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Reviewer: QatarStarsLeague ( talk · contribs) 20:24, 13 June 2018 (UTC)
I'll take this one. QatarStarsLeague ( talk) 20:24, 13 June 2018 (UTC)
The redirect at the beginning can lose the capitalization on "right".
In the intro, the subjects such as philosophy and astronomy can be linked to.
Also, I might add his "unity of the intellect theory" to the intro.
We also might need a wikilink for "Neoplatonist"
"In the West...", comma after West.
I may be wrong, but I don't see the initial wikilinking of "Seville".
For the "Works" section, Averroes seems to have written on myriad topics beyond those mentioned in the section. Perhaps an "Other" subsection would address them?
"Thoughts" may be too elegiac a title for the subsection; "Beliefs" or "Philosophy, or "Doctrines" would be more encyclopedic.
I think all of the scientific fields Averroes covered, i.e. astronomy, physics, could be encapsulated as subsections within a "Sciences" section.
There is no article for "material intellect", so perhaps a brief summary is in order.
Only the BBC source seems to be dead.
Excellent work with this very crucial article.
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04:46, 15 June 2018 (UTC)
"who wrote about many subjects including" Not positive, but shouldn't a comma follow "subjects"? Also, an MOS thing: are these all of the subjects he wrote on (i.e. an exhaustive list), because if it is exhaustive, a different word from including should be used. Given the length of the list, I would probably assume totality and use a different word even if it is merely probably exhaustive. But the comma is the thing that initially grabbed my attention.
"numerous commentaries on Aristotle for which he was known" I think this is a run-on (comma should go after Aristotle).
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Reviewer: QatarStarsLeague ( talk · contribs) 20:24, 13 June 2018 (UTC)
I'll take this one. QatarStarsLeague ( talk) 20:24, 13 June 2018 (UTC)
The redirect at the beginning can lose the capitalization on "right".
In the intro, the subjects such as philosophy and astronomy can be linked to.
Also, I might add his "unity of the intellect theory" to the intro.
We also might need a wikilink for "Neoplatonist"
"In the West...", comma after West.
I may be wrong, but I don't see the initial wikilinking of "Seville".
For the "Works" section, Averroes seems to have written on myriad topics beyond those mentioned in the section. Perhaps an "Other" subsection would address them?
"Thoughts" may be too elegiac a title for the subsection; "Beliefs" or "Philosophy, or "Doctrines" would be more encyclopedic.
I think all of the scientific fields Averroes covered, i.e. astronomy, physics, could be encapsulated as subsections within a "Sciences" section.
There is no article for "material intellect", so perhaps a brief summary is in order.
Only the BBC source seems to be dead.
Excellent work with this very crucial article.
QatarStarsLeague (
talk)
04:46, 15 June 2018 (UTC)
"who wrote about many subjects including" Not positive, but shouldn't a comma follow "subjects"? Also, an MOS thing: are these all of the subjects he wrote on (i.e. an exhaustive list), because if it is exhaustive, a different word from including should be used. Given the length of the list, I would probably assume totality and use a different word even if it is merely probably exhaustive. But the comma is the thing that initially grabbed my attention.
"numerous commentaries on Aristotle for which he was known" I think this is a run-on (comma should go after Aristotle).