by the middle of the 14th century, the Cathar movement had been virtually extinguished What does this mean? Did some pockets survive? Is so, add this. ("virtually" sounds like a
WP:WEASEL word.)
They regarded water as unclean, and therefore refused to use it. Just for baptism, or for drinking and bathing? And what is meant by "unclean"?
Pope Innocent declared Raymond anathematized released all of his subjects from their oaths of obedience to him Grammatical issue here.
Carcassonne, préfecture of the department traversed by the Aude river What does this mean?
"Carsaconne" should be "Carcassonne" ? (three instances) (You also have "Carcassconne")
The article is supposed to be in British English, so:
"labeling" -> "labelling"
"favorite" -> "favourite"
"favor" -> "favour"
"vigor" -> "vigour"
"endeavor" -> "endeavour"
"defenses" -> "defences"
"combatting" should be "combating"
"monarchial" should be "monarchical"
"Massacre against the Albigensians" should be "of"
Suggest merging the first two paragraphs of the Genocide section to remove the one-sentence paragraph. (
MOS:PARAGRAPHS) (Also: the section flips between the past and present tense.)(Amd the break between the other two paragraphs doesn't seem logical.)
Also (and this is purely a matter of taste) I would swap the images of the Cathers being expelled from Carcassonne in 1209 with the map in the infobox, allowing the map to be made larger (and readable) with an upright=1.3 parameter.
I did as suggested for the first point, but not the second. I prefer to keep the image of the Cathars being expelled near the section about the events at Carcassonne. The map is more general and fits better in the infobox. I did, however, increase the size by a little bit.
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talk) 15:29, 1 December 2017 (UTC)reply
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Add access date to fn 19. Suggest formatting to match fn 92.
What does fn 82 refer to?
fn 91 is a book, so move it into the Bibliography and reformat the reference to match the other references. (And get rid of the capitals.)
fn 103 is a book, so move it into the Bibliography and reformat the reference to match the other references. And find the page number.
I couldn't find the page number for the last book, but I took care of everything else. I know that books in FAs are always supposed to include page numbers, and that it's always preferable to have them, but I don't think that missing one out of over 100 should result in a GA review failing.
Display name 99 (
talk) 15:29, 1 December 2017 (UTC)reply
by the middle of the 14th century, the Cathar movement had been virtually extinguished What does this mean? Did some pockets survive? Is so, add this. ("virtually" sounds like a
WP:WEASEL word.)
They regarded water as unclean, and therefore refused to use it. Just for baptism, or for drinking and bathing? And what is meant by "unclean"?
Pope Innocent declared Raymond anathematized released all of his subjects from their oaths of obedience to him Grammatical issue here.
Carcassonne, préfecture of the department traversed by the Aude river What does this mean?
"Carsaconne" should be "Carcassonne" ? (three instances) (You also have "Carcassconne")
The article is supposed to be in British English, so:
"labeling" -> "labelling"
"favorite" -> "favourite"
"favor" -> "favour"
"vigor" -> "vigour"
"endeavor" -> "endeavour"
"defenses" -> "defences"
"combatting" should be "combating"
"monarchial" should be "monarchical"
"Massacre against the Albigensians" should be "of"
Suggest merging the first two paragraphs of the Genocide section to remove the one-sentence paragraph. (
MOS:PARAGRAPHS) (Also: the section flips between the past and present tense.)(Amd the break between the other two paragraphs doesn't seem logical.)
Also (and this is purely a matter of taste) I would swap the images of the Cathers being expelled from Carcassonne in 1209 with the map in the infobox, allowing the map to be made larger (and readable) with an upright=1.3 parameter.
I did as suggested for the first point, but not the second. I prefer to keep the image of the Cathars being expelled near the section about the events at Carcassonne. The map is more general and fits better in the infobox. I did, however, increase the size by a little bit.
Display name 99 (
talk) 15:29, 1 December 2017 (UTC)reply
Sources
Add access date to fn 19. Suggest formatting to match fn 92.
What does fn 82 refer to?
fn 91 is a book, so move it into the Bibliography and reformat the reference to match the other references. (And get rid of the capitals.)
fn 103 is a book, so move it into the Bibliography and reformat the reference to match the other references. And find the page number.
I couldn't find the page number for the last book, but I took care of everything else. I know that books in FAs are always supposed to include page numbers, and that it's always preferable to have them, but I don't think that missing one out of over 100 should result in a GA review failing.
Display name 99 (
talk) 15:29, 1 December 2017 (UTC)reply