Should the name be "Blue Yodel" or "Blue Yodel No. 1 (T for Texas)"
February 1928 → February 3, 1928, as that is mentioned as the exact release date in the body
Victor Studio 1, New York City → Victor 1 (New York City) since the word studio is not supposed to be used in the infobox's parameter of the same name
Blues is not sourced as a genre; the song is only mentioned as including a pattern and licks, so solely keep country here since that is sourced
Rodgers is not sourced anywhere in the body as having written the song; mention this in the opening section, as there is too little personnel for a section
Remove the audio sample from the infobox since not only is there one of the song in the body already, but samples don't belong in infoboxes
"is a song written by" → "is a song by American singer-songwriter" since you need to introduce who he is
The sentence should end after his name; follow this up with the second sentence mentioning who produced and wrote the song. Also, the release info should be the sentence after this one.
"released by the" → "The song was released as a
single by the" with the target
"in February 1928." → "on February 3, 1928."
"Rodgers recorded it" should start the sentence after the release one
"had originally recorded Rodgers" → "had originally recorded with Rodgers"
"a month before Rodgers' recording session took place" are you referring to the Studio 1 session? If so, then reword appropriately.
"train can haul"." → "train can haul."", as that is a full sentence quoted, but you need to add wording to make the passenger train parts relevant to the article
""The Faking Blues" the line changed to," → ""The Faking Blues", the line is changed to,"
The audio sample text should aligned to the left, as there is media earlier in this section on the right so it looks awkward to have this on the same side later on. Also, wikilink
yodeling, add a full-stop at the end of the sentence and invoke the appropriate citations here because the signature part is not mentioned until the next section.
"During
George Harrison's childhood," → "During band member
George Harrison's childhood," so it flows better from the previous sentence
Chart performance
Retitle to Charts, as this is displaying the positions without any prose
Lay the positions out in the proper format; take recently-passed GA "
Más Allá" for example and use "
Despacito" as a guideline to seperate the different versions' positions
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Kyle Peake::As an opening comment, I thank again your interest to review another one of my articles. It is nice to work with such an attentive reviewer. Now a few points:
I added within the body of the article a line to clarify that Rodgers was credited with writing the song.
I moved the excerpt of the introduction of the song to another box down below with the yodel. Now, I want to make a case for keeping both files. I consider important to use the opening lines, since it is the direct cause as to why people refer to this song as "T for Texas". I left in the infobox "Blue Yodel" because it is the name that appears on the label of the record, and the original name of the publishing and such. When it comes to the yodel, I added an excerpt because a paragraph of the section discusses it at length. That, in addition to the reduced quality and 10% of the total duration, would qualify it as fair use.
I hold something against linking it to
Single (music) or defining
A-side and B-side. Most of the bibliography that talks about the early recording era refers to the releases rather as "disks" or "records". The point is that back then, there were no albums, therefore nothing to promote. Moreover, as you can read in the subsection "History" of the A and B side Wikipedia entry, there was no value assigned to which song was to be put on each side of the record. The record business was pretty much just being established, and this concepts appeared by the end of the 1940s, or early 1950s. Unfortunately, I can't access now the preview on Google Books to provide you with a link, but it was nicely covered on pages 193 and 194 of
this book.
Tell me what you think about the changes in the charts. It is the first time I use this new system.
Again, thanks for taking the review. About the OR, you could say I did not deviate too much this time because Rodgers is a subject nicely covered by books. I pretty much had to piece up the story of Kui Lee from newspapers for the previous article, and sometimes I forgot from where I even got some things. But well, I'll be more careful next time. Thankfully, topics like this one have been carefully researched by a great number of authors.--GDuwenHoller!21:44, 20 January 2021 (UTC)reply
I forgot to mention something about the recording personnel. Well, there was Rodgers and his guitar for sure. Peer was on the booth. Rather than that, there are no details available as to mention engineers and such. But it is rather common when it comes to recordings of this period. If you are really lucky, there are some details available of the people behind the recording, but I would consider that a luxury! The information contained on the record labels/matrix details tends to be rather scarce. By the way, do you think that it is worthy to mention the 1933 overdub mentioned
here?--GDuwenHoller!22:04, 20 January 2021 (UTC)reply
GDuwen Thank you for going into such detail in response! It is fine for you to have moved the infobox sample to the body next to the yodelling one, but they both required text even if the yodelling is mentioned throughout that area; just try summarization text moreso in this context. They still need to be moved to the left as well, plus the charts need fixing a lot still – take a proper look at the articles I wikilinked. --
K. Peake05:50, 21 January 2021 (UTC)reply
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Kyle Peake:I took a second look at the table, and then I went right to the link of the manual of style. I added that caption. I also noted that about the "scope" columns. I didn't even notice that stuff when looking at the code for "Más Allá"! (Obviously, things have changed lately, and I kept editing charts the same way for the last ten years. Time to do a tour around my old ones!). The sound samples are now aligned to the left.--GDuwenHoller!19:37, 21 January 2021 (UTC)reply
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GDuwen:✓Pass now after some
copy editing from me; you did not add info about the meaning of the song to the lead, but I'm not entirely sure if it is actually notable for the lead on second consideration... how do you feel? This is only minor, which is why I can still pass. --
K. Peake20:54, 21 January 2021 (UTC)reply
GDuwen My pleasure, you are a very constructive worker to interact with on here and it is plausible how you've always been responsive to me in a good amount of time! I am fine with you having missed a few points that I went over as it's hard to get everything first time, plus thanks for the new fix! --
K. Peake21:03, 21 January 2021 (UTC)reply
Should the name be "Blue Yodel" or "Blue Yodel No. 1 (T for Texas)"
February 1928 → February 3, 1928, as that is mentioned as the exact release date in the body
Victor Studio 1, New York City → Victor 1 (New York City) since the word studio is not supposed to be used in the infobox's parameter of the same name
Blues is not sourced as a genre; the song is only mentioned as including a pattern and licks, so solely keep country here since that is sourced
Rodgers is not sourced anywhere in the body as having written the song; mention this in the opening section, as there is too little personnel for a section
Remove the audio sample from the infobox since not only is there one of the song in the body already, but samples don't belong in infoboxes
"is a song written by" → "is a song by American singer-songwriter" since you need to introduce who he is
The sentence should end after his name; follow this up with the second sentence mentioning who produced and wrote the song. Also, the release info should be the sentence after this one.
