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I don't know if "industrial disaster" is the best way to describe this incident. This was an illegal operation, not a licensed industry. Bmag32 ( talk) 17:24, 19 April 2014 (UTC)
This is a pretty good article, reads well, and is probably about c or b-class. It needs to things, though- exact location and more info about the after math.
Bmag32 ( talk) 00:30, 9 July 2014 (UTC)
How can this operation be called successful? I removed the word successful from the opening paragraph. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 192.226.162.191 ( talk) 08:19, 6 January 2017 (UTC)
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Reviewer: Drewmutt ( talk · contribs) 00:40, 28 January 2018 (UTC)
Taking a look at the moment... Drewmutt (^ᴥ^) talk 01:16, 15 February 2018 (UTC)
Positive
Needs improvement
...explosion to a direct hit from a powerful bomb."that last quote shouldn't be there
Overall, I think it's very close, the narrative is very descriptive and the it covers the subject in a good amount of detail. Just need the prior cleaned up. Drewmutt (^ᴥ^) talk 01:48, 15 February 2018 (UTC)
@ Drewmutt: Before I get started, I'd like to point out a few things. First, I had 3 other images, but they were determined unnecessary per this discussion. Those were the best quality images I could find. Also, I have access to the news reports from '83 that are on YouTube (I purchased from the station's archives), but the one from 2008 was actually uploaded by the news station. Does that not qualify it as reliable? It is citing the station, not YouTube. I was also wondering if some of the interviews were a little too excessive. Bneu2013 ( talk) 06:17, 15 February 2018 (UTC)
The following text is insufficiently paraphrased from the source material, per WP:CLOSEPARAPHRASE:
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"A U.S. District Court Judge handed Bramblett two ten-year sentences for taking part in the illegal manufacture of the explosives and for fifteen counts of causing illegal fireworks to be transported across state lines and one count of illegally dealing in explosives." | "He sentenced Bramblett, 54, to 10 years for taking part in the illegal manufacture of explosives and concurrent 10-year terms for each of 15 counts of causing illegal fireworks to be transported across state lines and one count of illegally dealing in explosives." [1] |
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Regards, Spintendo 07:53, 20 March 2018 (UTC)
As far as I can tell Drewmutt ( talk · contribs) has abbandonned this. My appolagies to Bneu2013. If you are still around and able, I am willing to take over the review. AIRcorn (talk) 23:00, 15 May 2018 (UTC)
Generally very good and probably almost there. A few comments below.
A massive explosion at an unlicensed fireworks factory producing illegal fireworks killed eleven, injured one, and revealed the existence of the factory for the first time to law enforcement and the public.
The event gained national attention, covered by multiple media outlets, and eventually led to the conviction of a number of people including the owner, a man who was considered to be the mastermind, and several others who conspired to manufacture, transport, or allow the fireworks manufactured at the operation to be transported.
been reported to have been the largest illegal fireworks operation in history
He was considered by many to be the mastermind of the operation.Many is vague. Can we expand on who this many is.
The initial blast was followed over the next several minutes by several smaller blasts which witnesses described as sounding like shotguns, believed to have been from individual firework cases which were not detonated in the initial blastPretty repetitive sentence (initial blast and which are used twice). Feel ther should be a parenthetical comma, but might not be needed if sentence is rearranged.
Federal firearms agents also found husks eight to ten inches in length and three to four inches in diameter] which prompted Polk County deputies to speculate that some of the explosives were being purchased by people with criminal intents, such as terroristsWhat are husks eight to ten inches in length and three to four inches in diameter and how does this lead to terrorism? Feel this needs expanding, or if it is just speculation it is probably not required.
Linda Sue Webb told authorities that she believed that they were "trying something new."This quote doesn't seem to add anything. What is meant by it?
Paul Wilson, a factory worker,At the fireworks factory or another one?>
Not all these a required for this to pass and I am happy to discuss anything you disagree with. Regards AIRcorn (talk) 06:17, 23 May 2018 (UTC)
largest illegal fireworks operation in history. To have this in the lead it needs to be expanded on in the articles body. I would be happy with a single sentence attributing who has said it was the largest in history. Better would be to expand on it like you have here as to why it is considered the largest. AIRcorn (talk) 16:07, 13 June 2018 (UTC)
The summary of this article (i.e. the table containing the basic facts) lists just one man accused and the same convicted, but the article shows that many people were charged and several of those were also convicted. Isn't the table misleading as it is? Shouldn't all the names appear? (Or at least name all those who were convicted, and perhaps just a number stating how many were charged but not convicted) TooManyFingers ( talk) 04:04, 1 November 2020 (UTC)
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I don't know if "industrial disaster" is the best way to describe this incident. This was an illegal operation, not a licensed industry. Bmag32 ( talk) 17:24, 19 April 2014 (UTC)
This is a pretty good article, reads well, and is probably about c or b-class. It needs to things, though- exact location and more info about the after math.
