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the 'structure' section needs a lot of work, it is not really in english anf there is an excessive use of comma's and reads more like a list than a paragraph. Details could be fleshed out a bit more, and the long sentances broken up into shorter sentances containing more detail.
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more details will need to be added, for example why, was the regiment created? did they fight anywhere with distinction (were they the key to victory)?
the second paragraph needs a lot of work
there is also inadequate referencing
see this GA class article for ideas:
Special Air Service
but most regimental articles I have come across are at C class
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the 'structure' section needs a lot of work, it is not really in english anf there is an excessive use of comma's and reads more like a list than a paragraph. Details could be fleshed out a bit more, and the long sentances broken up into shorter sentances containing more detail.
For Example. current text:
Maybe change to:
more details will need to be added, for example why, was the regiment created? did they fight anywhere with distinction (were they the key to victory)?
the second paragraph needs a lot of work
there is also inadequate referencing
see this GA class article for ideas:
Special Air Service
but most regimental articles I have come across are at C class