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21:26, 3 April 2010 (UTC). This, (my second GAN review) is part of
Wikipedia:WikiProject Good articles/GAN backlog elimination drives/April 2010. On with the review:
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Taking over review: –– Jezhotwells ( talk) 15:07, 15 April 2010 (UTC)
6b comment= Some need alts
I'll try to address these issues shortly (today or tomorrow). Thanks. radek ( talk) 23:55, 15 April 2010 (UTC)
Re 1. Thanks, these are all good points. My excuse is that I was finishing the article up late at night and didn't proof read some things. Anyway, I've rewritten the portions you highlighted and tried to simplify and break up long sentences. Let me know if this works.
Re 2. Undoubtedly there are Spanish sources out there, unfortunately my Spanish is too basic for met utilize them in a meaningful way. The reason there are only two sources listed is because these two cover the battle in some detail. There's plenty other sources out there but for the most part they replicate what's found in Katz and McLynn. I'll add some inlines from other sources though for completeness. Otherwise I can add a "Further Reading" section or something similar. radek ( talk) 02:06, 16 April 2010 (UTC)
Re Orozco attacked from the north and Villa from the south. Both of them led their troops parallel to the US border. I wish I had an image here to illustrate. I changed "from" to "in". Basically Orozco attacked the north of the city but led the attack along the border and ditto for Villa in the south. radek ( talk) 02:30, 16 April 2010 (UTC)
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Hello, Reviewer:
Buggie111 (
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21:26, 3 April 2010 (UTC). This, (my second GAN review) is part of
Wikipedia:WikiProject Good articles/GAN backlog elimination drives/April 2010. On with the review:
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Disambiguations: none found
Dead links (link rot): none found.
Taking over review: –– Jezhotwells ( talk) 15:07, 15 April 2010 (UTC)
6b comment= Some need alts
I'll try to address these issues shortly (today or tomorrow). Thanks. radek ( talk) 23:55, 15 April 2010 (UTC)
Re 1. Thanks, these are all good points. My excuse is that I was finishing the article up late at night and didn't proof read some things. Anyway, I've rewritten the portions you highlighted and tried to simplify and break up long sentences. Let me know if this works.
Re 2. Undoubtedly there are Spanish sources out there, unfortunately my Spanish is too basic for met utilize them in a meaningful way. The reason there are only two sources listed is because these two cover the battle in some detail. There's plenty other sources out there but for the most part they replicate what's found in Katz and McLynn. I'll add some inlines from other sources though for completeness. Otherwise I can add a "Further Reading" section or something similar. radek ( talk) 02:06, 16 April 2010 (UTC)
Re Orozco attacked from the north and Villa from the south. Both of them led their troops parallel to the US border. I wish I had an image here to illustrate. I changed "from" to "in". Basically Orozco attacked the north of the city but led the attack along the border and ditto for Villa in the south. radek ( talk) 02:30, 16 April 2010 (UTC)