In the Armament section, it says "Each gun had 90 rounds". Does this mean the ship carried enough rounds for each gun to get 90 shots?
In the Background section, it says "In 1907, Japan was nominally halfway". What is meant by "nominally halfway"?
Background section, it says "This battleship, the battleship version of the Kongo-class battlecruisers," "This battleship, the battleship" is redundant and clumsy.
Construction section, it says "Akagi was the first ship of the class to be laid down, as she was on 6 December 1920". "As she was" is clumsy.
Construction section, it says "converting up to than two capital ships", which is poor grammar, I believe.
Thanks for your comments. I fixed some of the wording issues you pointed out above; yes, each gun had 90 shells (900 main-battery shells in total), and I'm assuming that the "nominal" bit refers to the fact that while the Japanese navy had half of the required 8/8 fleet in service or under construction, all of the ships were made obsolete (thus necessitating a whole new set of ships) with the advent of the dreadnought type ships (but
the ed17 wrote that section of the article, so he'd probably want to confirm my assessment).
Parsecboy (
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03:03, 29 January 2009 (UTC)reply
In the Armament section, it says "Each gun had 90 rounds". Does this mean the ship carried enough rounds for each gun to get 90 shots?
In the Background section, it says "In 1907, Japan was nominally halfway". What is meant by "nominally halfway"?
Background section, it says "This battleship, the battleship version of the Kongo-class battlecruisers," "This battleship, the battleship" is redundant and clumsy.
Construction section, it says "Akagi was the first ship of the class to be laid down, as she was on 6 December 1920". "As she was" is clumsy.
Construction section, it says "converting up to than two capital ships", which is poor grammar, I believe.
Thanks for your comments. I fixed some of the wording issues you pointed out above; yes, each gun had 90 shells (900 main-battery shells in total), and I'm assuming that the "nominal" bit refers to the fact that while the Japanese navy had half of the required 8/8 fleet in service or under construction, all of the ships were made obsolete (thus necessitating a whole new set of ships) with the advent of the dreadnought type ships (but
the ed17 wrote that section of the article, so he'd probably want to confirm my assessment).
Parsecboy (
talk)
03:03, 29 January 2009 (UTC)reply