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Reviewer: Starkenborgher ( talk · contribs) 16:06, 24 May 2021 (UTC)
Going to start on this one - bear with me, this is my first review, but I'll do my best. At first glance, GA status appears to be in reach, granted that some improvements be made.
Initially fulfilled criteria:
So this leaves criteria 2 and 3 - I'll be doing a more intensive look through of the sources to check 2b, 2c, and 2d aren't violated in the article. For criterion 3, I think the main thing is improving the organization. The lead is serviceable, but could be expanded with succinct summary about the decline of the town and its state in the modern day. I don't like the current description section. I think changing it to a geography section there would be good, keeping the location and maybe the transport info in there, and moving the info about its present state to a new subsection called modern day or something, within the history section. Also, the history section may go into too much detail about events outside of Berwind in the conflict, so try to reduce the detail in parts that indirectly deal with Berwind, while keeping the general background, and also making sure the background doesn't do too much. I'll point out more specific stuff to be changed in a bit, this is just preliminary stuff.
Oh, and beyond just reorganization for 3: a short etymology section, about the name, with some general background maybe on how company towns were named in general? Also, climate information is always a good add for lighter geography sections.
Starkenborgher, Pbritti, where does this review stand at the moment? Starkenborgher hasn't edited on Wikipedia for four weeks, while Pbritti has yet to make any of the requested edits mentioned in the review so far despite significant activity elsewhere in the nearly six weeks since the most recent response here. Please let me know. Many thanks.
Pbritti, I see a one-sentence unsourced addition made on September 10 (along with the word "the"), and that's it. Do you really feel you have applied "all requested edits and more"? And if not, why haven't you done anything in the month since? I'm looking for reasons to keep this nomination open any longer, and I'm having trouble finding any. BlueMoonset ( talk) 02:43, 10 October 2021 (UTC)
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Reviewer: Starkenborgher ( talk · contribs) 16:06, 24 May 2021 (UTC)
Going to start on this one - bear with me, this is my first review, but I'll do my best. At first glance, GA status appears to be in reach, granted that some improvements be made.
Initially fulfilled criteria:
So this leaves criteria 2 and 3 - I'll be doing a more intensive look through of the sources to check 2b, 2c, and 2d aren't violated in the article. For criterion 3, I think the main thing is improving the organization. The lead is serviceable, but could be expanded with succinct summary about the decline of the town and its state in the modern day. I don't like the current description section. I think changing it to a geography section there would be good, keeping the location and maybe the transport info in there, and moving the info about its present state to a new subsection called modern day or something, within the history section. Also, the history section may go into too much detail about events outside of Berwind in the conflict, so try to reduce the detail in parts that indirectly deal with Berwind, while keeping the general background, and also making sure the background doesn't do too much. I'll point out more specific stuff to be changed in a bit, this is just preliminary stuff.
Oh, and beyond just reorganization for 3: a short etymology section, about the name, with some general background maybe on how company towns were named in general? Also, climate information is always a good add for lighter geography sections.
Starkenborgher, Pbritti, where does this review stand at the moment? Starkenborgher hasn't edited on Wikipedia for four weeks, while Pbritti has yet to make any of the requested edits mentioned in the review so far despite significant activity elsewhere in the nearly six weeks since the most recent response here. Please let me know. Many thanks.
Pbritti, I see a one-sentence unsourced addition made on September 10 (along with the word "the"), and that's it. Do you really feel you have applied "all requested edits and more"? And if not, why haven't you done anything in the month since? I'm looking for reasons to keep this nomination open any longer, and I'm having trouble finding any. BlueMoonset ( talk) 02:43, 10 October 2021 (UTC)