'The task of securing the Arnhem road bridge fell to the British 1st Airborne Division who dropped on the area on 17 September.' - Needs a comma after Division, and it should probably be 'which' not 'who'.
No need to capitalize 'Division' unless it's part of a title.
'With the exception of some of the Poles killed south of the river in Driel,' - What happened to the Poles? I'm guessing they were buried elsewhere after the battle, but please clarify slightly.
I would convert the lists of the VC winners into prose and make a paragraph out of them.
Details of the German dead is a single-sentence paragraph; please merge this into the previous paragraph.
I've reworked and referenced the first para of background, and redone the cemetery sections (plus expanded them a bit). As for the Poles, it's a while since I wrote this. I think I put it because the number of Polish graves don't match the total Polish dead, so I assumed some of these killed at Driel must have been taken when they pulled back. What happened to them after that I don't know. Instead I've totally reworded the line.
Citing the first paragraph of the background section would be a good idea.
Although this won't stop me passing the article, what makes the website used for reference 7 a
WP: Reliable Source?
Whilst I'd like to be able to make some killer defence of the site, there isn't anything really. It's obviously a personal site, and I usually use the photo galleries for external links, but not as a ref. I couldn't find this bit of info anywhere else unfortunately, although the photo slideshow the site has slightly backs it up. Although this doesn't meet WP:RS, my gut feeling is that the site is right on this one, just because it's amassed such a huge collection of materials, and doesn't make many specific claims otherwise.
'The task of securing the Arnhem road bridge fell to the British 1st Airborne Division who dropped on the area on 17 September.' - Needs a comma after Division, and it should probably be 'which' not 'who'.
No need to capitalize 'Division' unless it's part of a title.
'With the exception of some of the Poles killed south of the river in Driel,' - What happened to the Poles? I'm guessing they were buried elsewhere after the battle, but please clarify slightly.
I would convert the lists of the VC winners into prose and make a paragraph out of them.
Details of the German dead is a single-sentence paragraph; please merge this into the previous paragraph.
I've reworked and referenced the first para of background, and redone the cemetery sections (plus expanded them a bit). As for the Poles, it's a while since I wrote this. I think I put it because the number of Polish graves don't match the total Polish dead, so I assumed some of these killed at Driel must have been taken when they pulled back. What happened to them after that I don't know. Instead I've totally reworded the line.
Citing the first paragraph of the background section would be a good idea.
Although this won't stop me passing the article, what makes the website used for reference 7 a
WP: Reliable Source?
Whilst I'd like to be able to make some killer defence of the site, there isn't anything really. It's obviously a personal site, and I usually use the photo galleries for external links, but not as a ref. I couldn't find this bit of info anywhere else unfortunately, although the photo slideshow the site has slightly backs it up. Although this doesn't meet WP:RS, my gut feeling is that the site is right on this one, just because it's amassed such a huge collection of materials, and doesn't make many specific claims otherwise.