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Reviewer: Hurricane Noah ( talk · contribs) 03:21, 3 July 2019 (UTC)
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Collectively, the tropical cyclones were responsible for at least 3,363 deaths – the most fatalities in a single season since 2005. Most of the season's damage was due to hurricanes Harvey, Irma, and Maria. Another notable hurricane, Nate, was the worst natural disaster in Costa Rican history. The names Harvey, Irma, Maria, and Nate were retired following the season due to the number of deaths and amount of damage they caused.I feel like this should come after the part about the number of storms. Noah Talk 02:51, 4 July 2019 (UTC)
and an unnamed tropical depressionShould say Tropical Depression Four since that is how one would refer to it. Noah Talk 02:47, 4 July 2019 (UTC)
Damagesplease make this damage throughout the article. There are three occurrences of "damages" from what I have seen. Noah Talk 02:51, 4 July 2019 (UTC)
After strengthening into a moderate tropical stormno such thing in this basin. Anyone familiar with the actual meaning of "moderate tropical storm" would be confused here. Noah Talk 02:47, 4 July 2019 (UTC)
Five hours after peaking in intensity with winds of 85 mph (140 km/h) and a pressure of 981 mbar (28.97 inHg) early on the following day, Franklin made landfall in Vega de Alatorre, Veracruz.This is just awkward and vague. Early on the following day could technically be anywhere between 00 and 06. Noah Talk 02:47, 4 July 2019 (UTC)
The cyclone rapidly weakened thereafter, and by 18:00 UTC on August 10, it dissipated as a tropical cyclone.I would avoid cyclone twice in the same sentence. Noah Talk 02:47, 4 July 2019 (UTC)
As the storm hit, severe floods occurred in Northern Ireland, with floodwaters reaching 4.9 ft (1.5 m), and over 100 people were rescued after being trapped by floodwaters overnight.The rescue is dependent on the flooding, so this sentence should be rephrased so it isnt as wordy... I will do more tomorrow night. Tired after a long work shift. Noah Talk 02:48, 4 July 2019 (UTC)
Harvey's remnants continued into the Bay of Campeche, where more conducive environmental conditions led to the re-designation of a tropical depression, around 12:00 UTC on August 23, and subsequent intensification into a tropical storm by 18:00 UTC that day.Remove the second comma and change "by 18:00 UTC that day" to six hours later. Noah Talk 00:25, 6 July 2019 (UTC)
attaining hurricane intensity by 18:00 UTC on August 24, Category 3 strength around 18:00 UTC on August 25, and Category 4 intensity by 00:00 UTC on August 26.Since the RI progressed rather quickly, is it nessecary to have Cat 3 mentioned since it hit Cat 4 just 6 hours later? Seems to me like too many category changes are mentioned. Noah Talk 00:25, 6 July 2019 (UTC)
The hurricane made landfall in Texas between Port Aransas and Port O'Connor, around 03:00 UTC on August 26Why is there a comma? Noah Talk 00:25, 6 July 2019 (UTC)
The storm gradually spun down, becoming a tropical stormSpun down and becoming contradict each other. Noah Talk 00:25, 6 July 2019 (UTC)
Precipitation peaked at 60.58 in (1,538.7 mm)round the mm to 4 sigfigs Noah Talk 00:25, 6 July 2019 (UTC)
A westward-moving tropical wave developed into a tropical depression just west of the Cape Verde Islands early on August 30. Six hours later, the depression became Tropical Storm Irma.
Location and timing are vague... better to mention an exact time and location for the TD. Also, these can be combined. Noah Talk 00:25, 6 July 2019 (UTC)
west central and southwestern portions of the state aloneCommas needed. Noah Talk 00:25, 6 July 2019 (UTC)
with the city of North Wildwood alone experienced about $2 million in damageexperiencing. Noah Talk 00:25, 6 July 2019 (UTC)
A woman in Asbury Park died after being caught in a rip current.How does one die from a rip current in a park? Noah Talk 00:25, 6 July 2019 (UTC)
intensified into Tropical Storm Nate early on October 5, just hours before it made landfall in northeastern Nicaragua.when exactly did it make landfall? The timing could be anywhere from 00-06 for formation of a TS with a landfall hours after those times. Noah Talk 02:38, 6 July 2019 (UTC)
Strong deep-layer south-southeasterly flowNeeds something before "strong" to start the sentence. Noah Talk 02:38, 6 July 2019 (UTC)
before striking Louisiana near the mouth of the Mississippi River early on October 8.How early are we talking? It has to be before 05:20 UTC, but it gives no clue as to how much time passed between the landfalls. Noah Talk 02:38, 6 July 2019 (UTC)
The storm left about $225 million in the United States. The bulk of the damage occurred in coastal Alabama.Should specify "in damage". Also, you can say "with the bulk occurring in ..." Noah Talk 02:38, 6 July 2019 (UTC)
Ophelia weakening early on October 15Add "began" and possibly "rapid" as well if it fits what actually happened (I assume it was rapid given the SSTs). Noah Talk 02:38, 6 July 2019 (UTC)
without electricity that portion of the United Kingdom alone.Add "in". Noah Talk 02:38, 6 July 2019 (UTC)
Tropical Storm Philippe reached its peak intensity of 40mph as recorded on Grand Cayman.Cut "tropical storm" since it was just mentioned. Where is the km/h conversion? Noah Talk 02:38, 6 July 2019 (UTC)
had developed sufficiently organized convection to be classified as a tropical depression.this is clunky. Noah Talk 02:38, 6 July 2019 (UTC)
