Ok, as I go through I'm going to make some of the changes that come to mind, feel free to push back.
The lead looks ok, there's nothing wrong with a spoiler in the second sentence, though some people do find that vexing. You might want to mention if this was written early/late in Pane's career.
Roughly midway, as he focused on non-fiction after 1950
WP:PLUSING is more of a FAC thing than a GA thing, but try to keep it to a minimum anyway.
I'll take a look.
Advisor.js is giving me a "Bad ISBN checksum" notice.
Don't know why, that's copied straight from my edition. Worldcat doesn't have it either (Worldcat also doesn't have some of the early printings)
I could take a picture of the registration page (is that what it's called?) which has all the bibliographic data, then send it to you.
Crisco 1492 (
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23:31, 12 March 2012 (UTC)reply
Belay that last remark, no need to trouble the geniuses. The error comes up because you used a 10 digit ISBN in the infobox and 13 digit ISBNs in the references.
Mark Arsten (
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00:03, 13 March 2012 (UTC)reply
Makes sense (at the school now, on my break). The book only gives me the 10 digit number.
Under Influences it might be good to note a little more about how psychoanalysis influenced the book.
I'll see if any of the sources I have ready access go into more detail. Don't think I saw anything, and Pane died in 1970, so any of his writings may be hard to come by. (Even the biggest hits take a while to be reissued here)
Crisco 1492 (
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23:34, 12 March 2012 (UTC)reply
My hunch would be that the bit about "humans are inherently held back by their reminiscences of the past" might relate to psychoanalysis. (Though that's OR on my part)
Mark Arsten (
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00:34, 13 March 2012 (UTC)reply
I think (if I remember correctly, Google books doesn't open well here) that Christie discusses how the past holds the characters back, but he doesn't tie it explicitly with Freud.
"Meanwhile, opponents of the novel dismissed it as "pornographic", putting emphasis on traditionally taboo acts like prostitution and adultery." I think "putting" is
dangling here.
Perhaps "... emphasising traditionally taboo acts like prostitution and adultery."?
Is Balfas' quote in Reception a translation, or did he write in English?
Try to be consistent if you note the reviewers' nationalities.
From my look, only Christie and Taum aren't explicitly stated. However, both are noted as being related to a particular institution, with a location given. (As a side note, Taum was on the panel which went over my undergraduate thesis).
Is Christie the only Westerner that you can find who wrote about the book?
Only freely accessible one I could find. I think I saw a couple on Jstor, but 1) my satellite modem blocks jstor for some reason and 2) I don't have a subscription.
I spotchecked reference #10 off google books, no close paraphrasing or failed verification.
Spotchecked reference #9 on google books, no close paraphrasing or failed verification but in the copy I looked at the information is on page 71, not 70.
So by my count right now I only have to cut back on the noun + ings and add more about the characters. I should also take a look to see if the sources explicitly state a connection with Freud more than just it reflects his theory. Right?
Crisco 1492 (
talk)
02:06, 13 March 2012 (UTC)reply
Ok, as I go through I'm going to make some of the changes that come to mind, feel free to push back.
The lead looks ok, there's nothing wrong with a spoiler in the second sentence, though some people do find that vexing. You might want to mention if this was written early/late in Pane's career.
Roughly midway, as he focused on non-fiction after 1950
WP:PLUSING is more of a FAC thing than a GA thing, but try to keep it to a minimum anyway.
I'll take a look.
Advisor.js is giving me a "Bad ISBN checksum" notice.
Don't know why, that's copied straight from my edition. Worldcat doesn't have it either (Worldcat also doesn't have some of the early printings)
I could take a picture of the registration page (is that what it's called?) which has all the bibliographic data, then send it to you.
Crisco 1492 (
talk)
23:31, 12 March 2012 (UTC)reply
Belay that last remark, no need to trouble the geniuses. The error comes up because you used a 10 digit ISBN in the infobox and 13 digit ISBNs in the references.
Mark Arsten (
talk)
00:03, 13 March 2012 (UTC)reply
Makes sense (at the school now, on my break). The book only gives me the 10 digit number.
Under Influences it might be good to note a little more about how psychoanalysis influenced the book.
I'll see if any of the sources I have ready access go into more detail. Don't think I saw anything, and Pane died in 1970, so any of his writings may be hard to come by. (Even the biggest hits take a while to be reissued here)
Crisco 1492 (
talk)
23:34, 12 March 2012 (UTC)reply
My hunch would be that the bit about "humans are inherently held back by their reminiscences of the past" might relate to psychoanalysis. (Though that's OR on my part)
Mark Arsten (
talk)
00:34, 13 March 2012 (UTC)reply
I think (if I remember correctly, Google books doesn't open well here) that Christie discusses how the past holds the characters back, but he doesn't tie it explicitly with Freud.
"Meanwhile, opponents of the novel dismissed it as "pornographic", putting emphasis on traditionally taboo acts like prostitution and adultery." I think "putting" is
dangling here.
Perhaps "... emphasising traditionally taboo acts like prostitution and adultery."?
Is Balfas' quote in Reception a translation, or did he write in English?
Try to be consistent if you note the reviewers' nationalities.
From my look, only Christie and Taum aren't explicitly stated. However, both are noted as being related to a particular institution, with a location given. (As a side note, Taum was on the panel which went over my undergraduate thesis).
Is Christie the only Westerner that you can find who wrote about the book?
Only freely accessible one I could find. I think I saw a couple on Jstor, but 1) my satellite modem blocks jstor for some reason and 2) I don't have a subscription.
I spotchecked reference #10 off google books, no close paraphrasing or failed verification.
Spotchecked reference #9 on google books, no close paraphrasing or failed verification but in the copy I looked at the information is on page 71, not 70.
So by my count right now I only have to cut back on the noun + ings and add more about the characters. I should also take a look to see if the sources explicitly state a connection with Freud more than just it reflects his theory. Right?
Crisco 1492 (
talk)
02:06, 13 March 2012 (UTC)reply