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Reviewer: Miyagawa ( talk · contribs) 23:17, 12 August 2016 (UTC) reply


Grabbing this one for a review at some point over the weekend. Miyagawa ( talk) 23:17, 12 August 2016 (UTC) reply

  • Background: I thought initially that you might need to expand the first paragraph to explain the elimination format and the previous format, but in hindsight that'd get off topic really quickly, so I agree that you're right not to include it.
  • Just seen it's in qualifying anyway - the way you've included it works, so I wouldn't change it.
  • Free practice: " unable to place higher than sixth eventually" not sure that "eventually" is needed. I think you can drop it and just end the sentence at "sixth."
  • Qualifying: "he was qualified in last place" - drop the "was".
  • Just in case anyone is in any doubt (or skipped a line previously) change "his penalty meant" to "his penalty during practice meant"
  • Race: Link Kinetic energy recovery system in the line with Jenson Button retiring from the race.
  • Link Sauber and Marcus Ericsson
  • Post-race: Link to the Red Bull racing team

@ Miyagawa: All should be taken care of. Thanks for the review! Zwerg Nase ( talk) 17:16, 15 August 2016 (UTC) reply

Great, happy to promote now. Miyagawa ( talk) 17:39, 15 August 2016 (UTC) reply
From Wikipedia, the free encyclopedia

GA Review

Article ( | visual edit | history) · Article talk ( | history) · Watch

Reviewer: Miyagawa ( talk · contribs) 23:17, 12 August 2016 (UTC) reply


Grabbing this one for a review at some point over the weekend. Miyagawa ( talk) 23:17, 12 August 2016 (UTC) reply

  • Background: I thought initially that you might need to expand the first paragraph to explain the elimination format and the previous format, but in hindsight that'd get off topic really quickly, so I agree that you're right not to include it.
  • Just seen it's in qualifying anyway - the way you've included it works, so I wouldn't change it.
  • Free practice: " unable to place higher than sixth eventually" not sure that "eventually" is needed. I think you can drop it and just end the sentence at "sixth."
  • Qualifying: "he was qualified in last place" - drop the "was".
  • Just in case anyone is in any doubt (or skipped a line previously) change "his penalty meant" to "his penalty during practice meant"
  • Race: Link Kinetic energy recovery system in the line with Jenson Button retiring from the race.
  • Link Sauber and Marcus Ericsson
  • Post-race: Link to the Red Bull racing team

@ Miyagawa: All should be taken care of. Thanks for the review! Zwerg Nase ( talk) 17:16, 15 August 2016 (UTC) reply

Great, happy to promote now. Miyagawa ( talk) 17:39, 15 August 2016 (UTC) reply

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