Hi Hurricanehink. I will be review this article today. I'm glad you did this season. Overall, it looks decent, but I do have a few issues that I'll need you to fix or address before I can decide to pass it.--
12george1 (
talk) 17:39, 2 September 2016 (UTC)reply
"Heidi – lost tropical characteristics on November 1." - The infobox says October 31
The death toll in the infobox is incorrect. Based on the info in the lede, there were at least 79 deaths
Ah yea, forgot to update that. ♫
Hurricanehink (
talk) 18:03, 3 September 2016 (UTC)reply
"The storm soon after transitioned into an extratropical cyclone," - I think that would read better like this "Soon after, the storm transitioned into an extratropical cyclone,"
Are the Beulah and Chloe sections in the correct order? If so, I think you may want to mention why. I know the answer to that, but others may not.
They are, and I state when each storm formed. Chloe formed before Beulah by 12 hours. How do you recommend making it more obvious to the readers? ♫
Hurricanehink (
talk) 18:03, 3 September 2016 (UTC)reply
Scratch that. I feel like it may be more complicated than just saying one was named before the other due to the TD designation situation.--
12george1 (
talk) 19:05, 3 September 2016 (UTC)reply
"it to Tropical Storm Ginger, in conjunction with data from Cabo Verde." - Were there land observations of tropical storm force winds? You should mention that if that's the case
Nah, NHC just said "observations", nothing about wind speeds. ♫
Hurricanehink (
talk) 18:03, 3 September 2016 (UTC)reply
"the name Beulah was retired and replaced with Beth in 1971." - Beth should not be in bold
Why is Robert Simpson referred to as R. H. Simpson in reference 4, but Bob Simpson in reference 17? I don't care about which of the three ways you refer to him, just that both are the same.
Forgot they were both the same when I wrote their names in :P ♫
Hurricanehink (
talk) 18:03, 3 September 2016 (UTC)reply
That should be it. You know the drill: fix or address these in a timely manner and I will pass this article.--
12george1 (
talk) 17:39, 2 September 2016 (UTC)reply
Hi Hurricanehink. I will be review this article today. I'm glad you did this season. Overall, it looks decent, but I do have a few issues that I'll need you to fix or address before I can decide to pass it.--
12george1 (
talk) 17:39, 2 September 2016 (UTC)reply
"Heidi – lost tropical characteristics on November 1." - The infobox says October 31
The death toll in the infobox is incorrect. Based on the info in the lede, there were at least 79 deaths
Ah yea, forgot to update that. ♫
Hurricanehink (
talk) 18:03, 3 September 2016 (UTC)reply
"The storm soon after transitioned into an extratropical cyclone," - I think that would read better like this "Soon after, the storm transitioned into an extratropical cyclone,"
Are the Beulah and Chloe sections in the correct order? If so, I think you may want to mention why. I know the answer to that, but others may not.
They are, and I state when each storm formed. Chloe formed before Beulah by 12 hours. How do you recommend making it more obvious to the readers? ♫
Hurricanehink (
talk) 18:03, 3 September 2016 (UTC)reply
Scratch that. I feel like it may be more complicated than just saying one was named before the other due to the TD designation situation.--
12george1 (
talk) 19:05, 3 September 2016 (UTC)reply
"it to Tropical Storm Ginger, in conjunction with data from Cabo Verde." - Were there land observations of tropical storm force winds? You should mention that if that's the case
Nah, NHC just said "observations", nothing about wind speeds. ♫
Hurricanehink (
talk) 18:03, 3 September 2016 (UTC)reply
"the name Beulah was retired and replaced with Beth in 1971." - Beth should not be in bold
Why is Robert Simpson referred to as R. H. Simpson in reference 4, but Bob Simpson in reference 17? I don't care about which of the three ways you refer to him, just that both are the same.
Forgot they were both the same when I wrote their names in :P ♫
Hurricanehink (
talk) 18:03, 3 September 2016 (UTC)reply
That should be it. You know the drill: fix or address these in a timely manner and I will pass this article.--
12george1 (
talk) 17:39, 2 September 2016 (UTC)reply