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Reviewer: Pbritti ( talk · contribs) 06:31, 4 March 2024 (UTC)
Hello: Hi, I'm Pbritti, and I'm going to be reviewing your article! A quick bit about me: I'm a fan of religious subject matter and have worked on a couple GANs for articles about church buildings both as nominator and reviewer. I'll be a bit busy this week but hope to have this review mostly kicked off by the end of today UTC! ~
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Well-written
leaving their Orthodox beliefs in the past.I think you could delete this.
Sunday School program.Consider linking Sunday school.
an Ordained Orthodox rabbi.Is Ordained typically capitalized? I haven't seen that before, but I'm only familiar Reform terminology.
On November 2, 1951, the congregation had a meeting where it was decided a synagogue was needed.Perhaps rephrase to
At a meeting on November 2, 1951, the congregation decided a synagogue was needed.
The initial estimate to built it was $35,000.I'd encourage the phrase
estimated cost of constructionand suggest including the USD inflation template.
received over $12,000 from non-Jews in the area.The inflation template would also work here.
Not only is he a rabbi, but Stucker-Rozovsky is a major in the National Guard.I would remove
Not only is he a rabbiand rephrase to
Stucker-Rozovsky is a chaplain with the rank of major in the National Guard.
former Ambassador to Bulgaria, Hugh Kenneth Hill, who has taught the congregation and non-Jews how Bulgaria was able to save some of its Jewish peopleThis passage is repeated twice. I recommend removing the
Prominent members includesentence on neutrality grounds and to excise this redundancy.
Verifiable with no original research
Following the 2018 Pittsburgh synagogue shooting, security measures were installed at Beth El.The source for the security measures does not mention the Pittsburgh attack. I would copy the phrasing used in the body to the lead and remove the image of the Pittsburgh memorial (though it is a very moving image).
Broad in its coverage
Congregants asked the Hebrew Union College (HUC) to send a Reformed rabbi since the only members that still observed dietary laws were a few older people.Since the source is offline, I couldn't see, but is there a date provided for when the rabbis in this paragraph arrived?
Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each
Passed
Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing
edit war or content dispute
Passed
Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio
I would like to commend you for your excellent images, APK, and the wonderful creation of a new article. I'm glad that you've gotten it this far and expect to promote once the minor issues mentioned above have been addressed. I will come back to this article once you've been able to work through the comments in my assessment. Just ping me once that's done. I'll let you know if I notice anything else! ~ Pbritti ( talk) 17:00, 4 March 2024 (UTC)
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Reviewer: Pbritti ( talk · contribs) 06:31, 4 March 2024 (UTC)
Hello: Hi, I'm Pbritti, and I'm going to be reviewing your article! A quick bit about me: I'm a fan of religious subject matter and have worked on a couple GANs for articles about church buildings both as nominator and reviewer. I'll be a bit busy this week but hope to have this review mostly kicked off by the end of today UTC! ~
Pbritti (
talk) 06:31, 4 March 2024 (UTC)
Well-written
leaving their Orthodox beliefs in the past.I think you could delete this.
Sunday School program.Consider linking Sunday school.
an Ordained Orthodox rabbi.Is Ordained typically capitalized? I haven't seen that before, but I'm only familiar Reform terminology.
On November 2, 1951, the congregation had a meeting where it was decided a synagogue was needed.Perhaps rephrase to
At a meeting on November 2, 1951, the congregation decided a synagogue was needed.
The initial estimate to built it was $35,000.I'd encourage the phrase
estimated cost of constructionand suggest including the USD inflation template.
received over $12,000 from non-Jews in the area.The inflation template would also work here.
Not only is he a rabbi, but Stucker-Rozovsky is a major in the National Guard.I would remove
Not only is he a rabbiand rephrase to
Stucker-Rozovsky is a chaplain with the rank of major in the National Guard.
former Ambassador to Bulgaria, Hugh Kenneth Hill, who has taught the congregation and non-Jews how Bulgaria was able to save some of its Jewish peopleThis passage is repeated twice. I recommend removing the
Prominent members includesentence on neutrality grounds and to excise this redundancy.
Verifiable with no original research
Following the 2018 Pittsburgh synagogue shooting, security measures were installed at Beth El.The source for the security measures does not mention the Pittsburgh attack. I would copy the phrasing used in the body to the lead and remove the image of the Pittsburgh memorial (though it is a very moving image).
Broad in its coverage
Congregants asked the Hebrew Union College (HUC) to send a Reformed rabbi since the only members that still observed dietary laws were a few older people.Since the source is offline, I couldn't see, but is there a date provided for when the rabbis in this paragraph arrived?
Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each
Passed
Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing
edit war or content dispute
Passed
Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio
I would like to commend you for your excellent images, APK, and the wonderful creation of a new article. I'm glad that you've gotten it this far and expect to promote once the minor issues mentioned above have been addressed. I will come back to this article once you've been able to work through the comments in my assessment. Just ping me once that's done. I'll let you know if I notice anything else! ~ Pbritti ( talk) 17:00, 4 March 2024 (UTC)