22:1422:14, 26 February 2019diffhist−6
Sikhism in Canada
The second paragraph of 2.4.1 said that Operation Bluestar "had to be launched." This is obviously unacceptable, even if attributable to lazy writing - Operation Bluestar WAS launched, whether or not it was necessary is not what we're here to determine. I have changed the phrasing accordingly.Tag: Visual edit
23:5823:58, 18 September 2017diffhist+329
Denmark Vessey
I made some grammatical/spelling corrections, added Buy Muy Drugs to "career," added a couple details about Buy Muy Drugs to "discography," and rephrased the final line of "career" so as to seem less personal.Tag: Visual edit
7 September 2017
20:3720:37, 7 September 2017diffhist+1
m
National Party (South Africa)
Alright, so, basically, the last line of the first paragraph gave the year in which the NP dissolved as "8888," an obvious mistake. I don't know anything about the NP, but based on what's said elsewherei n the article, I changed it to 1997.Tag: Visual edit
17:2817:28, 31 May 2017diffhist−4
m
Strawberry Jam
Removed the second "the" in "AllMusic also wrote a positive review of the album, feeling that Strawberry Jam was the band's "the most primal yet most sophisticated record... to date."" It now reads coherently.Tag: Visual edit
22:1422:14, 26 February 2019diffhist−6
Sikhism in Canada
The second paragraph of 2.4.1 said that Operation Bluestar "had to be launched." This is obviously unacceptable, even if attributable to lazy writing - Operation Bluestar WAS launched, whether or not it was necessary is not what we're here to determine. I have changed the phrasing accordingly.Tag: Visual edit
23:5823:58, 18 September 2017diffhist+329
Denmark Vessey
I made some grammatical/spelling corrections, added Buy Muy Drugs to "career," added a couple details about Buy Muy Drugs to "discography," and rephrased the final line of "career" so as to seem less personal.Tag: Visual edit
7 September 2017
20:3720:37, 7 September 2017diffhist+1
m
National Party (South Africa)
Alright, so, basically, the last line of the first paragraph gave the year in which the NP dissolved as "8888," an obvious mistake. I don't know anything about the NP, but based on what's said elsewherei n the article, I changed it to 1997.Tag: Visual edit
17:2817:28, 31 May 2017diffhist−4
m
Strawberry Jam
Removed the second "the" in "AllMusic also wrote a positive review of the album, feeling that Strawberry Jam was the band's "the most primal yet most sophisticated record... to date."" It now reads coherently.Tag: Visual edit