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TerribleTy27, Cerevisae, I just read the lead section of the article, and I do not see how it can possibly qualify under the good article criteria. There are significant prose and grammatical issues throughout, and it does not meet the lead section criteria, all of which are required in the "Well Written" section. For example:
It is located at 610 kilometres northeast of Kuching.The "at" should be deleted. Done
Bintulu is also located between Miri and Sibu which is 216 kilometres northeast of Sibu and 200 km southwest of Miri.This is an ungainly and unclear sentence. Better would be "Bintulu is also located 216 kilometres northeast of Sibu and 200 km southwest of Miri, between the two [towns/cities/whatever]." Even better might be to combine the two location sentences, or just have one here and the other in the body of the article. If all of these towns are on the coastline, as Bintulu is, that might also help to clarify matters. Done
Bintulu was founded by Rajah James Brooke when he built a fort in the town.This doesn't make sense. If the town was there already, how could Brooke found it by building a fort in a pre-existing town? Was this when he named the place, perhaps? (The fort had a completely different name.) Done
The construction of earliest airstrip in Bintulu began in 1934 but only completed in 1955 due to Japanese occupation.This is a confusing sentence: was it completed thanks to the Japanese during their occupation after remaining incomplete for 21 years? (Since the occupation ended by 1945, it's hard to see how.) Based on the Japanese occupation section, it would seem that the airstrip construction was still incomplete in 1938 when it was discontinued, yet the "Japanese made full use of the airport for military purposes" during the occupation, which would seem to indicate it was either complete enough or made complete enough by the Japanese so it could be used fully for their war effort. An eventual reconstruction in 1955 would seem to be something else entirely.
Bintulu remains as a fishing village until 1969 when oil and gas reserves were discovered offshore Bintulu.Past tense should be used here—"remained a fishing village" rather than "remains as a"—and I'd recommend rephrasing "offshore Bintulu". Done
Borneo International Kite Festival is held annually in the town.should start with "The". Done for this sentence. I will try to check for errors in the remaining part of the article. Cerevisae ( talk) 11:16, 16 March 2016 (UTC)
There are certainly similar issues with the body of the article, and there may be others; I haven't had time to check. TerribleTy27, given your short time here at Wikipedia, and especially given what Good Articles are and how to judge the criteria, I would advise you to gain much more experience writing and editing articles before taking on such a demanding task as reviewing good articles. Thank you for your attempt, but in the meantime, given the issues with your review and this article, I would strongly recommend that you reverse your passage of the article, since it clearly doesn't qualify at present, and let someone with more experience take over reviewing duties and determine how much actually needs to be done before it can qualify. BlueMoonset ( talk) 07:13, 16 March 2016 (UTC)
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TerribleTy27, Cerevisae, I just read the lead section of the article, and I do not see how it can possibly qualify under the good article criteria. There are significant prose and grammatical issues throughout, and it does not meet the lead section criteria, all of which are required in the "Well Written" section. For example:
It is located at 610 kilometres northeast of Kuching.The "at" should be deleted. Done
Bintulu is also located between Miri and Sibu which is 216 kilometres northeast of Sibu and 200 km southwest of Miri.This is an ungainly and unclear sentence. Better would be "Bintulu is also located 216 kilometres northeast of Sibu and 200 km southwest of Miri, between the two [towns/cities/whatever]." Even better might be to combine the two location sentences, or just have one here and the other in the body of the article. If all of these towns are on the coastline, as Bintulu is, that might also help to clarify matters. Done
Bintulu was founded by Rajah James Brooke when he built a fort in the town.This doesn't make sense. If the town was there already, how could Brooke found it by building a fort in a pre-existing town? Was this when he named the place, perhaps? (The fort had a completely different name.) Done
The construction of earliest airstrip in Bintulu began in 1934 but only completed in 1955 due to Japanese occupation.This is a confusing sentence: was it completed thanks to the Japanese during their occupation after remaining incomplete for 21 years? (Since the occupation ended by 1945, it's hard to see how.) Based on the Japanese occupation section, it would seem that the airstrip construction was still incomplete in 1938 when it was discontinued, yet the "Japanese made full use of the airport for military purposes" during the occupation, which would seem to indicate it was either complete enough or made complete enough by the Japanese so it could be used fully for their war effort. An eventual reconstruction in 1955 would seem to be something else entirely.
Bintulu remains as a fishing village until 1969 when oil and gas reserves were discovered offshore Bintulu.Past tense should be used here—"remained a fishing village" rather than "remains as a"—and I'd recommend rephrasing "offshore Bintulu". Done
Borneo International Kite Festival is held annually in the town.should start with "The". Done for this sentence. I will try to check for errors in the remaining part of the article. Cerevisae ( talk) 11:16, 16 March 2016 (UTC)
There are certainly similar issues with the body of the article, and there may be others; I haven't had time to check. TerribleTy27, given your short time here at Wikipedia, and especially given what Good Articles are and how to judge the criteria, I would advise you to gain much more experience writing and editing articles before taking on such a demanding task as reviewing good articles. Thank you for your attempt, but in the meantime, given the issues with your review and this article, I would strongly recommend that you reverse your passage of the article, since it clearly doesn't qualify at present, and let someone with more experience take over reviewing duties and determine how much actually needs to be done before it can qualify. BlueMoonset ( talk) 07:13, 16 March 2016 (UTC)
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