"Appearing from late winter to early summer, the inflorescences are dome-shaped flower heads rather than spikes as many other banksias. They arise from stems that are around a year old, with no lateral branchlets growing on from the flower head base." This isn't as clear as it could be.
"The name Banksia aquifolium was published in 1814 and reduced to synonymy.[1]" It's not clear what that line is doing there, considering you discuss it in the next paragraph? It's also not clear where the name "Sirmuellera ilicifolia" fits in.
"Because of its dome-shaped flower heads, the Holly-leaved Banksia is placed in the subgenus Banksia subg. Isostylis.[5] It is the only common member of that subgenus; the two other species are rare and threatened,[6] and are protected under the Environment Protection and Biodiversity Conservation Act 1999." Would this information not belong in the subsection on the infrageneric placement?
I'm assuming that this will be going to FAC, so a few pieces that could be adjusted before it's nominated-
The lead feels a tad short.
"and variously obovate (egg-shaped), elliptic, truncate or undulate in shape, and 3–10 cm (1–4 in) long. The leaf edges are generally serrated with broad v- to u-shaped sinuses" A little technical
I feel that the article is missing a close-up picture of the leaves, which are clearly characteristic
Looking again, I'm happy that this is ready for GA status. I do hope you push for FA- my notes above will hopefully be helpful there, and I do feel you should look again at the M. preissiana point above. However, these are niggles, and certainly will not stop this from being a strong GA. Good job!
J Milburn (
talk)
11:21, 8 June 2012 (UTC)reply
"Appearing from late winter to early summer, the inflorescences are dome-shaped flower heads rather than spikes as many other banksias. They arise from stems that are around a year old, with no lateral branchlets growing on from the flower head base." This isn't as clear as it could be.
"The name Banksia aquifolium was published in 1814 and reduced to synonymy.[1]" It's not clear what that line is doing there, considering you discuss it in the next paragraph? It's also not clear where the name "Sirmuellera ilicifolia" fits in.
"Because of its dome-shaped flower heads, the Holly-leaved Banksia is placed in the subgenus Banksia subg. Isostylis.[5] It is the only common member of that subgenus; the two other species are rare and threatened,[6] and are protected under the Environment Protection and Biodiversity Conservation Act 1999." Would this information not belong in the subsection on the infrageneric placement?
I'm assuming that this will be going to FAC, so a few pieces that could be adjusted before it's nominated-
The lead feels a tad short.
"and variously obovate (egg-shaped), elliptic, truncate or undulate in shape, and 3–10 cm (1–4 in) long. The leaf edges are generally serrated with broad v- to u-shaped sinuses" A little technical
I feel that the article is missing a close-up picture of the leaves, which are clearly characteristic
Looking again, I'm happy that this is ready for GA status. I do hope you push for FA- my notes above will hopefully be helpful there, and I do feel you should look again at the M. preissiana point above. However, these are niggles, and certainly will not stop this from being a strong GA. Good job!
J Milburn (
talk)
11:21, 8 June 2012 (UTC)reply