Please feel free to revert my copy-editing, especially if I've inadvertantly changed the meaning anywhere.
"In 1927, he entered the Faculty of Law" to a contemporay reader, this sounds like he became a professor, but unless I'm much mistaken this means he became a student; is it possible to clarify this?
Fixed
"He worked at criminal police" is there a reason this isn't "worked for the criminal police, and do we know when?
Fixed. I do not know the dates, another editor added it based on a Lithuanian language source which I do not understand.
"Polish resistance in Lithuania" is this linkable?
Redlinked
"investigated the death of Russian soldier Butayev" this could use a little more context; I'm a little lost as to what is going on here.
Apparently it is discussed at
Soviet ultimatum to Lithuania#Initial accusations, which I linked. This was added by another editor and I do not have access to the source to know what more it might say about the incident.
Not a big deal, but I don't especially like the use of "etc" in an encyclopedia article, especially when I'm not sure what else is being referred to.
Removed
I would specify that the OSI is a unit of the US DOJ, when first mentioned.
Added
"a "gross distortion" according to journalist Eric Lichtblau" this is a little ambiguous at the moment; the distortion could theoretically refer either to the CIA's claim or to the counter.
clarify
"Lithuanian Catholic church" is this linkable?
done
" in a cable from Berlin" "Berlin" in this period could mean many things; do we know who this came from?
I think it is being used as metonomy for some part of the West German government but it's not clear in the source.
A half sentence of explanation for what Section 340(a) did would help a lot.
done
Could you provide a little more explanation for what Yitzhak Arad was doing in the case?
Done
"Lithuania was slow to prosecute Lileikis" this seems like it contradicts the rest of that paragraph; perhaps "Lithuania was initially slow to prosecute Lileikis"?
Initially, Lithuania indicated that he would not be prosecuted, then it took them two years to file charges even though US prosecutors had already gathered the evidence. So I think that we can report what the source says about this being "slow."
Gimžauskas also settled in the US, according to the article; how did he end up back in Lithuania?
Explained in article
There's a few sources I'm a little hesitant about; I don't know that they're unreliable, but I'd like to check with you about them. They are; trialinternational; Delfi; and Dirva.
Trial International is an international NGO which advocates the prosecution of those who are guilty of serious international crimes. They are mentioned in
news articles and
statementswith Amnesty International and other similar orgs, so I think they're probably reliable enough. As for the other sources, I am not sure because I did not add them and do not understand Lithuanian. Hopefully
Renata3 would be willing to clarify.
Delfi is one of the most popular web portals in Lithuania. The stories were authored by
Baltic News Service. It's equivalent to CNN publishing an AP story. Dirva is a Lithuanian newspaper published in the United States. None of these sources are used to cite anything controversial -- just adding some undisputed details on his trial and death. P.S. pings don't work if there is no signature with the comment.
Renata (
talk)
21:36, 19 May 2020 (UTC)reply
The "Collaborator" in the image caption could use a link, I think, because collaborator in this context has a meaning very different from the usual meaning.
Everything looks good, but I'd like to wait on a response about the sources before passing this; some web news portals are fine, others are dreadful, and I know nothing about this one. Vanamonde (
Talk)22:39, 18 May 2020 (UTC)reply
Please feel free to revert my copy-editing, especially if I've inadvertantly changed the meaning anywhere.
"In 1927, he entered the Faculty of Law" to a contemporay reader, this sounds like he became a professor, but unless I'm much mistaken this means he became a student; is it possible to clarify this?
Fixed
"He worked at criminal police" is there a reason this isn't "worked for the criminal police, and do we know when?
Fixed. I do not know the dates, another editor added it based on a Lithuanian language source which I do not understand.
"Polish resistance in Lithuania" is this linkable?
Redlinked
"investigated the death of Russian soldier Butayev" this could use a little more context; I'm a little lost as to what is going on here.
Apparently it is discussed at
Soviet ultimatum to Lithuania#Initial accusations, which I linked. This was added by another editor and I do not have access to the source to know what more it might say about the incident.
Not a big deal, but I don't especially like the use of "etc" in an encyclopedia article, especially when I'm not sure what else is being referred to.
Removed
I would specify that the OSI is a unit of the US DOJ, when first mentioned.
Added
"a "gross distortion" according to journalist Eric Lichtblau" this is a little ambiguous at the moment; the distortion could theoretically refer either to the CIA's claim or to the counter.
clarify
"Lithuanian Catholic church" is this linkable?
done
" in a cable from Berlin" "Berlin" in this period could mean many things; do we know who this came from?
I think it is being used as metonomy for some part of the West German government but it's not clear in the source.
A half sentence of explanation for what Section 340(a) did would help a lot.
done
Could you provide a little more explanation for what Yitzhak Arad was doing in the case?
Done
"Lithuania was slow to prosecute Lileikis" this seems like it contradicts the rest of that paragraph; perhaps "Lithuania was initially slow to prosecute Lileikis"?
Initially, Lithuania indicated that he would not be prosecuted, then it took them two years to file charges even though US prosecutors had already gathered the evidence. So I think that we can report what the source says about this being "slow."
Gimžauskas also settled in the US, according to the article; how did he end up back in Lithuania?
Explained in article
There's a few sources I'm a little hesitant about; I don't know that they're unreliable, but I'd like to check with you about them. They are; trialinternational; Delfi; and Dirva.
Trial International is an international NGO which advocates the prosecution of those who are guilty of serious international crimes. They are mentioned in
news articles and
statementswith Amnesty International and other similar orgs, so I think they're probably reliable enough. As for the other sources, I am not sure because I did not add them and do not understand Lithuanian. Hopefully
Renata3 would be willing to clarify.
Delfi is one of the most popular web portals in Lithuania. The stories were authored by
Baltic News Service. It's equivalent to CNN publishing an AP story. Dirva is a Lithuanian newspaper published in the United States. None of these sources are used to cite anything controversial -- just adding some undisputed details on his trial and death. P.S. pings don't work if there is no signature with the comment.
Renata (
talk)
21:36, 19 May 2020 (UTC)reply
The "Collaborator" in the image caption could use a link, I think, because collaborator in this context has a meaning very different from the usual meaning.
Everything looks good, but I'd like to wait on a response about the sources before passing this; some web news portals are fine, others are dreadful, and I know nothing about this one. Vanamonde (
Talk)22:39, 18 May 2020 (UTC)reply