"It premiered on 19 February 2017" → "The song premiered on 19 February of that year"
"with a lyrical theme of" → "with the lyrical theme of"
Remove wikilink on breakup
"The track received praise from
music critics – some reviewers considered" → "The song received positive reviews from
music critics, with some reviewers considering"
"number one or top ten in several territories" → "number one or the top ten in several countries"
Remove wikilinks on competition and 2010s
"Salvador Sobral performed alone" → "Salvador Sobral performed the song alone"
Done Except: The language should be in the Infobox anytime a song is not in English per the Infobox instructions. Also, I took the "all-time top Portuguese love song" to mean musically, not linguistically, but I've made the change anyway.
"received praise from" → "was met with positive reviews from" to be less repetitive with the lead by changing to "was met with"
Newspapers and other forms of publication don't need to have full introductions in this section since only quotes of critics' viewpoints are mentioned; just mention the names of the publications, not what type they classify as
20 Minutes should not have minutes capitalised as that's how it's titled
"called "Amar pelos dois" a" → "called the track a" to avoid stating the title two sentences in a row
"that its jazz-pop tempo" → "that the song's jazz-pop tempo" and switch the word claimed to something else per
WP:CLAIM
Write "The staff of" before Paris Match
"it as one of their ten favourite entries of the year" → "the song as one of their ten favourite entries of 2017"
"named it "Portugal's" → "named the song "Portugal's"
Done It's already pretty difficult to list the peaks without it sounding too wordy. I feel like adding in the chart names might make it harder to read, as many of them have similar, descriptive names. Up to you.
Remove wikilinks to the Festival and Eurovision, respectively
"her brother, Salvador Sobral, was" → "Salvador Sobral was" as we already know they're related from earlier in the article
"by Luísa Sobral, written for the competition, Salvador Sobral selected" → "by Luísa, written for the competition, Salvador selected" per
MOS:SAMESURNAME
"the song he would like" → "the song that he would like"
Merge this with the below section since that counts as legacy and place that info about the sub-section; still keep the latter here, though.
Done
European Union Songbook
Remove wikilink on love song
""Amar pelos dois" was the most" → "The song was the most" as you mentioned the title one sentence ago
Done
Use in media
Look at what I said above; still make these changes as well, though.
""Amar pelos dois" generated" → "The track generated"
"theme, "Amar pelos dois" is" → "theme, it is"
Done
Cover versions
Imgs need alt text
Remove the two Eurovision wikilinks on the first bullet point
Remove wikilink to Eurovision Song Contest 2017 on the second
Do this for 2018 on the fourth
Remove wikilink to talk show on bullet point five
Mention actor's nationality on seven
Remove second wikilink in this section to France's 2018 Eurovision Contest involvement
Do the same for any wikilinks to country involvements for years that have been wikilinked earlier in this section or elsewhere prior in the article; I am not going to point out each individual one as you can find them yourself.
Done except changing the alt text. Having descriptive alt text (woman in hat, etc) is not relevant to the inclusion of the photo. The caption states everything relevant, which is that they are photos of people who have covered the song. This is in line with alt text criteria.
Grk1011 (
talk)
21:39, 30 May 2020 (UTC)reply
Track listings
Good
Credits and personnel
Are you sure capitalisation is required for the roles enlisted?
Rather than having ref 101 invoked twice, invoke it before ref 102 and change the sentence to including being adapted from ESC Portugal website
Done
Awards
Place this directly after Critical reception section
Add ref at the end of the first para's last sentence
Second para looks good
Make this table sortable
Add a separate col for refs that is not sortable and puts them in the centre
Done
Charts
Good
Certifications
Are you sure a different certification table bottom shouldn't be used? Otherwise, looks good.
