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Reviewer: No Great Shaker ( talk · contribs) 21:15, 24 May 2019 (UTC)
Should be able to start tomorrow. No Great Shaker ( talk) 21:15, 24 May 2019 (UTC)
I'm placing the review on hold as there are a couple of things needing attention. In the background section, the first sentence of the second paragraph needs revision because it doesn't flow, mainly because of the word "manifested" and also the contradiction of sentence subject between economy and military. I think it should be expanded and the meaning made clear. In addition, it needs a citation, as does the second sentence because there isn't necessarily a connection between the second and third sentences.
I made a few small changes, mainly to the introduction. There is no need for any article to begin with its title as that can lead to awkward construction. I think Imran Kombe meets the notability criteria and should have an article so I redlinked him.
Overall, it's an interesting read and I like the summary style aspect with everything in scope. If you can attend to the points raised above, I see no reason why this should not then pass GA. No Great Shaker ( talk) 10:06, 25 May 2019 (UTC)
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Reviewer: No Great Shaker ( talk · contribs) 21:15, 24 May 2019 (UTC)
Should be able to start tomorrow. No Great Shaker ( talk) 21:15, 24 May 2019 (UTC)
I'm placing the review on hold as there are a couple of things needing attention. In the background section, the first sentence of the second paragraph needs revision because it doesn't flow, mainly because of the word "manifested" and also the contradiction of sentence subject between economy and military. I think it should be expanded and the meaning made clear. In addition, it needs a citation, as does the second sentence because there isn't necessarily a connection between the second and third sentences.
I made a few small changes, mainly to the introduction. There is no need for any article to begin with its title as that can lead to awkward construction. I think Imran Kombe meets the notability criteria and should have an article so I redlinked him.
Overall, it's an interesting read and I like the summary style aspect with everything in scope. If you can attend to the points raised above, I see no reason why this should not then pass GA. No Great Shaker ( talk) 10:06, 25 May 2019 (UTC)