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Hi, I'm going to chip in and review this article for Good Article status. This is my first time reviewing an article, but I've undergone the process with several articles that I've written, so I know what it takes to write a Good Article. My gut feeling is that this will go smoothly: the material appears to be thorough, and it's well-supported with reliable references. A couple of the sections have some grammar issues, but it's mostly well-written. The small grammar issues, I may fix myself; but there's at least one instance where the issues are such as to make the meaning unclear. I'll give more specifics later, and then I'll put the article on hold to give you time to clear those up. Normally, the article is put on hold for a week, but I can't do that because I'm in the middle of moving. We'll work around that, but there don't at first glance appear to be many glaring issues.
Reviewer: Dementia13 ( talk) 02:10, 27 August 2010 (UTC)
Beta-2 has two builds (beta-2a: 28 February 1996 and beta-2b: 21 March 1996) and introduced a new Application programming interface (API)).
I fixed this for you. It now reads like this:
Beta-2 had two builds (beta-2a: 28 February 1996 and beta-2b: 21 March 1996) and introduced a new Application programming interface (API)).
See the difference? It had and introduced, both past tense. Or make them both present tense, just don't randomly mix and match.
This API can be used for communication with other applications, in the same way that the application browser-history can,
or is it:
This API can be used for communication with other applications, such as browser-history
please clarify that.
I've made numerous minor grammatical fixes, but I'm leaving the rest up to you. I'm going to put this article on hold while you make the necessary changes. Since the issues involved are not large, and I'll be unavailable for most of next week, it'd be great if these could be cleaned up over the next three days. And, just so you don't think I'm picking on you, nice job with the article. Clearly, a lot of work went into it. The fixes I specified are small compared to the amount of effort you've put into it already. Dementia13 ( talk) 03:08, 27 August 2010 (UTC)
This API can be used for communication with other applications, in the same way that the application browser-history can,
or is it:
This API can be used for communication with other applications, such as browser-history
please clarify that.
as I mention already above I will only mark it as finish mabdul 23:39, 29 August 2010 (UTC)
OK, this is getting there. Here's what's left:
When I said that you should list the OSes for which support was added, I didn't mean that you shouldn't mention that if you couldn't name the OSes, I just meant that it was a detail that belonged in the article. Anyway, it looks good with your revisions; and after I've done some grammar corrections, I think it's ready to pass. BTW, as you mentioned, your English is OK, but when you're writing in a language other than your native language, you have to work a little harder to make sure that your spelling is correct and that you're using correct idiomatic phrases. Good work. Dementia13 ( talk) 03:21, 30 August 2010 (UTC)
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Hi, I'm going to chip in and review this article for Good Article status. This is my first time reviewing an article, but I've undergone the process with several articles that I've written, so I know what it takes to write a Good Article. My gut feeling is that this will go smoothly: the material appears to be thorough, and it's well-supported with reliable references. A couple of the sections have some grammar issues, but it's mostly well-written. The small grammar issues, I may fix myself; but there's at least one instance where the issues are such as to make the meaning unclear. I'll give more specifics later, and then I'll put the article on hold to give you time to clear those up. Normally, the article is put on hold for a week, but I can't do that because I'm in the middle of moving. We'll work around that, but there don't at first glance appear to be many glaring issues.
Reviewer: Dementia13 ( talk) 02:10, 27 August 2010 (UTC)
Beta-2 has two builds (beta-2a: 28 February 1996 and beta-2b: 21 March 1996) and introduced a new Application programming interface (API)).
I fixed this for you. It now reads like this:
Beta-2 had two builds (beta-2a: 28 February 1996 and beta-2b: 21 March 1996) and introduced a new Application programming interface (API)).
See the difference? It had and introduced, both past tense. Or make them both present tense, just don't randomly mix and match.
This API can be used for communication with other applications, in the same way that the application browser-history can,
or is it:
This API can be used for communication with other applications, such as browser-history
please clarify that.
I've made numerous minor grammatical fixes, but I'm leaving the rest up to you. I'm going to put this article on hold while you make the necessary changes. Since the issues involved are not large, and I'll be unavailable for most of next week, it'd be great if these could be cleaned up over the next three days. And, just so you don't think I'm picking on you, nice job with the article. Clearly, a lot of work went into it. The fixes I specified are small compared to the amount of effort you've put into it already. Dementia13 ( talk) 03:08, 27 August 2010 (UTC)
This API can be used for communication with other applications, in the same way that the application browser-history can,
or is it:
This API can be used for communication with other applications, such as browser-history
please clarify that.
as I mention already above I will only mark it as finish mabdul 23:39, 29 August 2010 (UTC)
OK, this is getting there. Here's what's left:
When I said that you should list the OSes for which support was added, I didn't mean that you shouldn't mention that if you couldn't name the OSes, I just meant that it was a detail that belonged in the article. Anyway, it looks good with your revisions; and after I've done some grammar corrections, I think it's ready to pass. BTW, as you mentioned, your English is OK, but when you're writing in a language other than your native language, you have to work a little harder to make sure that your spelling is correct and that you're using correct idiomatic phrases. Good work. Dementia13 ( talk) 03:21, 30 August 2010 (UTC)