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Reviewer: Mike Christie ( talk · contribs) 18:40, 18 August 2022 (UTC)
I'll review this.
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Images are appropriately tagged. Sources seem reliable as far as I can tell, but I can only spotcheck a few as they are mostly in Serbian.
The article needs a thorough copyedit. GA doesn't require high-quality prose, just clarity and grammatical correctness, but here the prose, in places, is bad enough that the meaning is unclear. I suspect a non-English-speaking primary author, since some of the problems are over the use of indefinite/definite articles, and others are related to the use of tenses. Some examples from the lead -- this is not an exhaustive list, even just for the lead:
Looking further down the article, there are tense errors in almost every paragraph. Some more oddities, just from one short section, as an example:
I suspect there's too much detail in the article. We get statement after statement from all parties, every section. Surely this could be summarized a bit? The reader doesn't need the blow-by-blow account of the daily events -- there must be thousands of words of statements and commentary available for every few days of the protests. Our job is to assemble that data into a coherent article. I'm also concerned about NPOV -- I have less ability to judge this, because I can't check the sources and I'm unfamiliar with the events themselves, but I see occasional instances of non-neutral language, such as the "Leading organizations" referred to above.
I'm going to fail this; there's too much to do here to manage at GAN. I would recommend reviewing for NPOV and seeing what can be summarized, and then working with a good copyeditor to clarify the language, before bringing it back here. Mike Christie ( talk - contribs - library) 22:17, 19 August 2022 (UTC)
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Reviewer: Mike Christie ( talk · contribs) 18:40, 18 August 2022 (UTC)
I'll review this.
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18:40, 18 August 2022 (UTC)
Images are appropriately tagged. Sources seem reliable as far as I can tell, but I can only spotcheck a few as they are mostly in Serbian.
The article needs a thorough copyedit. GA doesn't require high-quality prose, just clarity and grammatical correctness, but here the prose, in places, is bad enough that the meaning is unclear. I suspect a non-English-speaking primary author, since some of the problems are over the use of indefinite/definite articles, and others are related to the use of tenses. Some examples from the lead -- this is not an exhaustive list, even just for the lead:
Looking further down the article, there are tense errors in almost every paragraph. Some more oddities, just from one short section, as an example:
I suspect there's too much detail in the article. We get statement after statement from all parties, every section. Surely this could be summarized a bit? The reader doesn't need the blow-by-blow account of the daily events -- there must be thousands of words of statements and commentary available for every few days of the protests. Our job is to assemble that data into a coherent article. I'm also concerned about NPOV -- I have less ability to judge this, because I can't check the sources and I'm unfamiliar with the events themselves, but I see occasional instances of non-neutral language, such as the "Leading organizations" referred to above.
I'm going to fail this; there's too much to do here to manage at GAN. I would recommend reviewing for NPOV and seeing what can be summarized, and then working with a good copyeditor to clarify the language, before bringing it back here. Mike Christie ( talk - contribs - library) 22:17, 19 August 2022 (UTC)