I think the opening sentence to "construction" would work better if it was reordered. For example: "In 1807, the United States government bought the 9.5 acres (3.8 ha) of land upon which the lighthouse stands from Daniel Fayerweather for $200."
"The government appropriated $5000 for the light station in February 1807 and was operational by October 1808" - this implies that the US government was operational by 1808 (which is like 20 years late). Add a "which" or something here to specify.
"Though this boisterous claim was countered by Edmund Blunt, an American Coast Pilot, who stated, "a more contemptible Lighthouse does not disgrace Long Island Sound, most shamefully erected and badly kept." - this isn't a complete sentence. Remove the "Though" and it will be, though.
You spell Fairweather Island differently in the lede than in the body of the article. Also, you should say in the first sentence of "Construction" that the lighthouse was on Fairweather Island.
Historically, its spelt both ways, but I fixed it. Thankfully, this isn't the same issue as Falkner Island... or shall I say Faulkner.
ChrisGualtieri (
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05:36, 4 May 2014 (UTC)reply
"The lighthouse originally had whale oil spider lamp" - is this missing "a" before "whale"?
All in all, a pretty good and interesting read. Maybe it'd be neat to have a bit of status of what it's like today. Are there any estimates for annual visitors? Any entrance fee to see it? ♫
Hurricanehink (
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01:55, 4 May 2014 (UTC)reply
Thanks for finding the storm and giving it a good review. I hope I fixed everything. Oh an Seaside Park is free for state residents and $40 to access, but the lighthouse itself is not accessible. I added some details about it, many of these structures are maintained by caretakers or are automated and off-limits. Some do serve as museums, but those are particularly uncommon it seems.
ChrisGualtieri (
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05:36, 4 May 2014 (UTC)reply
I think the opening sentence to "construction" would work better if it was reordered. For example: "In 1807, the United States government bought the 9.5 acres (3.8 ha) of land upon which the lighthouse stands from Daniel Fayerweather for $200."
"The government appropriated $5000 for the light station in February 1807 and was operational by October 1808" - this implies that the US government was operational by 1808 (which is like 20 years late). Add a "which" or something here to specify.
"Though this boisterous claim was countered by Edmund Blunt, an American Coast Pilot, who stated, "a more contemptible Lighthouse does not disgrace Long Island Sound, most shamefully erected and badly kept." - this isn't a complete sentence. Remove the "Though" and it will be, though.
You spell Fairweather Island differently in the lede than in the body of the article. Also, you should say in the first sentence of "Construction" that the lighthouse was on Fairweather Island.
Historically, its spelt both ways, but I fixed it. Thankfully, this isn't the same issue as Falkner Island... or shall I say Faulkner.
ChrisGualtieri (
talk)
05:36, 4 May 2014 (UTC)reply
"The lighthouse originally had whale oil spider lamp" - is this missing "a" before "whale"?
All in all, a pretty good and interesting read. Maybe it'd be neat to have a bit of status of what it's like today. Are there any estimates for annual visitors? Any entrance fee to see it? ♫
Hurricanehink (
talk)
01:55, 4 May 2014 (UTC)reply
Thanks for finding the storm and giving it a good review. I hope I fixed everything. Oh an Seaside Park is free for state residents and $40 to access, but the lighthouse itself is not accessible. I added some details about it, many of these structures are maintained by caretakers or are automated and off-limits. Some do serve as museums, but those are particularly uncommon it seems.
ChrisGualtieri (
talk)
05:36, 4 May 2014 (UTC)reply