike hit a funeral hall with thousands of mourners... ...in one of the deadliest single attacks of the country’s civil war, a U.N. official said." Using similar language, it could be rephrased this way:
The airstrike hit the residential area in dedicated to the plant workers" that would be great, it's the only thing that still reads weird imo, not sure what it's supposed to say.
The airstrike hit the residential area with housing for the plant workersfrom The Independent as being about the airstrike on Mokha. Where is the one about Sanaa? – LordPeterII ( talk) 16:34, 30 September 2022 (UTC)
The attack was one of the deadliest attacks by Saudi Arabia against Yemen", and uses this source from CNBC, which is actually referring to the 2016 Sanaa bombing instead of the 2015 Mokha bombing. Does that help? Regards, AzureCitizen ( talk) 16:39, 30 September 2022 (UTC)
Saturday's attack comes after a Saudi-led coalition March 15 airstrike on a market in Yemen's northwestern city of Mastaba that killed at least 119 people. Saudi forces reportedly used U.S. munitions in that strike, which at the time was described as the second-deadliest of the Saudi campaign, after a July 2015 attack near a power plant in Mokha that killed at least 120 people.The article and the DYK hook really only need the comparison here, which means that the minimum 120 deaths for Mokha is a sad second place in deadliness at the point of the CNBC article. I remember that this had confused me as well a while back, so good catch, if not an actual error. It would have been an easy mistake to e.g. slip in the wrong number (140 for Sanaa) from that news into the article. I checked twice and it didn't, so I think we're good. – LordPeterII ( talk) 16:47, 30 September 2022 (UTC)
@ Theleekycauldron: Hey, did you consider the reliable sources used in this article before moving it? Mhhossein talk 04:33, 27 August 2022 (UTC)
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check views). The text of the entry was as follows:
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The result was: promoted by
CSJJ104 (
talk)
17:58, 1 October 2022 (UTC)
5x expanded by Mhhossein ( talk). Nominated by Mhhossein ( talk) at 12:17, 22 July 2022 (UTC).
Ideally, a QPQ should be submitted within a week of a nomination. After one week, and a reminder to the nominator, a nomination may be closed as "incomplete."Narutolovehinata5 ( talk · contributions) 10:58, 1 August 2022 (UTC)
General: Article is new enough and long enough |
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Policy: Article is sourced, neutral, and free of copyright problems |
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Hook eligibility:
QPQ: Done. |
Overall: A few issues need to be addressed:
more than 120 dead", which is not what's written there. It would probably be better to write this as "65(inline one) to 120(inline two) dead" or something. The "150" currently in the hook is definitely wrong – this many were wounded, according to US News (btw this is not cited in the infobox).
The airstrike hit the residential area in dedicated to the plant workers." I can help with that if needed, although some things are quite obvious.
Nothing major and all these things can be fixed. @ Mhhossein best ping me when you are done. -- LordPeterII ( talk) 10:23, 20 August 2022 (UTC)
A Saudi-led coalition airstrike hit a funeral hall with thousands of mourners... ...in one of the deadliest single attacks of the country’s civil war, a U.N. official said." Using similar language, it could be rephrased this way:
The airstrike hit the residential area in dedicated to the plant workers" that would be great, it's the only thing that still reads weird imo, not sure what it's supposed to say.
The airstrike hit the residential area with housing for the plant workersfrom The Independent as being about the airstrike on Mokha. Where is the one about Sanaa? – LordPeterII ( talk) 16:34, 30 September 2022 (UTC)
The attack was one of the deadliest attacks by Saudi Arabia against Yemen", and uses this source from CNBC, which is actually referring to the 2016 Sanaa bombing instead of the 2015 Mokha bombing. Does that help? Regards, AzureCitizen ( talk) 16:39, 30 September 2022 (UTC)
Saturday's attack comes after a Saudi-led coalition March 15 airstrike on a market in Yemen's northwestern city of Mastaba that killed at least 119 people. Saudi forces reportedly used U.S. munitions in that strike, which at the time was described as the second-deadliest of the Saudi campaign, after a July 2015 attack near a power plant in Mokha that killed at least 120 people.The article and the DYK hook really only need the comparison here, which means that the minimum 120 deaths for Mokha is a sad second place in deadliness at the point of the CNBC article. I remember that this had confused me as well a while back, so good catch, if not an actual error. It would have been an easy mistake to e.g. slip in the wrong number (140 for Sanaa) from that news into the article. I checked twice and it didn't, so I think we're good. – LordPeterII ( talk) 16:47, 30 September 2022 (UTC)
@ Theleekycauldron: Hey, did you consider the reliable sources used in this article before moving it? Mhhossein talk 04:33, 27 August 2022 (UTC)