The lead is rather thin. It should contain a summary of the recording sessions, a little on the symbolism, and the legacy. See
WP:LEAD Done
I added information to the lead about the recording sessions and symbolism. I wasn't sure what more to put about the legacy. Can you help with a suggestion?
Agadant (
talk) 04:18, 11 May 2012 (UTC) I added missing information to the lead and body about the live tour and releases 40 years later.
Agadant (
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02:24, 12 May 2012 (UTC)reply
In the lead: " "neither instant nor evanescent: Astral Weeks will sell as many copies this year as it did in 1968 and has every year in between"." needs direct attribution, i.e. who said that. Done
I think I added it in the lead as a convenience when someone questioned the album's acclaim. Have removed it as the individual rankings mentioned in the legacy section have sources.
Agadant (
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22:45, 9 May 2012 (UTC)reply
I don't think that "With varied rhythms and frenzied vocals, mixed with bizarre lyrics that evoke images instead of coherent ideas and narratives, Astral Weeks has been compared to the school of Impressionism in painting, which similarly seeks to evoke emotions associated with an image." is adequately supported by "Van Morrison's Astral Weeks has come to signify a soulful impressionism that wells up from sources Wordsworth deemed "too deep for tears." from ref #36
[2] Done
I rewrote the paragraph and sourced it accordingly.
Agadant (
talk) 04:18, 11 May 2012 (UTC) Did a little more work on it and sorted the refs for easier checking. I've really had 'writer's block' on this one and then I found the misplaced ref for the earlier version but I think this gives more information to the reader.
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20:00, 11 May 2012 (UTC)reply
ref #19
[3] "Lester Bangs:Astral Weeks". personal.cis.strath.ac.uk. Retrieved 29 September 2011. is not really a correct citation. It should say that it was an article in "Stranded" (is that a magazine) from 1979 hosted on a personal website of a computing lecturer.
[4] As it stands the implication is that it is some sort of official document. Doesn't make it a reliable source. Done
The lead is rather thin. It should contain a summary of the recording sessions, a little on the symbolism, and the legacy. See
WP:LEAD Done
I added information to the lead about the recording sessions and symbolism. I wasn't sure what more to put about the legacy. Can you help with a suggestion?
Agadant (
talk) 04:18, 11 May 2012 (UTC) I added missing information to the lead and body about the live tour and releases 40 years later.
Agadant (
talk)
02:24, 12 May 2012 (UTC)reply
In the lead: " "neither instant nor evanescent: Astral Weeks will sell as many copies this year as it did in 1968 and has every year in between"." needs direct attribution, i.e. who said that. Done
I think I added it in the lead as a convenience when someone questioned the album's acclaim. Have removed it as the individual rankings mentioned in the legacy section have sources.
Agadant (
talk)
22:45, 9 May 2012 (UTC)reply
I don't think that "With varied rhythms and frenzied vocals, mixed with bizarre lyrics that evoke images instead of coherent ideas and narratives, Astral Weeks has been compared to the school of Impressionism in painting, which similarly seeks to evoke emotions associated with an image." is adequately supported by "Van Morrison's Astral Weeks has come to signify a soulful impressionism that wells up from sources Wordsworth deemed "too deep for tears." from ref #36
[2] Done
I rewrote the paragraph and sourced it accordingly.
Agadant (
talk) 04:18, 11 May 2012 (UTC) Did a little more work on it and sorted the refs for easier checking. I've really had 'writer's block' on this one and then I found the misplaced ref for the earlier version but I think this gives more information to the reader.
Agadant (
talk)
20:00, 11 May 2012 (UTC)reply
ref #19
[3] "Lester Bangs:Astral Weeks". personal.cis.strath.ac.uk. Retrieved 29 September 2011. is not really a correct citation. It should say that it was an article in "Stranded" (is that a magazine) from 1979 hosted on a personal website of a computing lecturer.
[4] As it stands the implication is that it is some sort of official document. Doesn't make it a reliable source. Done