I think I am done now. Thanks for the review, @ Hurricane Noah:!-- 12george1 ( talk) 02:52, 7 July 2019 (UTC)
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Collectively, the tropical cyclones were responsible for at least 3,363 deaths – the most fatalities in a single season since 2005. Most of the season's damage was due to hurricanes Harvey, Irma, and Maria. Another notable hurricane, Nate, was the worst natural disaster in Costa Rican history. The names Harvey, Irma, Maria, and Nate were retired following the season due to the number of deaths and amount of damage they caused.I feel like this should come after the part about the number of storms. Noah Talk 02:51, 4 July 2019 (UTC)
and an unnamed tropical depressionShould say Tropical Depression Four since that is how one would refer to it. Noah Talk 02:47, 4 July 2019 (UTC)
Damagesplease make this damage throughout the article. There are three occurrences of "damages" from what I have seen. Noah Talk 02:51, 4 July 2019 (UTC)
After strengthening into a moderate tropical stormno such thing in this basin. Anyone familiar with the actual meaning of "moderate tropical storm" would be confused here. Noah Talk 02:47, 4 July 2019 (UTC)
Five hours after peaking in intensity with winds of 85 mph (140 km/h) and a pressure of 981 mbar (28.97 inHg) early on the following day, Franklin made landfall in Vega de Alatorre, Veracruz.This is just awkward and vague. Early on the following day could technically be anywhere between 00 and 06. Noah Talk 02:47, 4 July 2019 (UTC)
The cyclone rapidly weakened thereafter, and by 18:00 UTC on August 10, it dissipated as a tropical cyclone.I would avoid cyclone twice in the same sentence. Noah Talk 02:47, 4 July 2019 (UTC)
As the storm hit, severe floods occurred in Northern Ireland, with floodwaters reaching 4.9 ft (1.5 m), and over 100 people were rescued after being trapped by floodwaters overnight.The rescue is dependent on the flooding, so this sentence should be rephrased so it isnt as wordy... I will do more tomorrow night. Tired after a long work shift. Noah Talk 02:48, 4 July 2019 (UTC)
Harvey's remnants continued into the Bay of Campeche, where more conducive environmental conditions led to the re-designation of a tropical depression, around 12:00 UTC on August 23, and subsequent intensification into a tropical storm by 18:00 UTC that day.Remove the second comma and change "by 18:00 UTC that day" to six hours later. Noah Talk 00:25, 6 July 2019 (UTC)
attaining hurricane intensity by 18:00 UTC on August 24, Category 3 strength around 18:00 UTC on August 25, and Category 4 intensity by 00:00 UTC on August 26.Since the RI progressed rather quickly, is it nessecary to have Cat 3 mentioned since it hit Cat 4 just 6 hours later? Seems to me like too many category changes are mentioned. Noah Talk 00:25, 6 July 2019 (UTC)
The hurricane made landfall in Texas between Port Aransas and Port O'Connor, around 03:00 UTC on August 26Why is there a comma? Noah Talk 00:25, 6 July 2019 (UTC)
The storm gradually spun down, becoming a tropical stormSpun down and becoming contradict each other. Noah Talk 00:25, 6 July 2019 (UTC)
Precipitation peaked at 60.58 in (1,538.7 mm)round the mm to 4 sigfigs Noah Talk 00:25, 6 July 2019 (UTC)
A westward-moving tropical wave developed into a tropical depression just west of the Cape Verde Islands early on August 30. Six hours later, the depression became Tropical Storm Irma.
Location and timing are vague... better to mention an exact time and location for the TD. Also, these can be combined. Noah Talk 00:25, 6 July 2019 (UTC)
west central and southwestern portions of the state aloneCommas needed. Noah Talk 00:25, 6 July 2019 (UTC)
with the city of North Wildwood alone experienced about $2 million in damageexperiencing. Noah Talk 00:25, 6 July 2019 (UTC)
A woman in Asbury Park died after being caught in a rip current.How does one die from a rip current in a park? Noah Talk 00:25, 6 July 2019 (UTC)
intensified into Tropical Storm Nate early on October 5, just hours before it made landfall in northeastern Nicaragua.when exactly did it make landfall? The timing could be anywhere from 00-06 for formation of a TS with a landfall hours after those times. Noah Talk 02:38, 6 July 2019 (UTC)
Strong deep-layer south-southeasterly flowNeeds something before "strong" to start the sentence. Noah Talk 02:38, 6 July 2019 (UTC)
before striking Louisiana near the mouth of the Mississippi River early on October 8.How early are we talking? It has to be before 05:20 UTC, but it gives no clue as to how much time passed between the landfalls. Noah Talk 02:38, 6 July 2019 (UTC)
The storm left about $225 million in the United States. The bulk of the damage occurred in coastal Alabama.Should specify "in damage". Also, you can say "with the bulk occurring in ..." Noah Talk 02:38, 6 July 2019 (UTC)
Ophelia weakening early on October 15Add "began" and possibly "rapid" as well if it fits what actually happened (I assume it was rapid given the SSTs). Noah Talk 02:38, 6 July 2019 (UTC)
without electricity that portion of the United Kingdom alone.Add "in". Noah Talk 02:38, 6 July 2019 (UTC)
Tropical Storm Philippe reached its peak intensity of 40mph as recorded on Grand Cayman.Cut "tropical storm" since it was just mentioned. Where is the km/h conversion? Noah Talk 02:38, 6 July 2019 (UTC)
had developed sufficiently organized convection to be classified as a tropical depression.this is clunky. Noah Talk 02:38, 6 July 2019 (UTC)
I think I am done now. Thanks for the review, @ Hurricane Noah:!-- 12george1 ( talk) 02:52, 7 July 2019 (UTC)