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Request has been posted at Wikipedia:WikiProject_Guild_of_Copy_Editors/Requests#Abu_Huzaifa_al-Kanadi.
I made an initial run over the text for basic grammar and punctuation, but there are some sentences that I don't feel confident adjusting. Will elaborate below.
Pelagic ( talk) 23:18, 23 June 2018 (UTC)
The article has “booked a flight from to Lahore to Istanbul from his Pakistani passport”. Did he require the passport to make the booking? In that case we would say “booked ... on his Pakistani passport”. But if the passport was only required to make the flight, but not to book it, then it would be better to write “flew from Lahore to Istanbul on [or using] his Pakistani passport”. Pelagic ( talk) 10:55, 28 June 2018 (UTC)
Goodale stated that it was the "opposition of keeping Canadians safe"
The phrase seems unlikely. Is it just a simple typo where "opposition" should be "opposite"? Could somebody confirm the quote from the cited source?
Alternately, there was a CBC article available online with a different quote.
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Request has been posted at Wikipedia:WikiProject_Guild_of_Copy_Editors/Requests#Abu_Huzaifa_al-Kanadi.
I made an initial run over the text for basic grammar and punctuation, but there are some sentences that I don't feel confident adjusting. Will elaborate below.
Pelagic ( talk) 23:18, 23 June 2018 (UTC)
The article has “booked a flight from to Lahore to Istanbul from his Pakistani passport”. Did he require the passport to make the booking? In that case we would say “booked ... on his Pakistani passport”. But if the passport was only required to make the flight, but not to book it, then it would be better to write “flew from Lahore to Istanbul on [or using] his Pakistani passport”. Pelagic ( talk) 10:55, 28 June 2018 (UTC)
Goodale stated that it was the "opposition of keeping Canadians safe"
The phrase seems unlikely. Is it just a simple typo where "opposition" should be "opposite"? Could somebody confirm the quote from the cited source?
Alternately, there was a CBC article available online with a different quote.