Reviewer:Yellow Evan (
talk·contribs) 18:36, 25 May 2013 (UTC)
Because I want 2002 worldwide GT to happen, and the fact that I just put a GAN up, and the fact that this one of the few non-ATL GAn's up right now written by someone other than YE, I will review this article.
YEPacificHurricanereply
"The 2002-03 South-West Indian Ocean cyclone season was among the earliest and latest seasons, lasting from September to May, as well as one of the most active." look weird the way it is "The 2002-03 South-West Indian Ocean cyclone season was among the longest lasting as well as one of the most active in the
South-West Indian ocean."
YEPacificHurricane 18:36, 25 May 2013 (UTC)reply
"In January of 2003, Severe Tropical Storm Ebula continued the steady activity, forming in the eastern portion of the basin." why are you mentioning every storm?
YEPacificHurricane 18:36, 25 May 2013 (UTC)reply
"simultaneous tropical cyclones in the Indian Ocean, of which three in the basin." link to
tropical cyclones :P
YEPacificHurricane 18:36, 25 May 2013 (UTC)reply
"Cyclone Hape formed shortly thereafter," see above. There is no need to mention every storm. Imagine what an EPAC season article would look like if we did.
YEPacificHurricane 18:36, 25 May 2013 (UTC)reply
There isn't enough additional info to fill out the lede. I couldn't find many reports on the season (such as why it was so active, any broad information), so I tried out a different format. --♫
Hurricanehink (
talk) 00:38, 26 May 2013 (UTC)reply
" Lastly, Cyclone Manou was one only the sixth May tropical cyclones on record, making a rare landfall in southeastern Madagascar, killing 89 people and destroying thousands of houses." m "one".
YEPacificHurricane 18:36, 25 May 2013 (UTC)reply
"becoming the most damaging in the country in 50 years.[9]" most damaging what? basketball? WP editor?
YEPacificHurricane 19:12, 25 May 2013 (UTC)reply
Well, the whole sentence is "Nationwide, the storm left 375 families homeless and damaged crop fields, becoming the most damaging in the country in 50 years." - so I think it's clear, personally. --♫
Hurricanehink (
talk) 00:38, 26 May 2013 (UTC)reply
"The landfall area does not usually experience tropical cyclones, and damage in Mozambique was minimal.[14]" you are making it sound like it hit Mozambique here. I'd reverse the order of the sentence to "In all, damage in Mozambique was minimal. Upon making landfall in Tanzania, it struck an area that does not usually experience tropical cyclones, where there were unofficial reports that Atang killed several fishermen and caused heavy rainfall with wind gusts to 148 km/h (92 mph).[11]"
YEPacificHurricane 19:12, 25 May 2013 (UTC)reply
The source implies a Mozambique landfall, and actually refers to northern Mozambique rarely getting TC's. Does that make sense then? --♫
Hurricanehink (
talk) 00:38, 26 May 2013 (UTC)reply
"and Boura passed just north of St. Brandon on November 19, producing 54.5 mm (2.15 in) of rainfall and wind gusts to 106 km/h (66 mph).[11][15]" "to" to "of".
YEPacificHurricane 19:12, 25 May 2013 (UTC)reply
"After turning to the northeast on November 25, Boura dissipated a day later to the north of Madagascar.[15]" no need for "to the", especially given you use it earlier.
YEPacificHurricane 19:12, 25 May 2013 (UTC)reply
"For several days in mid-December, tropical cyclone forecast models anticipated a storm to form " why is "a" part of the wikilink.
YEPacificHurricane 19:12, 25 May 2013 (UTC)reply
"The storm initially threatened to strike Mauritius, but were minimal due to the island" what was minimal? effects on Mauritius?
YEPacificHurricane 19:12, 25 May 2013 (UTC)reply
There is overlinking in Delfina's section, I assume you likely did it first, but you don't match the consistency you do wit the rest of the article.
YEPacificHurricane 19:12, 25 May 2013 (UTC)reply
Anywhere in particular that you'd like? There aren't all that many landmasses in the SWIO, so it would get redundant saying that it formed X km from Diego Garcia or Rodrigues. ♫
Hurricanehink (
talk) 00:38, 26 May 2013 (UTC)reply
" and later that day MFR upgraded the system to Tropical Storm Fari" is it me or should there be a comma here?
YEPacificHurricane 19:12, 25 May 2013 (UTC)reply
Believe it or not, I couldn't find anything. Minimal in RW, LN, or GN. ♫
Hurricanehink (
talk) 00:38, 26 May 2013 (UTC)reply
"Subsequently, Gerry began weakening due to increasing wind shear, with the eye became disorganized." "became" to "becoming".
YEPacificHurricane 19:12, 25 May 2013 (UTC)reply
"Early on April 12, Luma became extratropical as it merged with an approaching cold front.[45]" link to
front (meteorology) here since this seems to be its first mention.
