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Reviewer: Kpgjhpjm ( talk · contribs) 13:13, 4 January 2019 (UTC)
@ Kpgjhpjm: Three weeks have now passed since the review has opened without any comments. Has any progress been made on the review outside of this site? MWright96 (talk) 15:14, 25 January 2019 (UTC)
Lead
- before 280,000 spectators. --> before a crowd of 280,000 spectators
- retook the lead from Kahne on the next lap. Burton led the most laps out of any one else (87) --> retook the lead from Kahne on the next lap and led the most laps out of any one else (87)
Background
- No issues
Practice and qualifying
- two on Friday and Saturday - Needs to be reworded .
- damaged; he was transported - Replace the semicolon with and
- The crash meant Sorenson went into a back-up car - Needs to reworded
Race
- when he hit wall avoiding Sadler --> when he hit the wall trying to avoid Sadler .
- he rested --> he came to rest .
- Kenny Wallace staggered his stop --> What is meant by that .
- It means that the pit stop was arranged so that it did not occur at the same time as the others. MWright96 (talk) 09:18, 21 February 2019 (UTC)
Post-race
- No issues
Comments
@ MWright96: I made some Copyedits and the review is complete . Kpg jhp jm 08:24, 21 February 2019 (UTC)
- @ Kpgjhpjm: Thank you yet again for another review. All of the points raised above have been addressed and have made some other unrelated edits to improve the prose. MWright96 (talk) 09:18, 21 February 2019 (UTC)
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Reviewer: Kpgjhpjm ( talk · contribs) 13:13, 4 January 2019 (UTC)
@ Kpgjhpjm: Three weeks have now passed since the review has opened without any comments. Has any progress been made on the review outside of this site? MWright96 (talk) 15:14, 25 January 2019 (UTC)
Lead
- before 280,000 spectators. --> before a crowd of 280,000 spectators
- retook the lead from Kahne on the next lap. Burton led the most laps out of any one else (87) --> retook the lead from Kahne on the next lap and led the most laps out of any one else (87)
Background
- No issues
Practice and qualifying
- two on Friday and Saturday - Needs to be reworded .
- damaged; he was transported - Replace the semicolon with and
- The crash meant Sorenson went into a back-up car - Needs to reworded
Race
- when he hit wall avoiding Sadler --> when he hit the wall trying to avoid Sadler .
- he rested --> he came to rest .
- Kenny Wallace staggered his stop --> What is meant by that .
- It means that the pit stop was arranged so that it did not occur at the same time as the others. MWright96 (talk) 09:18, 21 February 2019 (UTC)
Post-race
- No issues
Comments
@ MWright96: I made some Copyedits and the review is complete . Kpg jhp jm 08:24, 21 February 2019 (UTC)
- @ Kpgjhpjm: Thank you yet again for another review. All of the points raised above have been addressed and have made some other unrelated edits to improve the prose. MWright96 (talk) 09:18, 21 February 2019 (UTC)