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Reviewer: Vami IV ( talk · contribs) 09:37, 5 April 2020 (UTC)
In reviews I conduct, I may make small copyedits. These will only be limited to spelling and punctuation (removal of double spaces and such). I will only make substantive edits that change the flow and structure of the prose if I previously suggested and it is necessary. For replying to Reviewer comment, please use Done, Fixed, Added, Not done, Doing..., or Removed, followed by any comment you'd like to make. I will be crossing out my comments as they are redressed, and only mine. A detailed, section-by-section review will follow. — ♠Vami _IV†♠ 09:37, 5 April 2020 (UTC)
that is inspiredwas inspired.
as well as above the 18th and 22ndShorten "as well as" to "and".
it consists of a recessed double-height arch, with elaborately carved spandrels at the top of the arch.Consider "at its top".
these doorways are located within doorways topped by pediments and clocks.Replace the first "doorways" with something else.
"Twenty-six Broadway was once to oil what 1600 Pennsylvania Avenue [the White House] is to politics."Just use the White Houses's address to link the White House here.
every cent any of [Standard Oil's subsidiaries] made found its way to 26 Broadway"reads weird
After World War I, Walter C. TeagleWho?
(died 1928)Delete.
A third, the Urban Assembly School of Business for Young Women, is a high school serving grades 9-12.When did this open?
Starting in 2008, the PS 234 elementary school was supposed to have used [...] subsequently deemed "not appropriate for kindergartners"This would make this school not a current tenant. Shorten and send this sentence and its citation into "History"
[67]:540This is the only instance of this form of citation in the article. The [67] part also already has the page number(s).
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Reviewer: Vami IV ( talk · contribs) 09:37, 5 April 2020 (UTC)
In reviews I conduct, I may make small copyedits. These will only be limited to spelling and punctuation (removal of double spaces and such). I will only make substantive edits that change the flow and structure of the prose if I previously suggested and it is necessary. For replying to Reviewer comment, please use Done, Fixed, Added, Not done, Doing..., or Removed, followed by any comment you'd like to make. I will be crossing out my comments as they are redressed, and only mine. A detailed, section-by-section review will follow. — ♠Vami _IV†♠ 09:37, 5 April 2020 (UTC)
that is inspiredwas inspired.
as well as above the 18th and 22ndShorten "as well as" to "and".
it consists of a recessed double-height arch, with elaborately carved spandrels at the top of the arch.Consider "at its top".
these doorways are located within doorways topped by pediments and clocks.Replace the first "doorways" with something else.
"Twenty-six Broadway was once to oil what 1600 Pennsylvania Avenue [the White House] is to politics."Just use the White Houses's address to link the White House here.
every cent any of [Standard Oil's subsidiaries] made found its way to 26 Broadway"reads weird
After World War I, Walter C. TeagleWho?
(died 1928)Delete.
A third, the Urban Assembly School of Business for Young Women, is a high school serving grades 9-12.When did this open?
Starting in 2008, the PS 234 elementary school was supposed to have used [...] subsequently deemed "not appropriate for kindergartners"This would make this school not a current tenant. Shorten and send this sentence and its citation into "History"
[67]:540This is the only instance of this form of citation in the article. The [67] part also already has the page number(s).
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