"included with select editions of Windows Vista and later in January 2007" Meaning is unclear here. I think you mean "included with Windows Vista in January 2007 and select editions of later editions" ?
"Microsoft eDrive is a specification for storage devices to allow compliant storage devices to use its built-in encryption" Meaning is unclear; by "its" is BitLocker or eDrive being referred to?
"encrypting other volumes could be achieved through an included command-line tool" Nice to have a link to "command line tool", but what was the name of the tool?
"core edition of Windows 8.1 include device encryption" No need for bold text here, per
MOS:BOLD
Endorsed by MOS. MOS:BOLD endorses boldface for the following case: 'To follow the "principle of least astonishment" after following a redirect, for terms in the first couple of paragraphs of an article, or at the beginning of a section of an article, which are the subjects of redirects to the article or section (e.g. sub-topics of the article's topic, rather than the synonyms as already boldfaced per the above)' In this case,
device encryption redirects there. —
Codename Lisa (
talk)
13:01, 12 December 2016 (UTC)reply
"included with select editions of Windows Vista and later in January 2007" Meaning is unclear here. I think you mean "included with Windows Vista in January 2007 and select editions of later editions" ?
"Microsoft eDrive is a specification for storage devices to allow compliant storage devices to use its built-in encryption" Meaning is unclear; by "its" is BitLocker or eDrive being referred to?
"encrypting other volumes could be achieved through an included command-line tool" Nice to have a link to "command line tool", but what was the name of the tool?
"core edition of Windows 8.1 include device encryption" No need for bold text here, per
MOS:BOLD
Endorsed by MOS. MOS:BOLD endorses boldface for the following case: 'To follow the "principle of least astonishment" after following a redirect, for terms in the first couple of paragraphs of an article, or at the beginning of a section of an article, which are the subjects of redirects to the article or section (e.g. sub-topics of the article's topic, rather than the synonyms as already boldfaced per the above)' In this case,
device encryption redirects there. —
Codename Lisa (
talk)
13:01, 12 December 2016 (UTC)reply