00:1800:18, 23 July 2024diffhist+4
m
Lillehammer affair
change "a Moroccan waiter and brother of the French musician Chico Bouchikhi" to "a Moroccan waiter and the brother of the French musician Chico Bouchikhi". "Brother" needs its own article; otherwise we're calling him "a Moroccan brother of the French musician Chico Bouchikhi", which is ridiculous.current
19 July 2024
00:2400:24, 19 July 2024diffhist−1
Paul Philippe Cret
Cret was not a Philadelphian. He was Lyonnais. But he lived and worked in Philadelphia, so he was a Philadelphia architect.current
14:4114:41, 4 July 2024diffhist−2
Elio Chacón
→'¡La tengo!': remove unwanted commas. We aren't trying to say that Yo La Tengo are the ONLY band. So we need "Yo La Tengo" to modify "band", rather than being in apposition. Also, edited graf 2 of the section to use Chacón's name rather than a pronoun for the first mention of the paragraphcurrent
16:3716:37, 29 June 2024diffhist−13
Atlantic (yacht)
It seems clear that the text "(yacht designer)" was not meant to be displayed, in this sentence that already says that Hoyt designed the yacht, but rather as disambiguation in the title of a future article about Hoyt. But how many Frederick Maxfield Hoyts are there? [None, so far, on Wikipedia.] I made the undisambiguated name a link, which a future editor may wish to undo. But, either way, we don't need to explain that the yacht was designed by a yacht designer.current
18:4518:45, 26 June 2024diffhist−5
Pamela Smart
→Early life: Use simple past to describe events of the subject's college years in the section about her college years. Past perfect is for events that took place before the time being discussed.
18:3118:31, 26 June 2024diffhist−134
Oaks Cloister
copy-edit lede; correct spelling of "capitol"; correct comma usage; correct coordinates (we were off by more than a mile!)
18:1918:19, 26 June 2024diffhist0
Oaks Cloister
→State Historical marker (2005): Spell "capitol" correctly, and abbreviate Pennsylvania "Pa.", both as on the marker. (https://www.google.com/maps/@40.0289004,-75.1854371,3a,15y,346.12h,83.43t/data=!3m7!1e1!3m5!1s7Q2iyZXVGKQnlau-H4xXmA!2e0!6shttps:%2F%2Fstreetviewpixels-pa.googleapis.com%2Fv1%2Fthumbnail%3Fpanoid%3D7Q2iyZXVGKQnlau-H4xXmA%26cb_client%3Dmaps_sv.tactile.gps%26w%3D203%26h%3D100%26yaw%3D342.9089%26pitch%3D0%26thumbfov%3D100!7i16384!8i8192?hl=en&coh=205409&entry=ttu).
20:4320:43, 19 June 2024diffhist−35
Quintipartite Deed
→Keith Line: Removing the clause "which created the two territories". It is not necessary to include this aside explaining what the Quintipartite Deed was, in the context of this article about the Quintipartite Deed.current
00:1800:18, 23 July 2024diffhist+4
m
Lillehammer affair
change "a Moroccan waiter and brother of the French musician Chico Bouchikhi" to "a Moroccan waiter and the brother of the French musician Chico Bouchikhi". "Brother" needs its own article; otherwise we're calling him "a Moroccan brother of the French musician Chico Bouchikhi", which is ridiculous.current
19 July 2024
00:2400:24, 19 July 2024diffhist−1
Paul Philippe Cret
Cret was not a Philadelphian. He was Lyonnais. But he lived and worked in Philadelphia, so he was a Philadelphia architect.current
14:4114:41, 4 July 2024diffhist−2
Elio Chacón
→'¡La tengo!': remove unwanted commas. We aren't trying to say that Yo La Tengo are the ONLY band. So we need "Yo La Tengo" to modify "band", rather than being in apposition. Also, edited graf 2 of the section to use Chacón's name rather than a pronoun for the first mention of the paragraphcurrent
16:3716:37, 29 June 2024diffhist−13
Atlantic (yacht)
It seems clear that the text "(yacht designer)" was not meant to be displayed, in this sentence that already says that Hoyt designed the yacht, but rather as disambiguation in the title of a future article about Hoyt. But how many Frederick Maxfield Hoyts are there? [None, so far, on Wikipedia.] I made the undisambiguated name a link, which a future editor may wish to undo. But, either way, we don't need to explain that the yacht was designed by a yacht designer.current
18:4518:45, 26 June 2024diffhist−5
Pamela Smart
→Early life: Use simple past to describe events of the subject's college years in the section about her college years. Past perfect is for events that took place before the time being discussed.
18:3118:31, 26 June 2024diffhist−134
Oaks Cloister
copy-edit lede; correct spelling of "capitol"; correct comma usage; correct coordinates (we were off by more than a mile!)
18:1918:19, 26 June 2024diffhist0
Oaks Cloister
→State Historical marker (2005): Spell "capitol" correctly, and abbreviate Pennsylvania "Pa.", both as on the marker. (https://www.google.com/maps/@40.0289004,-75.1854371,3a,15y,346.12h,83.43t/data=!3m7!1e1!3m5!1s7Q2iyZXVGKQnlau-H4xXmA!2e0!6shttps:%2F%2Fstreetviewpixels-pa.googleapis.com%2Fv1%2Fthumbnail%3Fpanoid%3D7Q2iyZXVGKQnlau-H4xXmA%26cb_client%3Dmaps_sv.tactile.gps%26w%3D203%26h%3D100%26yaw%3D342.9089%26pitch%3D0%26thumbfov%3D100!7i16384!8i8192?hl=en&coh=205409&entry=ttu).
20:4320:43, 19 June 2024diffhist−35
Quintipartite Deed
→Keith Line: Removing the clause "which created the two territories". It is not necessary to include this aside explaining what the Quintipartite Deed was, in the context of this article about the Quintipartite Deed.current