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Hey, I'm peer-reviewing this article. Overall it's really good, there are just two things I noticed:
But, like I said, it's overall very well-done. ModestMoussorgsky ( talk) 19:29, 5 April 2015 (UTC)
This is a solidly organized article, and a good place for someone to find an introduction to the Ayoreo people. Here are some suggestions for improvement and expansion.
-- Carwil ( talk) 14:28, 8 April 2015 (UTC)
Peer Review: The introduction to the article is very good! I think it does a job of hitting the major points without going to extensively into any one aspect of the topic yet. Under the culture section, I would clarify if the connection is known as Eami or if the territory is. It is a little bit unclear what "known" refers to there. I would also include what time period the records of infanticide were from. Also, when you talk about youth and scholarships, I would use "desire" or "need" instead of "wish". There are maybe a few word choice issues like this, but overall this is a very good article. The way the sections are divided is logical and flows well and I can tell that your research is strong. Good job! -- Rolandcharlotte ( talk) 15:19, 8 April 2015 (UTC)
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Hey, I'm peer-reviewing this article. Overall it's really good, there are just two things I noticed:
But, like I said, it's overall very well-done. ModestMoussorgsky ( talk) 19:29, 5 April 2015 (UTC)
This is a solidly organized article, and a good place for someone to find an introduction to the Ayoreo people. Here are some suggestions for improvement and expansion.
-- Carwil ( talk) 14:28, 8 April 2015 (UTC)
Peer Review: The introduction to the article is very good! I think it does a job of hitting the major points without going to extensively into any one aspect of the topic yet. Under the culture section, I would clarify if the connection is known as Eami or if the territory is. It is a little bit unclear what "known" refers to there. I would also include what time period the records of infanticide were from. Also, when you talk about youth and scholarships, I would use "desire" or "need" instead of "wish". There are maybe a few word choice issues like this, but overall this is a very good article. The way the sections are divided is logical and flows well and I can tell that your research is strong. Good job! -- Rolandcharlotte ( talk) 15:19, 8 April 2015 (UTC)