Bmag32 ( talk) 00:30, 9 July 2014 (UTC)
How can this operation be called successful? I removed the word successful from the opening paragraph. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 192.226.162.191 ( talk) 08:19, 6 January 2017 (UTC)
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Reviewer: Drewmutt ( talk · contribs) 00:40, 28 January 2018 (UTC)
Taking a look at the moment... Drewmutt (^ᴥ^) talk 01:16, 15 February 2018 (UTC)
Positive
Needs improvement
...explosion to a direct hit from a powerful bomb."that last quote shouldn't be there
Overall, I think it's very close, the narrative is very descriptive and the it covers the subject in a good amount of detail. Just need the prior cleaned up. Drewmutt (^ᴥ^) talk 01:48, 15 February 2018 (UTC)
@ Drewmutt: Before I get started, I'd like to point out a few things. First, I had 3 other images, but they were determined unnecessary per this discussion. Those were the best quality images I could find. Also, I have access to the news reports from '83 that are on YouTube (I purchased from the station's archives), but the one from 2008 was actually uploaded by the news station. Does that not qualify it as reliable? It is citing the station, not YouTube. I was also wondering if some of the interviews were a little too excessive. Bneu2013 ( talk) 06:17, 15 February 2018 (UTC)
The following text is insufficiently paraphrased from the source material, per WP:CLOSEPARAPHRASE:
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"A U.S. District Court Judge handed Bramblett two ten-year sentences for taking part in the illegal manufacture of the explosives and for fifteen counts of causing illegal fireworks to be transported across state lines and one count of illegally dealing in explosives." | "He sentenced Bramblett, 54, to 10 years for taking part in the illegal manufacture of explosives and concurrent 10-year terms for each of 15 counts of causing illegal fireworks to be transported across state lines and one count of illegally dealing in explosives." [1] |
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Regards, Spintendo 07:53, 20 March 2018 (UTC)
As far as I can tell Drewmutt ( talk · contribs) has abbandonned this. My appolagies to Bneu2013. If you are still around and able, I am willing to take over the review. AIRcorn (talk) 23:00, 15 May 2018 (UTC)
Generally very good and probably almost there. A few comments below.
A massive explosion at an unlicensed fireworks factory producing illegal fireworks killed eleven, injured one, and revealed the existence of the factory for the first time to law enforcement and the public.
The event gained national attention, covered by multiple media outlets, and eventually led to the conviction of a number of people including the owner, a man who was considered to be the mastermind, and several others who conspired to manufacture, transport, or allow the fireworks manufactured at the operation to be transported.
been reported to have been the largest illegal fireworks operation in history
He was considered by many to be the mastermind of the operation.Many is vague. Can we expand on who this many is.
The initial blast was followed over the next several minutes by several smaller blasts which witnesses described as sounding like shotguns, believed to have been from individual firework cases which were not detonated in the initial blastPretty repetitive sentence (initial blast and which are used twice). Feel ther should be a parenthetical comma, but might not be needed if sentence is rearranged.
Federal firearms agents also found husks eight to ten inches in length and three to four inches in diameter] which prompted Polk County deputies to speculate that some of the explosives were being purchased by people with criminal intents, such as terroristsWhat are husks eight to ten inches in length and three to four inches in diameter and how does this lead to terrorism? Feel this needs expanding, or if it is just speculation it is probably not required.
Linda Sue Webb told authorities that she believed that they were "trying something new."This quote doesn't seem to add anything. What is meant by it?
Paul Wilson, a factory worker,At the fireworks factory or another one?>
Not all these a required for this to pass and I am happy to discuss anything you disagree with. Regards AIRcorn (talk) 06:17, 23 May 2018 (UTC)
largest illegal fireworks operation in history. To have this in the lead it needs to be expanded on in the articles body. I would be happy with a single sentence attributing who has said it was the largest in history. Better would be to expand on it like you have here as to why it is considered the largest. AIRcorn (talk) 16:07, 13 June 2018 (UTC)
The summary of this article (i.e. the table containing the basic facts) lists just one man accused and the same convicted, but the article shows that many people were charged and several of those were also convicted. Isn't the table misleading as it is? Shouldn't all the names appear? (Or at least name all those who were convicted, and perhaps just a number stating how many were charged but not convicted) TooManyFingers ( talk) 04:04, 1 November 2020 (UTC)