The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
Add "the" before "Mongol conquest of the Khwarazmian Empire"
"On the Irghiz River, Aktobe Region, Kazakhstan" → "On the Irghiz River (modern day Aktobe Region, Kazakhstan)" as it makes reference to a modern place
Remove "Modern historians estimate" from both strength parameters in the infobox
I moved the article's three campaignboxes into the infobox
"The battle is described, in varying levels of detail, by four separate chroniclers" → "The battle is described in varying levels of detail by four separate chroniclers" unnecessary commas
"assembled a force of his own, and rode to meet them" → "assembled a force of his own and rode to meet them" unnecessary comma
Done
"at least one modern historian" which modern historian?
Done
Who is De Hartog? Include his first name
Done
Who is Sverdrup? same as above
Done
"it is often cited" by who?
Everyone, and I do mean everyone. I've attributed it to Barthold
I see, alright.
What's the relevance of the quote?
To illustrate the Shah's reaction. It's not necessary, should I remove it?
I personally don't see it's connection to the events, and it isn't necessary for the article so it should be removed.
Done
Overall
Coverage seems to be sufficient for what is known about the battle. It is interesting to me that we don't even know for certain what year it occurred in.
No war edits ongoing on the page.
Categories are good.
Article is well referenced.
Sources are reliable.
I saw that
Category:1209 in Asia did not exist, so I created it and added it to the page.
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
Add "the" before "Mongol conquest of the Khwarazmian Empire"
"On the Irghiz River, Aktobe Region, Kazakhstan" → "On the Irghiz River (modern day Aktobe Region, Kazakhstan)" as it makes reference to a modern place
Remove "Modern historians estimate" from both strength parameters in the infobox
I moved the article's three campaignboxes into the infobox
"The battle is described, in varying levels of detail, by four separate chroniclers" → "The battle is described in varying levels of detail by four separate chroniclers" unnecessary commas
"assembled a force of his own, and rode to meet them" → "assembled a force of his own and rode to meet them" unnecessary comma
Done
"at least one modern historian" which modern historian?
Done
Who is De Hartog? Include his first name
Done
Who is Sverdrup? same as above
Done
"it is often cited" by who?
Everyone, and I do mean everyone. I've attributed it to Barthold
I see, alright.
What's the relevance of the quote?
To illustrate the Shah's reaction. It's not necessary, should I remove it?
I personally don't see it's connection to the events, and it isn't necessary for the article so it should be removed.
Done
Overall
Coverage seems to be sufficient for what is known about the battle. It is interesting to me that we don't even know for certain what year it occurred in.
No war edits ongoing on the page.
Categories are good.
Article is well referenced.
Sources are reliable.
I saw that
Category:1209 in Asia did not exist, so I created it and added it to the page.
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.