YEPacificHurricane 19:12, 25 May 2013 (UTC)reply
Reviewer:Yellow Evan (
talk·contribs) 18:36, 25 May 2013 (UTC)
Because I want 2002 worldwide GT to happen, and the fact that I just put a GAN up, and the fact that this one of the few non-ATL GAn's up right now written by someone other than YE, I will review this article.
YEPacificHurricanereply
"The 2002-03 South-West Indian Ocean cyclone season was among the earliest and latest seasons, lasting from September to May, as well as one of the most active." look weird the way it is "The 2002-03 South-West Indian Ocean cyclone season was among the longest lasting as well as one of the most active in the
South-West Indian ocean."
YEPacificHurricane 18:36, 25 May 2013 (UTC)reply
"In January of 2003, Severe Tropical Storm Ebula continued the steady activity, forming in the eastern portion of the basin." why are you mentioning every storm?
YEPacificHurricane 18:36, 25 May 2013 (UTC)reply
"simultaneous tropical cyclones in the Indian Ocean, of which three in the basin." link to
tropical cyclones :P
YEPacificHurricane 18:36, 25 May 2013 (UTC)reply
"Cyclone Hape formed shortly thereafter," see above. There is no need to mention every storm. Imagine what an EPAC season article would look like if we did.
YEPacificHurricane 18:36, 25 May 2013 (UTC)reply
There isn't enough additional info to fill out the lede. I couldn't find many reports on the season (such as why it was so active, any broad information), so I tried out a different format. --♫
Hurricanehink (
talk) 00:38, 26 May 2013 (UTC)reply
" Lastly, Cyclone Manou was one only the sixth May tropical cyclones on record, making a rare landfall in southeastern Madagascar, killing 89 people and destroying thousands of houses." m "one".
YEPacificHurricane 18:36, 25 May 2013 (UTC)reply
"becoming the most damaging in the country in 50 years.[9]" most damaging what? basketball? WP editor?
YEPacificHurricane 19:12, 25 May 2013 (UTC)reply
Well, the whole sentence is "Nationwide, the storm left 375 families homeless and damaged crop fields, becoming the most damaging in the country in 50 years." - so I think it's clear, personally. --♫
Hurricanehink (
talk) 00:38, 26 May 2013 (UTC)reply
"The landfall area does not usually experience tropical cyclones, and damage in Mozambique was minimal.[14]" you are making it sound like it hit Mozambique here. I'd reverse the order of the sentence to "In all, damage in Mozambique was minimal. Upon making landfall in Tanzania, it struck an area that does not usually experience tropical cyclones, where there were unofficial reports that Atang killed several fishermen and caused heavy rainfall with wind gusts to 148 km/h (92 mph).[11]"
YEPacificHurricane 19:12, 25 May 2013 (UTC)reply
The source implies a Mozambique landfall, and actually refers to northern Mozambique rarely getting TC's. Does that make sense then? --♫
Hurricanehink (
talk) 00:38, 26 May 2013 (UTC)reply
"and Boura passed just north of St. Brandon on November 19, producing 54.5 mm (2.15 in) of rainfall and wind gusts to 106 km/h (66 mph).[11][15]" "to" to "of".
YEPacificHurricane 19:12, 25 May 2013 (UTC)reply
"After turning to the northeast on November 25, Boura dissipated a day later to the north of Madagascar.[15]" no need for "to the", especially given you use it earlier.
YEPacificHurricane 19:12, 25 May 2013 (UTC)reply
"For several days in mid-December, tropical cyclone forecast models anticipated a storm to form " why is "a" part of the wikilink.
YEPacificHurricane 19:12, 25 May 2013 (UTC)reply
"The storm initially threatened to strike Mauritius, but were minimal due to the island" what was minimal? effects on Mauritius?
YEPacificHurricane 19:12, 25 May 2013 (UTC)reply
There is overlinking in Delfina's section, I assume you likely did it first, but you don't match the consistency you do wit the rest of the article.
YEPacificHurricane 19:12, 25 May 2013 (UTC)reply
Anywhere in particular that you'd like? There aren't all that many landmasses in the SWIO, so it would get redundant saying that it formed X km from Diego Garcia or Rodrigues. ♫
Hurricanehink (
talk) 00:38, 26 May 2013 (UTC)reply
" and later that day MFR upgraded the system to Tropical Storm Fari" is it me or should there be a comma here?
YEPacificHurricane 19:12, 25 May 2013 (UTC)reply
Believe it or not, I couldn't find anything. Minimal in RW, LN, or GN. ♫
Hurricanehink (
talk) 00:38, 26 May 2013 (UTC)reply
"Subsequently, Gerry began weakening due to increasing wind shear, with the eye became disorganized." "became" to "becoming".
YEPacificHurricane 19:12, 25 May 2013 (UTC)reply
"Early on April 12, Luma became extratropical as it merged with an approaching cold front.[45]" link to
front (meteorology) here since this seems to be its first mention.
YEPacificHurricane 19:12, 25 May 2013 (UTC)reply