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Reviewer: Eviolite ( talk · contribs) 01:46, 3 January 2022 (UTC)
Hi, I'll take a look at this one today or tomorrow.
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01:46, 3 January 2022 (UTC)
Here are my notes:
I 1887 gikk faren konkursand it seems konkurs has no definition besides "bankrupt". On the other hand it says her two older sisters died when she was 17, which may warrant inclusion.
In Aasen's portrait, Finskog wears a green dress—a colored garment (a gákti) that was earlier hindered by pastor Lars Levi Laestadius's fundamentalist branch of Christianity (Laestadianism), though they increased in popularity in the 1840sHindered in what way? It might just be my reading but it makes it sound like that specific dress was hindered. This sentence also feels a bit unwieldy, but I'm not sure how to rectify that.
which became discouraged under ... Laestadiussays Pushaw, so I'm not sure. I've made some adjustments for flow, hopefully it's better
Otherwise, the article is interesting and reads pretty well. I've made some minor copyedits as well, feel free to revert if they're not an improvement. @ Urve: Placing on hold pending the above. eviolite (talk) 02:38, 3 January 2022 (UTC)
Thanks for the edits; I'm satisfied with the changes (after two minor grammatical changes) and am happy to promote this to GA. Great work! eviolite (talk) 03:19, 3 January 2022 (UTC)
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Reviewer: Eviolite ( talk · contribs) 01:46, 3 January 2022 (UTC)
Hi, I'll take a look at this one today or tomorrow.
eviolite
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01:46, 3 January 2022 (UTC)
Here are my notes:
I 1887 gikk faren konkursand it seems konkurs has no definition besides "bankrupt". On the other hand it says her two older sisters died when she was 17, which may warrant inclusion.
In Aasen's portrait, Finskog wears a green dress—a colored garment (a gákti) that was earlier hindered by pastor Lars Levi Laestadius's fundamentalist branch of Christianity (Laestadianism), though they increased in popularity in the 1840sHindered in what way? It might just be my reading but it makes it sound like that specific dress was hindered. This sentence also feels a bit unwieldy, but I'm not sure how to rectify that.
which became discouraged under ... Laestadiussays Pushaw, so I'm not sure. I've made some adjustments for flow, hopefully it's better
Otherwise, the article is interesting and reads pretty well. I've made some minor copyedits as well, feel free to revert if they're not an improvement. @ Urve: Placing on hold pending the above. eviolite (talk) 02:38, 3 January 2022 (UTC)
Thanks for the edits; I'm satisfied with the changes (after two minor grammatical changes) and am happy to promote this to GA. Great work! eviolite (talk) 03:19, 3 January 2022 (UTC)