At first glance, this looks great. More detailed comments to follow soon.
J Milburn (
talk) 18:13, 6 June 2012 (UTC)reply
"Appearing from late winter to early summer, the inflorescences are dome-shaped flower heads rather than spikes as many other banksias. They arise from stems that are around a year old, with no lateral branchlets growing on from the flower head base." This isn't as clear as it could be.
"The name Banksia aquifolium was published in 1814 and reduced to synonymy.[1]" It's not clear what that line is doing there, considering you discuss it in the next paragraph? It's also not clear where the name "Sirmuellera ilicifolia" fits in.
rejigging now. There was another publication of a name which I can't find now. Odd bit removed and sirmuellera added.Casliber (
talk·contribs) 14:51, 7 June 2012 (UTC)reply
"Because of its dome-shaped flower heads, the Holly-leaved Banksia is placed in the subgenus Banksia subg. Isostylis.[5] It is the only common member of that subgenus; the two other species are rare and threatened,[6] and are protected under the Environment Protection and Biodiversity Conservation Act 1999." Would this information not belong in the subsection on the infrageneric placement?
There also seems to be a lot of crossover between the infrageneric placement subsection and the phylogeny subsection.
agree - I've merged them and am in the process of rejigging...Casliber (
talk·contribs) 09:19, 7 June 2012 (UTC)reply
"(‘community type 22’)" ?
just the name given by the WA government to one of the communities - can't find anything else about it under that nameCasliber (
talk·contribs) 13:55, 7 June 2012 (UTC)reply
"seasonally inundated" With what?
with water, might change that to "waterlogged"Casliber (
talk·contribs) 21:07, 6 June 2012 (UTC)reply
"include M. preissiana," Shouldn't this be the common name for consistency?
it is mentioned and linked in the preceding paragraphCasliber (
talk·contribs) 21:20, 6 June 2012 (UTC)reply
I'm assuming that this will be going to FAC, so a few pieces that could be adjusted before it's nominated-
The lead feels a tad short.
"and variously obovate (egg-shaped), elliptic, truncate or undulate in shape, and 3–10 cm (1–4 in) long. The leaf edges are generally serrated with broad v- to u-shaped sinuses" A little technical
I feel that the article is missing a close-up picture of the leaves, which are clearly characteristic
Looking again, I'm happy that this is ready for GA status. I do hope you push for FA- my notes above will hopefully be helpful there, and I do feel you should look again at the M. preissiana point above. However, these are niggles, and certainly will not stop this from being a strong GA. Good job!
J Milburn (
talk) 11:21, 8 June 2012 (UTC)reply
yeah, I'll work on the lead and the other points and get it to FAC soon - thanks for the review and pointers....:)Casliber (
talk·contribs) 14:29, 8 June 2012 (UTC)reply
At first glance, this looks great. More detailed comments to follow soon.
J Milburn (
talk) 18:13, 6 June 2012 (UTC)reply
"Appearing from late winter to early summer, the inflorescences are dome-shaped flower heads rather than spikes as many other banksias. They arise from stems that are around a year old, with no lateral branchlets growing on from the flower head base." This isn't as clear as it could be.
"The name Banksia aquifolium was published in 1814 and reduced to synonymy.[1]" It's not clear what that line is doing there, considering you discuss it in the next paragraph? It's also not clear where the name "Sirmuellera ilicifolia" fits in.
rejigging now. There was another publication of a name which I can't find now. Odd bit removed and sirmuellera added.Casliber (
talk·contribs) 14:51, 7 June 2012 (UTC)reply
"Because of its dome-shaped flower heads, the Holly-leaved Banksia is placed in the subgenus Banksia subg. Isostylis.[5] It is the only common member of that subgenus; the two other species are rare and threatened,[6] and are protected under the Environment Protection and Biodiversity Conservation Act 1999." Would this information not belong in the subsection on the infrageneric placement?
There also seems to be a lot of crossover between the infrageneric placement subsection and the phylogeny subsection.
agree - I've merged them and am in the process of rejigging...Casliber (
talk·contribs) 09:19, 7 June 2012 (UTC)reply
"(‘community type 22’)" ?
just the name given by the WA government to one of the communities - can't find anything else about it under that nameCasliber (
talk·contribs) 13:55, 7 June 2012 (UTC)reply
"seasonally inundated" With what?
with water, might change that to "waterlogged"Casliber (
talk·contribs) 21:07, 6 June 2012 (UTC)reply
"include M. preissiana," Shouldn't this be the common name for consistency?
it is mentioned and linked in the preceding paragraphCasliber (
talk·contribs) 21:20, 6 June 2012 (UTC)reply
I'm assuming that this will be going to FAC, so a few pieces that could be adjusted before it's nominated-
The lead feels a tad short.
"and variously obovate (egg-shaped), elliptic, truncate or undulate in shape, and 3–10 cm (1–4 in) long. The leaf edges are generally serrated with broad v- to u-shaped sinuses" A little technical
I feel that the article is missing a close-up picture of the leaves, which are clearly characteristic
Looking again, I'm happy that this is ready for GA status. I do hope you push for FA- my notes above will hopefully be helpful there, and I do feel you should look again at the M. preissiana point above. However, these are niggles, and certainly will not stop this from being a strong GA. Good job!
J Milburn (
talk) 11:21, 8 June 2012 (UTC)reply
yeah, I'll work on the lead and the other points and get it to FAC soon - thanks for the review and pointers....:)Casliber (
talk·contribs) 14:29, 8 June 2012 (UTC)reply