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Reviewer: Mz7 ( talk · contribs) 16:24, 11 March 2017 (UTC)
I will give this review a stab. Mz7 ( talk) 16:24, 11 March 2017 (UTC)
Overall, great work. The article certainly looks better than it did when it was first nominated for WP:ITN. The comments on article quality at the ITN discussion were quickly assuaged after you came along and improved it.
The Cinderella story of the tournament– is it appropriate to call Albus NoX Luna's performance in the group stage a "Cinderella story" in Wikipedia's voice? I'm not sure if it is subjective to call it this or not. If it is, I think it would need in-text attribution (i.e. "ESPN ESports writer Tyler Erzberger described Albus NoX Luna's performance as a 'Cinderella run'"). But I could also see it as an objective description of the situation: that Albus NoX Luna was not expected to advance, but they did.
To encourage new viewers to watch, Riot Games set up a second stream specifically for new viewers.– It's not clear from this sentence exactly how the second stream was different. Did the commentary explain things differently?
The original prize pool was $2.13 million contributed by Riot Games, and the final amount will be calculated after fan contributions stop on November 6.(emphasis mine) – needs to be updated, along with the sentence that follows it, as it is still written in future tense here.
best of one double round-robin format– I may be overlooking something here, but it's not clear what this means. I've never heard of "best of one" being a competition format – it implies that you only have to win one game in a series to win the series, in which case, it wouldn't be a series. I would suggest omitting the "best of one" and explaining a little more how a "double round robin" works. I'm gathering that each team plays with each other team in their group twice, and the two with the most victories in each group advance to the quarterfinals, with tiebreakers when there are equal victories. We could also consider adding a new section entirely dedicated to the competition format, if there's enough verifiable information available for it.
... and a successful defence of their 2015 title." – are we going to go with the British spelling "defence"? I thought I'd ask, since the subject is somewhat connected to America, but I'm not sure if it's enough for MOS:TIES.
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Mz7 ( talk) 23:34, 12 March 2017 (UTC)
I apologize as this may be a lot, and I don't want to give you too much (feel free to ignore that 7 day deadline). However, I should mention that the lead section could also be expanded a bit more details – for the wide majority of readers, the lead will be the only thing they read. As a result, it's important for it to provide a summary of all the main aspects of the topic. Perhaps you could add more information about the record-breaking prize pool to the lead and a brief mention of how the event influenced LA 2024's bid for the Olympics. Mz7 ( talk) 04:35, 14 March 2017 (UTC)
I think I've addressed most of these concerns. The tables and brackets could be prettier, and there could be more added to various sections (e.g. QF, SF), but I think this should be good enough for GA. Let me know if there's still additional or new points to cover. Thanks, ---- Patar knight - chat/ contributions 02:12, 20 March 2017 (UTC)
I came here by following a link from the main page 'Did you know?' section because I was intrigued by what sort of championship this is. Having read the intro I'm still none the wiser. Do I really have to follow another link to find out the most basic piece of information regarding this. In fact continuing to skim the first bit of the article I'm still in the dark. Why not say that League of Legends is a video game? This is yet another Wikipedia article written by and for people who already know all about it and which fails in the simplest of objectives of any encyclopedia. Far from being a good article it's a very poor one on this basis alone. If this were a video game review it would be getting one star. 212.159.76.165 ( talk) 11:30, 9 April 2017 (UTC)
Albus NoX having the Soviet flag looks weird. I suggest using the CIS flag, or alternatively the modern russian flag instead. Tmv23 ( talk) 10:53, 19 October 2017 (UTC)
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Reviewer: Mz7 ( talk · contribs) 16:24, 11 March 2017 (UTC)
I will give this review a stab. Mz7 ( talk) 16:24, 11 March 2017 (UTC)
Overall, great work. The article certainly looks better than it did when it was first nominated for WP:ITN. The comments on article quality at the ITN discussion were quickly assuaged after you came along and improved it.
The Cinderella story of the tournament– is it appropriate to call Albus NoX Luna's performance in the group stage a "Cinderella story" in Wikipedia's voice? I'm not sure if it is subjective to call it this or not. If it is, I think it would need in-text attribution (i.e. "ESPN ESports writer Tyler Erzberger described Albus NoX Luna's performance as a 'Cinderella run'"). But I could also see it as an objective description of the situation: that Albus NoX Luna was not expected to advance, but they did.
To encourage new viewers to watch, Riot Games set up a second stream specifically for new viewers.– It's not clear from this sentence exactly how the second stream was different. Did the commentary explain things differently?
The original prize pool was $2.13 million contributed by Riot Games, and the final amount will be calculated after fan contributions stop on November 6.(emphasis mine) – needs to be updated, along with the sentence that follows it, as it is still written in future tense here.
best of one double round-robin format– I may be overlooking something here, but it's not clear what this means. I've never heard of "best of one" being a competition format – it implies that you only have to win one game in a series to win the series, in which case, it wouldn't be a series. I would suggest omitting the "best of one" and explaining a little more how a "double round robin" works. I'm gathering that each team plays with each other team in their group twice, and the two with the most victories in each group advance to the quarterfinals, with tiebreakers when there are equal victories. We could also consider adding a new section entirely dedicated to the competition format, if there's enough verifiable information available for it.
... and a successful defence of their 2015 title." – are we going to go with the British spelling "defence"? I thought I'd ask, since the subject is somewhat connected to America, but I'm not sure if it's enough for MOS:TIES.
Discrepancies in the roster
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Mz7 ( talk) 23:34, 12 March 2017 (UTC)
I apologize as this may be a lot, and I don't want to give you too much (feel free to ignore that 7 day deadline). However, I should mention that the lead section could also be expanded a bit more details – for the wide majority of readers, the lead will be the only thing they read. As a result, it's important for it to provide a summary of all the main aspects of the topic. Perhaps you could add more information about the record-breaking prize pool to the lead and a brief mention of how the event influenced LA 2024's bid for the Olympics. Mz7 ( talk) 04:35, 14 March 2017 (UTC)
I think I've addressed most of these concerns. The tables and brackets could be prettier, and there could be more added to various sections (e.g. QF, SF), but I think this should be good enough for GA. Let me know if there's still additional or new points to cover. Thanks, ---- Patar knight - chat/ contributions 02:12, 20 March 2017 (UTC)
I came here by following a link from the main page 'Did you know?' section because I was intrigued by what sort of championship this is. Having read the intro I'm still none the wiser. Do I really have to follow another link to find out the most basic piece of information regarding this. In fact continuing to skim the first bit of the article I'm still in the dark. Why not say that League of Legends is a video game? This is yet another Wikipedia article written by and for people who already know all about it and which fails in the simplest of objectives of any encyclopedia. Far from being a good article it's a very poor one on this basis alone. If this were a video game review it would be getting one star. 212.159.76.165 ( talk) 11:30, 9 April 2017 (UTC)
Albus NoX having the Soviet flag looks weird. I suggest using the CIS flag, or alternatively the modern russian flag instead. Tmv23 ( talk) 10:53, 19 October 2017 (UTC)