"released by the" → "The song was released as a
single by the" with the target
"in February 1928." → "on February 3, 1928."
"Rodgers recorded it" should start the sentence after the release one
"had originally recorded Rodgers" → "had originally recorded with Rodgers"
"a month before Rodgers' recording session took place" are you referring to the Studio 1 session? If so, then reword appropriately.
"train can haul"." → "train can haul."", as that is a full sentence quoted, but you need to add wording to make the passenger train parts relevant to the article
""The Faking Blues" the line changed to," → ""The Faking Blues", the line is changed to,"
The audio sample text should aligned to the left, as there is media earlier in this section on the right so it looks awkward to have this on the same side later on. Also, wikilink
yodeling, add a full-stop at the end of the sentence and invoke the appropriate citations here because the signature part is not mentioned until the next section.
"During
George Harrison's childhood," → "During band member
George Harrison's childhood," so it flows better from the previous sentence
Chart performance
Retitle to Charts, as this is displaying the positions without any prose
Lay the positions out in the proper format; take recently-passed GA "
Más Allá" for example and use "
Despacito" as a guideline to seperate the different versions' positions
@
Kyle Peake::As an opening comment, I thank again your interest to review another one of my articles. It is nice to work with such an attentive reviewer. Now a few points:
I added within the body of the article a line to clarify that Rodgers was credited with writing the song.
I moved the excerpt of the introduction of the song to another box down below with the yodel. Now, I want to make a case for keeping both files. I consider important to use the opening lines, since it is the direct cause as to why people refer to this song as "T for Texas". I left in the infobox "Blue Yodel" because it is the name that appears on the label of the record, and the original name of the publishing and such. When it comes to the yodel, I added an excerpt because a paragraph of the section discusses it at length. That, in addition to the reduced quality and 10% of the total duration, would qualify it as fair use.
I hold something against linking it to
Single (music) or defining
A-side and B-side. Most of the bibliography that talks about the early recording era refers to the releases rather as "disks" or "records". The point is that back then, there were no albums, therefore nothing to promote. Moreover, as you can read in the subsection "History" of the A and B side Wikipedia entry, there was no value assigned to which song was to be put on each side of the record. The record business was pretty much just being established, and this concepts appeared by the end of the 1940s, or early 1950s. Unfortunately, I can't access now the preview on Google Books to provide you with a link, but it was nicely covered on pages 193 and 194 of
this book.
Tell me what you think about the changes in the charts. It is the first time I use this new system.
Again, thanks for taking the review. About the OR, you could say I did not deviate too much this time because Rodgers is a subject nicely covered by books. I pretty much had to piece up the story of Kui Lee from newspapers for the previous article, and sometimes I forgot from where I even got some things. But well, I'll be more careful next time. Thankfully, topics like this one have been carefully researched by a great number of authors.--GDuwenHoller!21:44, 20 January 2021 (UTC)reply
I forgot to mention something about the recording personnel. Well, there was Rodgers and his guitar for sure. Peer was on the booth. Rather than that, there are no details available as to mention engineers and such. But it is rather common when it comes to recordings of this period. If you are really lucky, there are some details available of the people behind the recording, but I would consider that a luxury! The information contained on the record labels/matrix details tends to be rather scarce. By the way, do you think that it is worthy to mention the 1933 overdub mentioned
here?--GDuwenHoller!22:04, 20 January 2021 (UTC)reply
GDuwen Thank you for going into such detail in response! It is fine for you to have moved the infobox sample to the body next to the yodelling one, but they both required text even if the yodelling is mentioned throughout that area; just try summarization text moreso in this context. They still need to be moved to the left as well, plus the charts need fixing a lot still – take a proper look at the articles I wikilinked. --
K. Peake05:50, 21 January 2021 (UTC)reply
@
Kyle Peake:I took a second look at the table, and then I went right to the link of the manual of style. I added that caption. I also noted that about the "scope" columns. I didn't even notice that stuff when looking at the code for "Más Allá"! (Obviously, things have changed lately, and I kept editing charts the same way for the last ten years. Time to do a tour around my old ones!). The sound samples are now aligned to the left.--GDuwenHoller!19:37, 21 January 2021 (UTC)reply
@
GDuwen:✓Pass now after some
copy editing from me; you did not add info about the meaning of the song to the lead, but I'm not entirely sure if it is actually notable for the lead on second consideration... how do you feel? This is only minor, which is why I can still pass. --
K. Peake20:54, 21 January 2021 (UTC)reply
GDuwen My pleasure, you are a very constructive worker to interact with on here and it is plausible how you've always been responsive to me in a good amount of time! I am fine with you having missed a few points that I went over as it's hard to get everything first time, plus thanks for the new fix! --
K. Peake21:03, 21 January 2021 (UTC)reply