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GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:1912 Jamaica hurricane/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: CycloneIsaac ( talk · contribs) 03:28, 28 September 2016 (UTC) reply


I'll review it over the weekend.— CycloneIsaac ( Talk) 03:28, 28 September 2016 (UTC) reply

  • Isn't Cuba one of the areas impacted? It should be in the infobox.
  • "However, several banana plantations reported losses as high at 60% individually. The United Fruit Company sustained heavy losses due to the damage to banana trees." Can this sentence be merged?
  • "Conditions on the island worsened as the hurricane neared the coast, as railway lines were heavily damaged by the winds and rain." Probably shouldn't use "as" multiple times in a sentence.

That's all I've got for now in terms of prose.— CycloneIsaac ( Talk) 04:33, 24 October 2016 (UTC) reply

  • Fixed all of those. Thanks for reviewing-- 12george1 ( talk) 01:05, 1 November 2016 (UTC) reply
From Wikipedia, the free encyclopedia

GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:1912 Jamaica hurricane/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: CycloneIsaac ( talk · contribs) 03:28, 28 September 2016 (UTC) reply


I'll review it over the weekend.— CycloneIsaac ( Talk) 03:28, 28 September 2016 (UTC) reply

  • Isn't Cuba one of the areas impacted? It should be in the infobox.
  • "However, several banana plantations reported losses as high at 60% individually. The United Fruit Company sustained heavy losses due to the damage to banana trees." Can this sentence be merged?
  • "Conditions on the island worsened as the hurricane neared the coast, as railway lines were heavily damaged by the winds and rain." Probably shouldn't use "as" multiple times in a sentence.

That's all I've got for now in terms of prose.— CycloneIsaac ( Talk) 04:33, 24 October 2016 (UTC) reply

  • Fixed all of those. Thanks for reviewing-- 12george1 ( talk) 01:05, 1 November 2016 (UTC) reply

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