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GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:Al Thake/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: MWright96 ( talk · contribs) 21:47, 26 September 2021 (UTC) reply

Will review MWright96 (talk) 21:47, 26 September 2021 (UTC) reply

  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b ( MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a ( reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c ( OR):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a ( major aspects): b ( focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b ( appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:

Lead

  • The term English doesn't necessarily need to be wikilinked
  • I think the lead could be expanded a little with more relevant career statistics

Early life

  • Maybe wikilink baseball in this section since it is the first time the sport is mentioned in the prose?

Professional career

  • "In 1871, the National Association became the first professional baseball league. Thake joined the league in 1872 as a left fielder for the Brooklyn Atlantics." - maybe both of these sentences can be merged together

Death

  • "The New York Post reported that he was caught in fishing nets, while The New York Times reported that the current swept him away." - repetition of "reported"
  • Perhaps wikilink baseball fields
  • "On September 10, Thake's funeral was held at his mother's home. He was buried at Green-Wood Cemetery in Brooklyn." - these two sentences could be merged together

Career statistics and reputation

  • "Baseball historian Frank Russo writes," - perhaps add the book Russo mentions Thake in

Putting the review on hold to allow the nominator to address or query the points raised above MWright96 (talk) 08:43, 27 September 2021 (UTC) reply

Place of death

I don't know which newspaper this ran in, but a clipping has survived which states that Thake's body was found on a beach in Staten Island, not Brooklyn. He died while fishing near Fort Hamilton in Brooklyn, which is located near what is now known as the Verazzano Narrows. Timothy Horrigan ( talk) 15:26, 21 September 2023 (UTC) reply

From Wikipedia, the free encyclopedia

GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:Al Thake/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: MWright96 ( talk · contribs) 21:47, 26 September 2021 (UTC) reply

Will review MWright96 (talk) 21:47, 26 September 2021 (UTC) reply

  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b ( MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a ( reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c ( OR):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a ( major aspects): b ( focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b ( appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:

Lead

  • The term English doesn't necessarily need to be wikilinked
  • I think the lead could be expanded a little with more relevant career statistics

Early life

  • Maybe wikilink baseball in this section since it is the first time the sport is mentioned in the prose?

Professional career

  • "In 1871, the National Association became the first professional baseball league. Thake joined the league in 1872 as a left fielder for the Brooklyn Atlantics." - maybe both of these sentences can be merged together

Death

  • "The New York Post reported that he was caught in fishing nets, while The New York Times reported that the current swept him away." - repetition of "reported"
  • Perhaps wikilink baseball fields
  • "On September 10, Thake's funeral was held at his mother's home. He was buried at Green-Wood Cemetery in Brooklyn." - these two sentences could be merged together

Career statistics and reputation

  • "Baseball historian Frank Russo writes," - perhaps add the book Russo mentions Thake in

Putting the review on hold to allow the nominator to address or query the points raised above MWright96 (talk) 08:43, 27 September 2021 (UTC) reply

Place of death

I don't know which newspaper this ran in, but a clipping has survived which states that Thake's body was found on a beach in Staten Island, not Brooklyn. He died while fishing near Fort Hamilton in Brooklyn, which is located near what is now known as the Verazzano Narrows. Timothy Horrigan ( talk) 15:26, 21 September 2023 (UTC) reply


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