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I am going to review this article for possible GA status.
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Passes the threshold "immediate failure" criteria: No cleanup banners, no obvious copyright infringements, etc. Shearonink ( talk) 22:55, 31 December 2016 (UTC)
The phrasing of this sentence is somewhat redundant - the 15th Tank Corps fought in heavy fighting - and need to be redrafted.
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After doing another readthrough, the names of Mikhail Petrov & Vasily Koltsov need to be either listed in a column or divided by more spaces or maybe a comma...to a reader unfamiliar with these two men, the two names will probably seem to visually read as one person. Shearonink ( talk) 03:55, 14 January 2017 (UTC)
@ Kges1901: When I think I am almost done with a Review I always do a few more readthroughs to see if there's anything I have missed on previous passes though the material and after this last time I did find something... The Third Battle of Kharkov section has somewhat of an oddity in its timeline. The Battle is humming along and then in the last sentence "Koptsov himself was briefly captured on 2 March before dying of the severe wound he had received on 28 February." I think the narrative of what happened during the Battle would be improved if Koptsov's injury was introduced earlier in the paragraph. It just struck me this time... I wondered if he continued to command, if someone else received a battlefield promotion, if conditions were so chaotic that no one was available... anyway, if possible, maybe the reader should be introduced to the injury earlier. If you think this is something that doesn't need to be adjusted, then let's discuss it. Shearonink ( talk) 04:34, 15 January 2017 (UTC)
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I am going to review this article for possible GA status.
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GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria
Passes the threshold "immediate failure" criteria: No cleanup banners, no obvious copyright infringements, etc. Shearonink ( talk) 22:55, 31 December 2016 (UTC)
The phrasing of this sentence is somewhat redundant - the 15th Tank Corps fought in heavy fighting - and need to be redrafted.
Shearonink (
talk) 04:47, 12 January 2017 (UTC)
After doing another readthrough, the names of Mikhail Petrov & Vasily Koltsov need to be either listed in a column or divided by more spaces or maybe a comma...to a reader unfamiliar with these two men, the two names will probably seem to visually read as one person. Shearonink ( talk) 03:55, 14 January 2017 (UTC)
@ Kges1901: When I think I am almost done with a Review I always do a few more readthroughs to see if there's anything I have missed on previous passes though the material and after this last time I did find something... The Third Battle of Kharkov section has somewhat of an oddity in its timeline. The Battle is humming along and then in the last sentence "Koptsov himself was briefly captured on 2 March before dying of the severe wound he had received on 28 February." I think the narrative of what happened during the Battle would be improved if Koptsov's injury was introduced earlier in the paragraph. It just struck me this time... I wondered if he continued to command, if someone else received a battlefield promotion, if conditions were so chaotic that no one was available... anyway, if possible, maybe the reader should be introduced to the injury earlier. If you think this is something that doesn't need to be adjusted, then let's discuss it. Shearonink ( talk) 04:34, 15 January 2017 (UTC)