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Reviewer: Editoneer ( talk · contribs) 17:35, 3 March 2021 (UTC)
Revolutionary People's Liberation Party/Frontis? It seems their ideology is marxist, but I don't know what "marxist" mean, so what is this party's idea about bringing People's Liberation back in Turkey by committing bombings?
a fire was opened on the police, I believe we should replace a word from there to get a hint that the fire is actually a gunshot... or do you mean like a fire in the sense of somebody being an arsonist?
that did not comply with the stop warning of the police teams, I thought the plan was that they wanted to enter the police station and bombed themselves.. what made them suspicious that the police wanted to stop them?
located at the entrance of the Gazi neighborhood, Does the police "gatekeep" entrances of neighborhoods for safety reasons or is something beforehand that caused the policemen to be there? And... Turkish neighborhoods has an entrance?
the taxi stopped after crashing into the pavement.Did the car crashed into the surface of the road?
the woman trying to escape was injured in Gaziosmanpaşa.Is she the driver or the other one from the "one of two men"? And why is she trying to escape if she's part of a suicide bombing?
At 11:00 (UTC+03:00) local time on 11 September 2012AM or PM?
he reached the x-ray device at the entrance door. There he threw a grenade inside, but it did not explode.He threw the grena inside the x-ray device or inside the establishment? Did it open pre-maturely or the x-ray isn't connected to the door?
75th Anniversary Police Station, the police stations in general? (Considering the capitalizations) or of that specific police station? If so shouldn't it be "The 7th anniversary of the police station?"
the sound of hand gunshots were heardwhat are hand gunshots?
Losses and Damages---> Aftermath
died on the road to hospital.---> died on the road to the hospital.
died on the road to hospital.Did he give testimony to his co-workers?
Investigation and assailant profile---> Investigation
Gazi Cemetery, why is cemetery capitalized?
pressure-acting and piece-effect, pressure-acting means that it acts on the pressure put upon press the button? And what is "piece-effect"?
condemned the attack3x, to condemn somebody it means to sentence, so how did they punish the dead?
The article is good but it has problems but it's not that bad, I'm leaving this to you and then to the second reviewer, thanks. Editoneer ( talk) 19:28, 3 March 2021 (UTC)
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Revolutionary People's Liberation Party/Frontis? It seems their ideology is marxist, but I don't know what "marxist" mean, so what is this party's idea about bringing People's Liberation back in Turkey by committing bombings?
a fire was opened on the police, I believe we should replace a word from there to get a hint that the fire is actually a gunshot... or do you mean like a fire in the sense of somebody being an arsonist?
that did not comply with the stop warning of the police teams, I thought the plan was that they wanted to enter the police station and bombed themselves.. what made them suspicious that the police wanted to stop them?
located at the entrance of the Gazi neighborhood, Does the police "gatekeep" entrances of neighborhoods for safety reasons or is something beforehand that caused the policemen to be there? And... Turkish neighborhoods has an entrance?
the taxi stopped after crashing into the pavement.Did the car crashed into the surface of the road?
the woman trying to escape was injured in Gaziosmanpaşa.Is she the driver or the other one from the "one of two men"? And why is she trying to escape if she's part of a suicide bombing?
At 11:00 (UTC+03:00) local time on 11 September 2012AM or PM?
he reached the x-ray device at the entrance door. There he threw a grenade inside, but it did not explode.He threw the grena inside the x-ray device or inside the establishment? Did it open pre-maturely or the x-ray isn't connected to the door?
75th Anniversary Police Station, the police stations in general? (Considering the capitalizations) or of that specific police station? If so shouldn't it be "The 7th anniversary of the police station?"
the sound of hand gunshots were heardwhat are hand gunshots?
Losses and Damages---> Aftermath
died on the road to hospital.---> died on the road to the hospital.
died on the road to hospital.Did he give testimony to his co-workers?
Investigation and assailant profile---> Investigation
Gazi Cemetery, why is cemetery capitalized?
pressure-acting and piece-effect, pressure-acting means that it acts on the pressure put upon press the button? And what is "piece-effect"?
condemned the attack3x, to condemn somebody it means to sentence, so how did they punish the dead?
The article is good but it has problems but it's not that bad, I'm leaving this to you and then to the second reviewer, thanks. Editoneer ( talk) 19:28, 3 March 2021 (UTC)