In the second to last paragraph before "Awards and legacy", the individual sentences about the opinions of Edge and Icon Magazine contain no less than four and three quotes, respectively. Paraphrase, man.
In that same paragraph, italicize the following: "Edge", "Icon Magazine", "Final Fantasy", and "GamePro".
The "Reception" section overall doesn't have the best organization. For example, the second paragraph in the section contains opinions about the graphics (GameSpot), storytelling (Eurogamer), graphics and gameplay (IGN), technical issues (1UP.com and Official PlayStation Magazine). The section contains individual paragraphs about each of these aspects.
Remove the "see also" thing in "Awards and legacy" about Beyond Good & Evil 2, since there are only two sentences (one line, even, on my wide computer screen) about the game. Just link the game where it is mentioned in the prose.
A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with
the layout style guideline:
B.
Reliable sources are
cited inline. All content that
could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose):
Upload a cover art image without the platform-specific (i.e. PC) header.
Overall:
Pass or Fail:
I'm putting this on hold for now. This isn't a bad article, overall. I'm just telling you stuff that I think should be done now, so the FAC is more painless. Looks good. I'm passing it.
Tezero (
talk)
02:37, 18 May 2010 (UTC)reply
In the second to last paragraph before "Awards and legacy", the individual sentences about the opinions of Edge and Icon Magazine contain no less than four and three quotes, respectively. Paraphrase, man.
In that same paragraph, italicize the following: "Edge", "Icon Magazine", "Final Fantasy", and "GamePro".
The "Reception" section overall doesn't have the best organization. For example, the second paragraph in the section contains opinions about the graphics (GameSpot), storytelling (Eurogamer), graphics and gameplay (IGN), technical issues (1UP.com and Official PlayStation Magazine). The section contains individual paragraphs about each of these aspects.
Remove the "see also" thing in "Awards and legacy" about Beyond Good & Evil 2, since there are only two sentences (one line, even, on my wide computer screen) about the game. Just link the game where it is mentioned in the prose.
A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with
the layout style guideline:
B.
Reliable sources are
cited inline. All content that
could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose):
Upload a cover art image without the platform-specific (i.e. PC) header.
Overall:
Pass or Fail:
I'm putting this on hold for now. This isn't a bad article, overall. I'm just telling you stuff that I think should be done now, so the FAC is more painless. Looks good. I'm passing it.
Tezero (
talk)
02:37, 18 May 2010 (UTC)reply