The music and legacy sections could probably be better summarized in the lede.
Done --G2
Early life
Remove note 'a' and incorporate it into prose. I see this throughout the article.
Done --G2
Later life
"They did not have any children." Citation?
text removed, no source --G2
Remove note 'c' and incorporate it into prose.
Done --G2
Music
"His symphonies end on common major or minor chords—but tonality, which depends on some sense, however attenuated, of tonal progression, is found mostly in slower sections: e.g., the openings and endings of his 6th and 7th symphonies, and the end of his 9th." Awkward phrasing and punctuation. This sentence could definitely be improved or perhaps be split into two sentences.
Done --G2
"Pettersson began composing songs and smaller chamber works in the 1930s." Citation?
See works in Discography/Other works section. --G2
Legacy
Remove note 'h' and incorporate it into prose, perhaps along the lines of "The four orchestral sketches "... das Gesegnete, das Verfluchte" (1991) by Peter Ruzicka are a tribute Pettersson's life and work, quoting sketches of his unfinished Symphony No. 17."
Many sentences are dull and monotone, with paragraphs consisting of small one/two phrase sentences. As
SlimVirgin used to say, "make him three-dimensional for the reader". I'm afraid the prose will weigh down on criteria no. 1 rather severely.
I've done my best. English is not my mother language.
In terms of broadness, I see that time periods and events in his life take enormous leaps forward. I understand that there is a lack of scholarly attention to Pettersson, but I hope you've summarized everything available. AGF on broadness.
The article has no ongoing discussions or edit wars, and is free from bias.
Have you tried adding a picture of Pettersson? I understand that copyright is a bummer but you could tag it as fair use.
Unfortunately, the prose needs a lot of work for a more professional standard. I understand that you are not a native user but this is an incredibly important criteria.
You could use an image of Pettersson without permission if it is
fair use.
Overall:
Pass/Fail:
Sorry
Grimes2. I know it is extremely frustrating (also considering that the article failed GAN before), but if I was completely honest, I'm not entirely sure if this article is of GA quality. The fact that the most comprehensive book isn't cited once, as well as the monotone prose and big leaps in time periods due to lack of broadness weighs down on the criteria quite a bit. I want you to acknowledge the aforementioned comments and link books to Internet archive if available. Ping me and I'll ponder the decision.
Wretchskull (
talk)
00:16, 31 December 2021 (UTC)reply
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Grimes2: Strange... the bot gave the wrong message. I updated one of the talk page parameters and added the article to the GA list. I'll wait an hour and see if the bot adds the icon by itself. If not, I'll do it.
Wretchskull (
talk)
13:34, 31 December 2021 (UTC)reply
This is, as I understand it, a known bug in Legobot which occurs when an article has previously failed a good article review, and then passes a subsequent review. --
Usernameunique (
talk)
18:11, 31 December 2021 (UTC)reply
The music and legacy sections could probably be better summarized in the lede.
Done --G2
Early life
Remove note 'a' and incorporate it into prose. I see this throughout the article.
Done --G2
Later life
"They did not have any children." Citation?
text removed, no source --G2
Remove note 'c' and incorporate it into prose.
Done --G2
Music
"His symphonies end on common major or minor chords—but tonality, which depends on some sense, however attenuated, of tonal progression, is found mostly in slower sections: e.g., the openings and endings of his 6th and 7th symphonies, and the end of his 9th." Awkward phrasing and punctuation. This sentence could definitely be improved or perhaps be split into two sentences.
Done --G2
"Pettersson began composing songs and smaller chamber works in the 1930s." Citation?
See works in Discography/Other works section. --G2
Legacy
Remove note 'h' and incorporate it into prose, perhaps along the lines of "The four orchestral sketches "... das Gesegnete, das Verfluchte" (1991) by Peter Ruzicka are a tribute Pettersson's life and work, quoting sketches of his unfinished Symphony No. 17."
Many sentences are dull and monotone, with paragraphs consisting of small one/two phrase sentences. As
SlimVirgin used to say, "make him three-dimensional for the reader". I'm afraid the prose will weigh down on criteria no. 1 rather severely.
I've done my best. English is not my mother language.
In terms of broadness, I see that time periods and events in his life take enormous leaps forward. I understand that there is a lack of scholarly attention to Pettersson, but I hope you've summarized everything available. AGF on broadness.
The article has no ongoing discussions or edit wars, and is free from bias.
Have you tried adding a picture of Pettersson? I understand that copyright is a bummer but you could tag it as fair use.
Unfortunately, the prose needs a lot of work for a more professional standard. I understand that you are not a native user but this is an incredibly important criteria.
You could use an image of Pettersson without permission if it is
fair use.
Overall:
Pass/Fail:
Sorry
Grimes2. I know it is extremely frustrating (also considering that the article failed GAN before), but if I was completely honest, I'm not entirely sure if this article is of GA quality. The fact that the most comprehensive book isn't cited once, as well as the monotone prose and big leaps in time periods due to lack of broadness weighs down on the criteria quite a bit. I want you to acknowledge the aforementioned comments and link books to Internet archive if available. Ping me and I'll ponder the decision.
Wretchskull (
talk)
00:16, 31 December 2021 (UTC)reply
@
Grimes2: Strange... the bot gave the wrong message. I updated one of the talk page parameters and added the article to the GA list. I'll wait an hour and see if the bot adds the icon by itself. If not, I'll do it.
Wretchskull (
talk)
13:34, 31 December 2021 (UTC)reply
This is, as I understand it, a known bug in Legobot which occurs when an article has previously failed a good article review, and then passes a subsequent review. --
Usernameunique (
talk)
18:11, 31 December 2021 (UTC)reply