Done
Release history
Use bullet pointed list to separate digital download and streaming here
Good elsewise
Done
Notes
Good
References
Copyvio score is around 50%; this is too high and needs paraphrasing to fix it
Loads of these are missing accessdates; make sure that they are added
Date layout should be consistent throughout the refs with the English language "19 February 2017" style
Refs 21, 43 and 64 are all from an unreliable source in Twitter
Refs 82, 83 and 88 have the same issue with Facebook
There are other issues but I will wait until you have responded to my first comments, since the refs will be moved around for 100% and I don't want to create heavy confusion
Will name the further issues below
You still haven't added accessdates to quite a few of these
Some are missing the language parameter; add them for non-english refs
Refs 1, 45, 46, 47, 57, 58, 61 and 62 should solely cite the publisher
Change ref 2 to solely citing the publisher and remove "on Apple Music" from the titles, while only wikilink to the publisher once
Ref 3 should cite as a publisher instead
Ref 4 should not cite the publisher
Remove ref 6's publisher
Ref 8 should cite as a publisher instead
20 minutes should not have the second word capitalised on ref 9
Remove ref 10's publisher
Ditto for ref 11
Ref 12 should cite as a publisher instead
Remove ref 13's publisher
Ditto for refs 14, 15, 16 and 17
Change RTP to the publisher for refs 18, 38, 41 and 67, with no wiklinks
Ref 20 should cite as a publisher instead
Ditto for ref 21
Ref 22 should include a date in the title or add the parameter
On hold but will have comments about the refs after you have sorted out everything; the other issues are a lot bigger, that's why I'm putting this to the current state! --
Kyle Peake (
talk)
20:07, 23 May 2020 (UTC)reply
I believe the references are the only items I have left. I need to work on the access dates a bit more. They won't move around now if you want to start to look through them? I'm trying to finish this up for you so you can make the 31 May deadline. Regarding the copyright score, it's just the eurovision.tv website because of the quote by the song's writer as well as "Eurovision" a few dozen times. The compare button shows no correlation.
Grk1011 (
talk)
01:44, 28 May 2020 (UTC)reply
@
Kyle Peake: I have made the above changes to the references and a few more that were related to your comments that may have been missed. The social media sources are ok per
WP:SELFSOURCE. Is there a guideline that says otherwise? I'll reformat them with dates, titles, etc when I hear back. Thanks.
Grk1011 (
talk)
19:45, 29 May 2020 (UTC)reply
Grk1011 Have looked again, and a few other refs are missing accessdates; check that all have them apart from ones like liner notes that don't cite that parameter at all. --
Kyle Peake (
talk)
14:26, 31 May 2020 (UTC)reply
"It premiered on 19 February 2017" → "The song premiered on 19 February of that year"
"with a lyrical theme of" → "with the lyrical theme of"
Remove wikilink on breakup
"The track received praise from
music critics – some reviewers considered" → "The song received positive reviews from
music critics, with some reviewers considering"
"number one or top ten in several territories" → "number one or the top ten in several countries"
Remove wikilinks on competition and 2010s
"Salvador Sobral performed alone" → "Salvador Sobral performed the song alone"
Done Except: The language should be in the Infobox anytime a song is not in English per the Infobox instructions. Also, I took the "all-time top Portuguese love song" to mean musically, not linguistically, but I've made the change anyway.
"received praise from" → "was met with positive reviews from" to be less repetitive with the lead by changing to "was met with"
Newspapers and other forms of publication don't need to have full introductions in this section since only quotes of critics' viewpoints are mentioned; just mention the names of the publications, not what type they classify as
20 Minutes should not have minutes capitalised as that's how it's titled
"called "Amar pelos dois" a" → "called the track a" to avoid stating the title two sentences in a row
"that its jazz-pop tempo" → "that the song's jazz-pop tempo" and switch the word claimed to something else per
WP:CLAIM
Write "The staff of" before Paris Match
"it as one of their ten favourite entries of the year" → "the song as one of their ten favourite entries of 2017"
"named it "Portugal's" → "named the song "Portugal's"
Done It's already pretty difficult to list the peaks without it sounding too wordy. I feel like adding in the chart names might make it harder to read, as many of them have similar, descriptive names. Up to you.
Remove wikilinks to the Festival and Eurovision, respectively
"her brother, Salvador Sobral, was" → "Salvador Sobral was" as we already know they're related from earlier in the article
"by Luísa Sobral, written for the competition, Salvador Sobral selected" → "by Luísa, written for the competition, Salvador selected" per
MOS:SAMESURNAME
"the song he would like" → "the song that he would like"
Merge this with the below section since that counts as legacy and place that info about the sub-section; still keep the latter here, though.
