The storms section strikes mhttp://en.wikipedia.org/?title=Talk:1975_Pacific_hurricane_season/GA1&action=edite as a bit odd. Why not put that info in the section in the lede?
For Hurricane Agatha, the phrasing is a bit awkward. "Although Agatha passed close to mainland Mexico while weakening,[9] it caused no known impact in that country.[7]" Why not write it as "Although Agatha passed close to Mexico as it weakened, no impact is known to have been caused."
"...taking its multi-million dollar cargo of 71 containers of canned tuna with it."—"Containers with canned tuna" sounds weird, as you aren't very clear. Do you mean those containers were the cans, or the containers have cans of tuna in them? If the second one, what type of container was it?
For Tropical Storm Bridget, you wrote "...accelerating as it turned to the northwest, then west, and then southwesterly." The phrasing, again, is weird.
For Hurricane Carlotta, you are writing a really short sentence here: "It became a hurricane on July 3." Why not add in the next sentence? "It became a hurricane on July 3, and ultimately peaked as a Category 3 hurricane."
"Hurricane Carlotta was first major hurricane, Category 3 or higher, of the season." You already linked the SSHS page, which should explain what a major hurricane is, so I don't think you need to explain what intensity a major hurricane is. But I'm not sure, really, about what you should do with this sentence.
For Hurricane Denise, you say "headed west to northwestward." I don't get what that means. Do you mean it first headed west, then traveled northwestward, or do you mean to say west-northwestward?
"...upgraded into Tropical Storm Eleanor" You need a period there.
Done. 17:32, 15 October 2011 (UTC)
"Moved northwestward, and then northward, the system made landfall near Manzanillo on July 12." I'd suggest rewording to "The tropical storm moved northwestward, and later curved northward. The system made landfall near Manzanillo on July 12."
Incorporated your suggestion. 17:32, 15 October 2011 (UTC)
For Tropical Storm Hilary, you say "Based on this, this system was classified as Tropical Depression Nine on August 13." Why not use "based on these circumstances..."
I don't see any need to make the change. 17:32, 15 October 2011 (UTC)
For Hurricane Ilsa, you say "from a weather system"—what kind of weather system? A broad area of low-pressure?
For Hurricane Jewel, you say that Jewel was a hurricane for only six hours, the minimum possible time. That's not true, but you're speaking advisory-wise; try saying that it was only a hurricane for six hours.
For Hurricane Katrina...grammar, grammar, grammar. "tropical Storm" should be "tropical storm" and "September 2, No damage" should be "September 2, no damage"
Fixed. 17:32, 15 October 2011 (UTC)
For the unnamed Pacific Northwest hurricane, link to
cold-core low.
Wikilinked per request. 17:32, 15 October 2011 (UTC)
For Hurricane Lily, the section reads "000
UTC"—I think you mean 0000 UTC :)
The first sentence of the section is awkward; maybe you could phrase it like "Reports of wind and rain near
Acapulco suggested a tropical depression..."
For Tropical Storm Nanette, the phrasing is strange again, maybe you could try "On September 28, a system developed into a tropical depression, simultaneously with Tropical Storm Monica."
For Hurricane Olivia, the section says "...thunderstorms south of Mexico and then strengthened into a tropical storm"—try "...thunderstorms south of Mexico, later strengthening into a tropical storm."
In the tropical cyclone naming section, the article reads "...from the west Pacific's typhoon list"—that makes me thing you're talking about a list of typhoons. Maybe try "...from the naming list of Pacific typhoons."
Immediately, I see a problem in the Hurricane Agatha section. There's practically no pre-tropical cyclonegenisis. Though elsewhere, the article looks fine.
The storms section strikes mhttp://en.wikipedia.org/?title=Talk:1975_Pacific_hurricane_season/GA1&action=edite as a bit odd. Why not put that info in the section in the lede?
For Hurricane Agatha, the phrasing is a bit awkward. "Although Agatha passed close to mainland Mexico while weakening,[9] it caused no known impact in that country.[7]" Why not write it as "Although Agatha passed close to Mexico as it weakened, no impact is known to have been caused."
"...taking its multi-million dollar cargo of 71 containers of canned tuna with it."—"Containers with canned tuna" sounds weird, as you aren't very clear. Do you mean those containers were the cans, or the containers have cans of tuna in them? If the second one, what type of container was it?
For Tropical Storm Bridget, you wrote "...accelerating as it turned to the northwest, then west, and then southwesterly." The phrasing, again, is weird.
For Hurricane Carlotta, you are writing a really short sentence here: "It became a hurricane on July 3." Why not add in the next sentence? "It became a hurricane on July 3, and ultimately peaked as a Category 3 hurricane."
"Hurricane Carlotta was first major hurricane, Category 3 or higher, of the season." You already linked the SSHS page, which should explain what a major hurricane is, so I don't think you need to explain what intensity a major hurricane is. But I'm not sure, really, about what you should do with this sentence.
For Hurricane Denise, you say "headed west to northwestward." I don't get what that means. Do you mean it first headed west, then traveled northwestward, or do you mean to say west-northwestward?
"...upgraded into Tropical Storm Eleanor" You need a period there.
Done. 17:32, 15 October 2011 (UTC)
"Moved northwestward, and then northward, the system made landfall near Manzanillo on July 12." I'd suggest rewording to "The tropical storm moved northwestward, and later curved northward. The system made landfall near Manzanillo on July 12."
Incorporated your suggestion. 17:32, 15 October 2011 (UTC)
For Tropical Storm Hilary, you say "Based on this, this system was classified as Tropical Depression Nine on August 13." Why not use "based on these circumstances..."
I don't see any need to make the change. 17:32, 15 October 2011 (UTC)
For Hurricane Ilsa, you say "from a weather system"—what kind of weather system? A broad area of low-pressure?
For Hurricane Jewel, you say that Jewel was a hurricane for only six hours, the minimum possible time. That's not true, but you're speaking advisory-wise; try saying that it was only a hurricane for six hours.
For Hurricane Katrina...grammar, grammar, grammar. "tropical Storm" should be "tropical storm" and "September 2, No damage" should be "September 2, no damage"
Fixed. 17:32, 15 October 2011 (UTC)
For the unnamed Pacific Northwest hurricane, link to
cold-core low.
Wikilinked per request. 17:32, 15 October 2011 (UTC)
For Hurricane Lily, the section reads "000
UTC"—I think you mean 0000 UTC :)
The first sentence of the section is awkward; maybe you could phrase it like "Reports of wind and rain near
Acapulco suggested a tropical depression..."
For Tropical Storm Nanette, the phrasing is strange again, maybe you could try "On September 28, a system developed into a tropical depression, simultaneously with Tropical Storm Monica."
For Hurricane Olivia, the section says "...thunderstorms south of Mexico and then strengthened into a tropical storm"—try "...thunderstorms south of Mexico, later strengthening into a tropical storm."
In the tropical cyclone naming section, the article reads "...from the west Pacific's typhoon list"—that makes me thing you're talking about a list of typhoons. Maybe try "...from the naming list of Pacific typhoons."
Immediately, I see a problem in the Hurricane Agatha section. There's practically no pre-tropical cyclonegenisis. Though elsewhere, the article looks fine.