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I would advise that you ask for a read-through by a professional English user. See for instance Wikipedia:WikiProject Guild of Copy Editors. Some sentences seem a little off.
Geschichte ( talk) 21:57, 16 December 2021 (UTC)
Some portraits are ascribed to specific individuals, such as Thorkild Jonassen or Daniel Mortensen.but
The artist would produce at least three separate portraits of Thorkel Jonassen
The Sámi lawyer Ánde Somby has noted that green-colored gákti, which became discouraged under the strict fundamentalist sect of Christianity under the aegis of Lars Levi Laestadius, exploded in popularity among the Sámi after the 1840s. For many in the Nordic countries, Laestadianism was explicitly connected to an infamously violent episode of Sámi-Norwegian history: the Guoavdageaidnu/Kautokeino Rebellion of 1852.-- I changed it to fundamentalist for redundancy in the following sentence but I think violent is correct.
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Reviewer: Eviolite ( talk · contribs) 01:46, 3 January 2022 (UTC)
Hi, I'll take a look at this one today or tomorrow.
eviolite
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Here are my notes:
I 1887 gikk faren konkursand it seems konkurs has no definition besides "bankrupt". On the other hand it says her two older sisters died when she was 17, which may warrant inclusion.
In Aasen's portrait, Finskog wears a green dress—a colored garment (a gákti) that was earlier hindered by pastor Lars Levi Laestadius's fundamentalist branch of Christianity (Laestadianism), though they increased in popularity in the 1840sHindered in what way? It might just be my reading but it makes it sound like that specific dress was hindered. This sentence also feels a bit unwieldy, but I'm not sure how to rectify that.
which became discouraged under ... Laestadiussays Pushaw, so I'm not sure. I've made some adjustments for flow, hopefully it's better
Otherwise, the article is interesting and reads pretty well. I've made some minor copyedits as well, feel free to revert if they're not an improvement. @ Urve: Placing on hold pending the above. eviolite (talk) 02:38, 3 January 2022 (UTC)
Thanks for the edits; I'm satisfied with the changes (after two minor grammatical changes) and am happy to promote this to GA. Great work! eviolite (talk) 03:19, 3 January 2022 (UTC)
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I would advise that you ask for a read-through by a professional English user. See for instance Wikipedia:WikiProject Guild of Copy Editors. Some sentences seem a little off.
Geschichte ( talk) 21:57, 16 December 2021 (UTC)
Some portraits are ascribed to specific individuals, such as Thorkild Jonassen or Daniel Mortensen.but
The artist would produce at least three separate portraits of Thorkel Jonassen
The Sámi lawyer Ánde Somby has noted that green-colored gákti, which became discouraged under the strict fundamentalist sect of Christianity under the aegis of Lars Levi Laestadius, exploded in popularity among the Sámi after the 1840s. For many in the Nordic countries, Laestadianism was explicitly connected to an infamously violent episode of Sámi-Norwegian history: the Guoavdageaidnu/Kautokeino Rebellion of 1852.-- I changed it to fundamentalist for redundancy in the following sentence but I think violent is correct.
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Reviewer: Eviolite ( talk · contribs) 01:46, 3 January 2022 (UTC)
Hi, I'll take a look at this one today or tomorrow.
eviolite
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01:46, 3 January 2022 (UTC)
Here are my notes:
I 1887 gikk faren konkursand it seems konkurs has no definition besides "bankrupt". On the other hand it says her two older sisters died when she was 17, which may warrant inclusion.
In Aasen's portrait, Finskog wears a green dress—a colored garment (a gákti) that was earlier hindered by pastor Lars Levi Laestadius's fundamentalist branch of Christianity (Laestadianism), though they increased in popularity in the 1840sHindered in what way? It might just be my reading but it makes it sound like that specific dress was hindered. This sentence also feels a bit unwieldy, but I'm not sure how to rectify that.
which became discouraged under ... Laestadiussays Pushaw, so I'm not sure. I've made some adjustments for flow, hopefully it's better
Otherwise, the article is interesting and reads pretty well. I've made some minor copyedits as well, feel free to revert if they're not an improvement. @ Urve: Placing on hold pending the above. eviolite (talk) 02:38, 3 January 2022 (UTC)
Thanks for the edits; I'm satisfied with the changes (after two minor grammatical changes) and am happy to promote this to GA. Great work! eviolite (talk) 03:19, 3 January 2022 (UTC)