Done
European Union Songbook
Remove wikilink on love song
""Amar pelos dois" was the most" → "The song was the most" as you mentioned the title one sentence ago
Done
Use in media
Look at what I said above; still make these changes as well, though.
""Amar pelos dois" generated" → "The track generated"
"theme, "Amar pelos dois" is" → "theme, it is"
Done
Cover versions
Imgs need alt text
Remove the two Eurovision wikilinks on the first bullet point
Remove wikilink to Eurovision Song Contest 2017 on the second
Do this for 2018 on the fourth
Remove wikilink to talk show on bullet point five
Mention actor's nationality on seven
Remove second wikilink in this section to France's 2018 Eurovision Contest involvement
Do the same for any wikilinks to country involvements for years that have been wikilinked earlier in this section or elsewhere prior in the article; I am not going to point out each individual one as you can find them yourself.
Done except changing the alt text. Having descriptive alt text (woman in hat, etc) is not relevant to the inclusion of the photo. The caption states everything relevant, which is that they are photos of people who have covered the song. This is in line with alt text criteria.
Grk1011 (
talk)
21:39, 30 May 2020 (UTC)reply
Track listings
Good
Credits and personnel
Are you sure capitalisation is required for the roles enlisted?
Rather than having ref 101 invoked twice, invoke it before ref 102 and change the sentence to including being adapted from ESC Portugal website
Done
Awards
Place this directly after Critical reception section
Add ref at the end of the first para's last sentence
Second para looks good
Make this table sortable
Add a separate col for refs that is not sortable and puts them in the centre
Done
Charts
Good
Certifications
Are you sure a different certification table bottom shouldn't be used? Otherwise, looks good.
Done
Release history
Use bullet pointed list to separate digital download and streaming here
Good elsewise
Done
Notes
Good
References
Copyvio score is around 50%; this is too high and needs paraphrasing to fix it
Loads of these are missing accessdates; make sure that they are added
Date layout should be consistent throughout the refs with the English language "19 February 2017" style
Refs 21, 43 and 64 are all from an unreliable source in Twitter
Refs 82, 83 and 88 have the same issue with Facebook
There are other issues but I will wait until you have responded to my first comments, since the refs will be moved around for 100% and I don't want to create heavy confusion
Will name the further issues below
You still haven't added accessdates to quite a few of these
Some are missing the language parameter; add them for non-english refs
Refs 1, 45, 46, 47, 57, 58, 61 and 62 should solely cite the publisher
Change ref 2 to solely citing the publisher and remove "on Apple Music" from the titles, while only wikilink to the publisher once
Ref 3 should cite as a publisher instead
Ref 4 should not cite the publisher
Remove ref 6's publisher
Ref 8 should cite as a publisher instead
20 minutes should not have the second word capitalised on ref 9
Remove ref 10's publisher
Ditto for ref 11
Ref 12 should cite as a publisher instead
Remove ref 13's publisher
Ditto for refs 14, 15, 16 and 17
Change RTP to the publisher for refs 18, 38, 41 and 67, with no wiklinks
Ref 20 should cite as a publisher instead
Ditto for ref 21
Ref 22 should include a date in the title or add the parameter
On hold but will have comments about the refs after you have sorted out everything; the other issues are a lot bigger, that's why I'm putting this to the current state! --
Kyle Peake (
talk)
20:07, 23 May 2020 (UTC)reply
I believe the references are the only items I have left. I need to work on the access dates a bit more. They won't move around now if you want to start to look through them? I'm trying to finish this up for you so you can make the 31 May deadline. Regarding the copyright score, it's just the eurovision.tv website because of the quote by the song's writer as well as "Eurovision" a few dozen times. The compare button shows no correlation.
Grk1011 (
talk)
01:44, 28 May 2020 (UTC)reply
@
Kyle Peake: I have made the above changes to the references and a few more that were related to your comments that may have been missed. The social media sources are ok per
WP:SELFSOURCE. Is there a guideline that says otherwise? I'll reformat them with dates, titles, etc when I hear back. Thanks.
Grk1011 (
talk)
19:45, 29 May 2020 (UTC)reply
Grk1011 Have looked again, and a few other refs are missing accessdates; check that all have them apart from ones like liner notes that don't cite that parameter at all. --
Kyle Peake (
talk)
14:26, 31 May 2020 (UTC)reply