The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
"awards including "triple crown" (three consecutive wins) on" → "awards, including three consecutive wins that led to receiving the "triple crown" award on"
The columns below the first in the table should not be centered, apart from refs
Done all
Commercial performance
Img looks good
"was a huge success in South Korea." → "was a commercial success in South Korea."
"to the top of" → "to the top position of"
The "including" part should come after "streaming site's real-time charts" and does not need brackets
"The single remained at the top of all" → "The song remained atop all"
"for seven consecutive days." → "for a full week."
"On Korea's largest" → "On South Korea's largest
"for 8 weeks." → "for eight weeks."
Add release years of "Good Day" and "Gangnam Style" in brackets and mention at the end of the sentence that it tied them for second most consecutive weeks atop the chart
"It dropped to number two" → "The song fell down to number two"
"of February 22." → "of February 22, 2020."
"On the first week of March," → "In the first week of that year's March,"
"previously held by" → "which was previously held by"
Add release year of "Love Scenario" in brackets
"The single spent" → "The song spent"
"in the chart's top ten before" → "in the top 10 of the chart." since the rest of the sentence is useless per
WP:CHARTTRAJ; however, keep the rest of the increase/decreases since they do not violate this rule
"also topped the component" → "also topped the Gaon component"
"and two consecutive weeks respectively." → "and two consecutive weeks, respectively."
"in January and March" → "in both January and March"
"in South Korea based on" → "in South Korea, based on"
On hold for the first review I took on of one of your articles in over a month, have faith the changes will be fixed in a week or less since it is small! --
K. Peake11:29, 25 October 2020 (UTC)reply
Kyle Peake, thank you so much for taking this up so quickly. I have mostly fixed the issues pointed out by you and left two comments above. Also, can you take a look at the "Commercial performance" section once? I have added the line: "The song's commercial success has been attributed to the viral dance-challenge." which I'd initially forgotten. If you think the sentence needs a fix please feel free to suggest. I'm also thinking if this sentence should be added to the lead? --
Ashleyyoursmile!12:53, 25 October 2020 (UTC)reply
Ashleyyoursmile Change "the viral dance-challenge" → "its viral dance challenge", plus you also need to make the fix that I explained in references after my previous mistake and then this article will be fine. Also no, I do not believe it needs to be included in the lead even though that looks sick at three paragraphs currently that will look even better on the GAN page soon!!! --
K. Peake12:57, 25 October 2020 (UTC)reply
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
"awards including "triple crown" (three consecutive wins) on" → "awards, including three consecutive wins that led to receiving the "triple crown" award on"
The columns below the first in the table should not be centered, apart from refs
Done all
Commercial performance
Img looks good
"was a huge success in South Korea." → "was a commercial success in South Korea."
"to the top of" → "to the top position of"
The "including" part should come after "streaming site's real-time charts" and does not need brackets
"The single remained at the top of all" → "The song remained atop all"
"for seven consecutive days." → "for a full week."
"On Korea's largest" → "On South Korea's largest
"for 8 weeks." → "for eight weeks."
Add release years of "Good Day" and "Gangnam Style" in brackets and mention at the end of the sentence that it tied them for second most consecutive weeks atop the chart
"It dropped to number two" → "The song fell down to number two"
"of February 22." → "of February 22, 2020."
"On the first week of March," → "In the first week of that year's March,"
"previously held by" → "which was previously held by"
Add release year of "Love Scenario" in brackets
"The single spent" → "The song spent"
"in the chart's top ten before" → "in the top 10 of the chart." since the rest of the sentence is useless per
WP:CHARTTRAJ; however, keep the rest of the increase/decreases since they do not violate this rule
"also topped the component" → "also topped the Gaon component"
"and two consecutive weeks respectively." → "and two consecutive weeks, respectively."
"in January and March" → "in both January and March"
"in South Korea based on" → "in South Korea, based on"
On hold for the first review I took on of one of your articles in over a month, have faith the changes will be fixed in a week or less since it is small! --
K. Peake11:29, 25 October 2020 (UTC)reply
Kyle Peake, thank you so much for taking this up so quickly. I have mostly fixed the issues pointed out by you and left two comments above. Also, can you take a look at the "Commercial performance" section once? I have added the line: "The song's commercial success has been attributed to the viral dance-challenge." which I'd initially forgotten. If you think the sentence needs a fix please feel free to suggest. I'm also thinking if this sentence should be added to the lead? --
Ashleyyoursmile!12:53, 25 October 2020 (UTC)reply
Ashleyyoursmile Change "the viral dance-challenge" → "its viral dance challenge", plus you also need to make the fix that I explained in references after my previous mistake and then this article will be fine. Also no, I do not believe it needs to be included in the lead even though that looks sick at three paragraphs currently that will look even better on the GAN page soon!!! --
K. Peake12:57, 25 October 2020 (UTC)reply
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.