This is by all accounts a well written article with a wealth of interesting detail. I'm ashamed to say I knew very little about this animal before starting the review process!
... Reginald Innes Pocock… —and other examples—you need to explain who these people are, e.g. '… the British zoologist Reginald Innes Pocock…'.
Alexander Sliwa comes across as a champion in this article and an authority on the subject - if he is, consider mentioning him by name in the text (e.g. using
this or
this).
He has been studying black-footed cats in South Africa for 25+ years. But since this page is about the cats, I prefer not to mention people, unless in regards to taxonomy, where it is standard to refer to species + subspecies authorities. --
BhagyaMani (
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23:14, 19 May 2020 (UTC)reply
…he described the skins… - amend to '...described the species using skins…' and put the link to
Species description with the phrase described the species (or something similar).
The links to ...14.45 to 8.38..., ...16.76 to 6.46... etc. - seem to be external links (i.e. they don't lead to Wikipedia articles), so they I think they need to be treated as citations and put in the Reference section.
Above mentioned template leads to the respective sites that are part of the wikimedia tools. It is used on many many pages, and I think it's great, because it provides an instant overview of the time scale in question. --
BhagyaMani (
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00:31, 20 May 2020 (UTC)reply
I would use miles in full, not mi (an unfamiliar unit for some readers).
These measurements are also provided with a little helper, the {{convert}} template, which I set to consistently show abbreviations of units. --
BhagyaMani (
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00:31, 20 May 2020 (UTC)reply
Ref 24 (Sliwa, Herbst, & Mills) can be downloaded from
here.
This is perhaps available as a single chapter, I'll check. Above website provides download only for the whole book, 17+MB. --
BhagyaMani (
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00:31, 20 May 2020 (UTC)reply
I found several articles using 'lamb' (Bigalke1970, Van der Lugt & Kriek 1988, Skinner 1993, Hoffman et al. 2007), just to name a few. But 'calf' is also used, e.g. by Iverson et al. (1982), Coons et al. (2012). --
BhagyaMani (
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01:15, 20 May 2020 (UTC)reply
Yes, springbok are rams, ewes and lambs (Kruger National park, etc.), my apologies! I've added a citation to help others like myself falling into a similar trap.
Amitchell125 (
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08:06, 20 May 2020 (UTC)reply
...the gerbil mouse (Malacothrix typica) being among its most important prey… - this sounds a bit on the vague side: what are the unnamed species more important than the gerbil mouse? Also, I think the term important needs clarification.
It apparently gets all the moisture it needs from its prey… - why 'apparently'?
Several radio-collared individuals were observed for many hundred hours, but none ever continuously for 24 hours a day all year through. Therefore, 'apparently' is appropriate. --
BhagyaMani (
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00:49, 20 May 2020 (UTC)reply
The small size of this section is not generally encouraged, consider putting the text at the top of the next section, and renaming that as 'Threats and conservation'.
Conservation
* Refs 43 (Burnette) and 44 (Waller) cannot be found (I don't think it's me).
Improve the information about Ref 20 'Atomic kitten' using
this.
Sorry, I don't understand what you mean. This ext link leads to the reference section of a book, whereas Atomic kitten is the title of an article published in a magazine. --
BhagyaMani (
talk)
00:31, 20 May 2020 (UTC)reply
Apologies for not being clear, the page in the link provided a fuller citation. Now sorted.
This is by all accounts a well written article with a wealth of interesting detail. I'm ashamed to say I knew very little about this animal before starting the review process!
... Reginald Innes Pocock… —and other examples—you need to explain who these people are, e.g. '… the British zoologist Reginald Innes Pocock…'.
Alexander Sliwa comes across as a champion in this article and an authority on the subject - if he is, consider mentioning him by name in the text (e.g. using
this or
this).
He has been studying black-footed cats in South Africa for 25+ years. But since this page is about the cats, I prefer not to mention people, unless in regards to taxonomy, where it is standard to refer to species + subspecies authorities. --
BhagyaMani (
talk)
23:14, 19 May 2020 (UTC)reply
…he described the skins… - amend to '...described the species using skins…' and put the link to
Species description with the phrase described the species (or something similar).
The links to ...14.45 to 8.38..., ...16.76 to 6.46... etc. - seem to be external links (i.e. they don't lead to Wikipedia articles), so they I think they need to be treated as citations and put in the Reference section.
Above mentioned template leads to the respective sites that are part of the wikimedia tools. It is used on many many pages, and I think it's great, because it provides an instant overview of the time scale in question. --
BhagyaMani (
talk)
00:31, 20 May 2020 (UTC)reply
I would use miles in full, not mi (an unfamiliar unit for some readers).
These measurements are also provided with a little helper, the {{convert}} template, which I set to consistently show abbreviations of units. --
BhagyaMani (
talk)
00:31, 20 May 2020 (UTC)reply
Ref 24 (Sliwa, Herbst, & Mills) can be downloaded from
here.
This is perhaps available as a single chapter, I'll check. Above website provides download only for the whole book, 17+MB. --
BhagyaMani (
talk)
00:31, 20 May 2020 (UTC)reply
I found several articles using 'lamb' (Bigalke1970, Van der Lugt & Kriek 1988, Skinner 1993, Hoffman et al. 2007), just to name a few. But 'calf' is also used, e.g. by Iverson et al. (1982), Coons et al. (2012). --
BhagyaMani (
talk)
01:15, 20 May 2020 (UTC)reply
Yes, springbok are rams, ewes and lambs (Kruger National park, etc.), my apologies! I've added a citation to help others like myself falling into a similar trap.
Amitchell125 (
talk)
08:06, 20 May 2020 (UTC)reply
...the gerbil mouse (Malacothrix typica) being among its most important prey… - this sounds a bit on the vague side: what are the unnamed species more important than the gerbil mouse? Also, I think the term important needs clarification.
It apparently gets all the moisture it needs from its prey… - why 'apparently'?
Several radio-collared individuals were observed for many hundred hours, but none ever continuously for 24 hours a day all year through. Therefore, 'apparently' is appropriate. --
BhagyaMani (
talk)
00:49, 20 May 2020 (UTC)reply
The small size of this section is not generally encouraged, consider putting the text at the top of the next section, and renaming that as 'Threats and conservation'.
Conservation
* Refs 43 (Burnette) and 44 (Waller) cannot be found (I don't think it's me).
Improve the information about Ref 20 'Atomic kitten' using
this.
Sorry, I don't understand what you mean. This ext link leads to the reference section of a book, whereas Atomic kitten is the title of an article published in a magazine. --
BhagyaMani (
talk)
00:31, 20 May 2020 (UTC)reply
Apologies for not being clear, the page in the link provided a fuller citation. Now sorted.