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Two of five spot checks failed. There are copy changes, but fixing the spot checks issue is priority one. The refs were useful elsewhere, so I suspect misplaced refs at play?
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03:12, 27 August 2023 (UTC)reply
Sammi Brie, yes, misplaced refs were somewhat at play, just forgot to place the correct references. :P Anyway, I've fixed everything now, except for the two injuries in Peoria, which I've given a response to.
TailsWx (
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04:04, 27 August 2023 (UTC)reply
Copy changes
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This article might not need to recite the "2013 Midwestern United States floods" in the title directly; be more natural.
The Des Plaines river swelled to 10.92 feet (3,330 mm), where a local state of emergency was declared for the city of Des Plaines, Illinois. Reverse the order... "where" doesn't work with a distance
Five fatalities occurred, two each in Illinois and Indiana, and a fifth in Missouri. Try Five fatalities occurred: two each in Illinois and Indiana, with a fifth in Missouri.
A upper-level trough which was situated over the Great Lakes and Midwest regions moved into the Northeastern United States, before being replaced by a strong ridge of high pressure over the Southeastern United States. Remove comma (
User:Sammi Brie/Commas in sentences, CinS)
Two injuries occurred when their homes collapsed in Peoria Separate homes? Or two in the same home?
I'm honestly not sure. According to the source provided for the two injuries, the source states that two homes collapsed into the basement, but it does not specify if there were two people in the same home or one person in each house. I've at least clarified that two homes collapsed, but again, the source does not clarify or specify how many people were in each house when they collapsed.
TailsWx (
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04:04, 27 August 2023 (UTC)reply
However, temporary levees prevented significant flood damage, though Fargo mayor Dennis Walaker recalled after the flood event "Four floods in the last five years. That's extremely unusual."
Split the sentence. Add a comma after "flood event".
17: Heavy rains have drenched the Windy City this month, leading to its soggiest April on record. Through yesterday, 8.54 inches had fallen at O’Hare International passing the 8.33 inches recorded in 1933.Y
27: The second sentence it's used in works. But it doesn't validate.
43: Residents in North Dakota are bracing for flooding, too, as the overflowing Red River flows toward Fargo. The city has begun a three-day push to truck sandbags into low-lying areas. Police cars are escorting the semi-trailer trucks as they head to the locations, CNN affiliate KVLY reported. Conditions could get worse: Additional rain could speed up the melting of snow, making the river rise even faster.Y
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The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
Two of five spot checks failed. There are copy changes, but fixing the spot checks issue is priority one. The refs were useful elsewhere, so I suspect misplaced refs at play?
Sammi Brie (she/her •
t •
c)
03:12, 27 August 2023 (UTC)reply
Sammi Brie, yes, misplaced refs were somewhat at play, just forgot to place the correct references. :P Anyway, I've fixed everything now, except for the two injuries in Peoria, which I've given a response to.
TailsWx (
they/them) ⚧
04:04, 27 August 2023 (UTC)reply
Copy changes
Lead
This article might not need to recite the "2013 Midwestern United States floods" in the title directly; be more natural.
The Des Plaines river swelled to 10.92 feet (3,330 mm), where a local state of emergency was declared for the city of Des Plaines, Illinois. Reverse the order... "where" doesn't work with a distance
Five fatalities occurred, two each in Illinois and Indiana, and a fifth in Missouri. Try Five fatalities occurred: two each in Illinois and Indiana, with a fifth in Missouri.
A upper-level trough which was situated over the Great Lakes and Midwest regions moved into the Northeastern United States, before being replaced by a strong ridge of high pressure over the Southeastern United States. Remove comma (
User:Sammi Brie/Commas in sentences, CinS)
Two injuries occurred when their homes collapsed in Peoria Separate homes? Or two in the same home?
I'm honestly not sure. According to the source provided for the two injuries, the source states that two homes collapsed into the basement, but it does not specify if there were two people in the same home or one person in each house. I've at least clarified that two homes collapsed, but again, the source does not clarify or specify how many people were in each house when they collapsed.
TailsWx (
they/them) ⚧
04:04, 27 August 2023 (UTC)reply
However, temporary levees prevented significant flood damage, though Fargo mayor Dennis Walaker recalled after the flood event "Four floods in the last five years. That's extremely unusual."
Split the sentence. Add a comma after "flood event".
17: Heavy rains have drenched the Windy City this month, leading to its soggiest April on record. Through yesterday, 8.54 inches had fallen at O’Hare International passing the 8.33 inches recorded in 1933.Y
27: The second sentence it's used in works. But it doesn't validate.
43: Residents in North Dakota are bracing for flooding, too, as the overflowing Red River flows toward Fargo. The city has begun a three-day push to truck sandbags into low-lying areas. Police cars are escorting the semi-trailer trucks as they head to the locations, CNN affiliate KVLY reported. Conditions could get worse: Additional rain could speed up the melting of snow, making the river rise even faster.Y
Images
There are five images, all with good captions. Three are PD-USGov, and the other two are CC-licensed. Encouragement: Add alt text.
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.