Two originals appear on the set, which were written by Aly & AJ with Armato and James -> I think you should tell us which they are
Well this is the lead and it is supposed to only summarize. If that were so then I would name all the Christmas carols too. I could see if just one song, but since more than one, I believe it should be left to the body.
It utilizes influences of pop, pop rock, ->It uses pop influence
Done.
and teen pop on Christmas music -> and?
The album received generally positive reviews, complimenting -> who complimented? you need to write critics
Done.
and peaked on the Top Holiday Albums chart at fourteen -> and peaked at # on the Holiday
Done
It was the second best-selling holiday album of 2006 -> The reference used in the body does not verify this in any way. I also don't see how its possible; it only peaked at number 78. According to
this source, the best-seller that year was Sarah McLachlan's which peaked at #7. I don't see how #2 that year could have that much of a gap.
Hmmm, that is interesting. But that's what the book said.
Well done, few more to fix. Also, you need to include page numbers in the book sources. Look at "All I Want for Christmas Is You" if you need help, its quite simple. Good job! :)--
CallMeNathan •
Talk2Me17:22, 25 November 2010 (UTC)reply
I've done everything except for the page numbers, because I cannot tell which page numbers there are because they are not present and pages do not appear in between the preview of it on Google Books. Candyo3216:16, 4 December 2010 (UTC)reply
Two originals appear on the set, which were written by Aly & AJ with Armato and James -> I think you should tell us which they are
Well this is the lead and it is supposed to only summarize. If that were so then I would name all the Christmas carols too. I could see if just one song, but since more than one, I believe it should be left to the body.
It utilizes influences of pop, pop rock, ->It uses pop influence
Done.
and teen pop on Christmas music -> and?
The album received generally positive reviews, complimenting -> who complimented? you need to write critics
Done.
and peaked on the Top Holiday Albums chart at fourteen -> and peaked at # on the Holiday
Done
It was the second best-selling holiday album of 2006 -> The reference used in the body does not verify this in any way. I also don't see how its possible; it only peaked at number 78. According to
this source, the best-seller that year was Sarah McLachlan's which peaked at #7. I don't see how #2 that year could have that much of a gap.
Hmmm, that is interesting. But that's what the book said.
Well done, few more to fix. Also, you need to include page numbers in the book sources. Look at "All I Want for Christmas Is You" if you need help, its quite simple. Good job! :)--
CallMeNathan •
Talk2Me17:22, 25 November 2010 (UTC)reply
I've done everything except for the page numbers, because I cannot tell which page numbers there are because they are not present and pages do not appear in between the preview of it on Google Books. Candyo3216:16, 4 December 2010 (UTC)reply